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    I'm 15 and began writing this book this is my first chapter . could anyone be kind to read and tell me what you think?

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    Wow this is beautiful. Deep and personal. Also you'd have to get the grammar checked properly. Im not sure how your going to continue this, but I see that writer spark in you! I wish you the very best of luck in your writers journey, and I hope to read more of this young protagonists story
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