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    Hi I was wondering if someone could give me some constructive criticism and mark my paragraph? It is quite short but I’d like to know how to improve thank you.

    How does Priestley successfully present the Birling’s in a negative way?

    Throughout An Inspector Calls, Priestley successfully presents the Birling’s in a negative way by the significant use of dramatic irony. The use of dramatic irony throughout Mr Birling’s speech helps emphasise the arrogance of his character which reflects on his family. During his speech in act one, Mr Birling talks about the Titanic. When he states,
    “The titanic unsinkable, absolutely unsinkable” it makes the audience think that he is conceited. The repetition of the word unsinkable makes him look daft and immodest as we in the audience know that the titanic did in fact sink. It adds to his arrogance - thus presenting the family in a negative way.
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    If possible avoid using the word negative because it’s a bit vague .
    Why does it make the audience think he is conceited ?
    What about the other Birling’s how are they presented in a negative way ?
    Analyse the word “unsinkable “ what does it mean ? What does it connote ?
    I think another quotation that you could use to show his arrogance is “ I’m talking as a hard-headed , practical man of business . And I say there isn’t a chance of war . To be honest there’s a lot in this act that could be used to show his arrogance . Using the end of the play would also be good because even though Mr Birling finds out that a girl has just died all he cares about is the scandal that will follow and the impact it will have on his family . I hope that helps
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    (Original post by Aqua_shade)
    If possible avoid using the word negative because it’s a bit vague .
    Why does it make the audience think he is conceited ?
    What about the other Birling’s how are they presented in a negative way ?
    Analyse the word “unsinkable “ what does it mean ? What does it connote ?
    I think another quotation that you could use to show his arrogance is “ I’m talking as a hard-headed , practical man of business . And I say there isn’t a chance of war . To be honest there’s a lot in this act that could be used to show his arrogance . Using the end of the play would also be good because even though Mr Birling finds out that a girl has just died all he cares about is the scandal that will follow and the impact it will have on his family . I hope that helps
    Thank you for the feedback!!
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    (Original post by ishamiah_)
    Hi I was wondering if someone could give me some constructive criticism and mark my paragraph? It is quite short but I’d like to know how to improve thank you.

    How does Priestly successfully present the Birling’s in a negative way?

    Throughout An Inspector Calls, Priestly successfully presents the Birling’s in a negative way by the significant use of dramatic irony. The use of dramatic irony throughout Mr Birling’s speech helps emphasise the arrogance of his character which reflects on his family. During his speech in act one, Mr Birling talks about the Titanic. When he states,
    “The titanic unsinkable, absolutely unsinkable” it makes the audience think that he is conceited. The repetition of the word unsinkable makes him look daft and immodest as we in the audience know that the titanic did in fact sink. It adds to his arrogance - thus presenting the family in a negative way.
    The mention of the Titanic being unsinkable not only makes him look conceited but oblivious. The use of dramatic irony emphasises that.
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    (Original post by sharri.coco)
    The mention of the Titanic being unsinkable not only makes him look conceited but oblivious. The use of dramatic irony emphasises that.
    Thanks
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    Also talk about the other dramatic irony such as the war and the context at that time: how that played a huge part in the play
    (Original post by sharri.coco)
    The mention of the Titanic being unsinkable not only makes him look conceited but oblivious. The use of dramatic irony emphasises that.
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    (Original post by profytofficial)
    Also talk about the other dramatic irony such as the war and the context at that time: how that played a huge part in the play
    Okay thank you
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    Are you doing AQA by any chance?
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    Okay thank you
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    Hi,
    I know you already got loads of feedback on your paragraph but I'd also say try to link it with the context as well, Priestley is intentionally trying to make Mr Birling look stupid as Priestley was a socialist so in making Mr Birling look stupid he is implying that capitalists are also stupid
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    (Original post by FailingBadly)
    Hi,
    I know you already got loads of feedback on your paragraph but I'd also say try to link it with the context as well, Priestley is intentionally trying to make Mr Birling look stupid as Priestley was a socialist so in making Mr Birling look stupid he is implying that capitalists are also stupid
    Thank you!!
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    im assuming ur doing edexcel, and if u are CONTEXT IS 50% OF THE MARKS, meaning ur para has to be like 60% context.
    make sure you embed your quotes for a good structure
    e.g. instead of saying: well your whole paragraph basically, say this:
    Throughout An Inspector Calls, Priestley (make sure you spell it correctly as SPaG is a big thing) successfully presents the Birlings as ignorant (notice i didnt use negative as thats too vague), this is evident throughout Mr Birling’s speech in act 1; he assures his family that the titanic is "unsinkable, absolutely unsinkable” (see how i embedded the quote, my teacher always told us not to introduce the quote, but use it as if its our own words) The play is set in 1912, two years before it sunk, but was performed on stage in 1945? (idk its been a year since ive written about this), meaning that the audience watching it know that the titanic did sink and that Mr Birling is wrong. Priestley did this to present Mr Birling to the audience as conceited and ignorant. this is especially seen through the use of repetition of the word unsinkable as it shows that Mr Birling truly believes that the titanic would not sink.(here comes context about Priestley). Priestley, a well known socialist (i think) did this to portray the birlings - and mr birling especially - as stupid (dont think this is the right word) and therefore implying tot he audience that capitalists... (finish this point). another way ignorance (which is my main point) is presented within the context of the play is (that part where mrs birling chats **** about the person that impregnated eva/daisy but turns out its eric that did it and shes like omg wtf, talk about context with women, marriage and things) (and basically style it out like that to get top marks)

    if any info is wrong then plz tell me so i can edit as i did this exam last yr so im a bit dusty lol
    if anyone wants to use this and add more or change things then go ahead
    good luck, inspector calls was my favourite to read and write about (bc it was the easiest in my opinion), and i hope anyone reading this gets good results for this exam!!
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    (Original post by ishamiah_)
    Hi I was wondering if someone could give me some constructive criticism and mark my paragraph? It is quite short but I’d like to know how to improve thank you.

    How does Priestly successfully present the Birling’s in a negative way?

    Throughout An Inspector Calls, Priestly successfully presents the Birling’s in a negative way by the significant use of dramatic irony. The use of dramatic irony throughout Mr Birling’s speech helps emphasise the arrogance of his character which reflects on his family. During his speech in act one, Mr Birling talks about the Titanic. When he states,
    “The titanic unsinkable, absolutely unsinkable” it makes the audience think that he is conceited. The repetition of the word unsinkable makes him look daft and immodest as we in the audience know that the titanic did in fact sink. It adds to his arrogance - thus presenting the family in a negative way.

    Try to embed the quote, it will make your paragraph worth more marks. Try to only mention the literary device in the second/third sentence, as it makes your point weaker. Your point seems kinda detached from the rest of the paragraph- You have only proven that Mr. Birling is conceited, you have not mentioned the other Birlings.

    Here's an example:
    Notably, Priestly conveys Mr. Birling in an arrogant and ignorant man. During his speech, Mr. Birling claims that the Titanic is a "unsinkable" as this play was performed in the 1940's, the audience was experiencing dramatic irony, as they knew this was not the case. This implies that Mr. Birling is clueless, and will use the impressiveness of an item to prove its worth, almost as he does for himself. Priestly was trying to show that the upper classes saw themselves as above the rest of society, however that their perceived success was as fragile as the Titanic. The audience is able to see this, as they are able to acknowledge that he is trusting of the Titanic. Therefore, Priestly was successful in displaying Mr. Birling as someone who is overly reliant on his position in society to prove his worth.
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    (Original post by hellohellothere)
    im assuming ur doing edexcel, and if u are CONTEXT IS 50% OF THE MARKS, meaning ur para has to be like 60% context.
    make sure you embed your quotes for a good structure
    e.g. instead of saying: well your whole paragraph basically, say this:
    Throughout An Inspector Calls, Priestley (make sure you spell it correctly as SPaG is a big thing) successfully presents the Birlings as ignorant (notice i didnt use negative as thats too vague), this is evident throughout Mr Birling’s speech in act 1; he assures his family that the titanic is "unsinkable, absolutely unsinkable” (see how i embedded the quote, my teacher always told us not to introduce the quote, but use it as if its our own words) The play is set in 1912, two years before it sunk, but was performed on stage in 1945? (idk its been a year since ive written about this), meaning that the audience watching it know that the titanic did sink and that Mr Birling is wrong. Priestley did this to present Mr Birling to the audience as conceited and ignorant. this is especially seen through the use of repetition of the word unsinkable as it shows that Mr Birling truly believes that the titanic would not sink.(here comes context about Priestley). Priestley, a well known socialist (i think) did this to portray the birlings - and mr birling especially - as stupid (dont think this is the right word) and therefore implying tot he audience that capitalists... (finish this point). another way ignorance (which is my main point) is presented within the context of the play is (that part where mrs birling chats **** about the person that impregnated eva/daisy but turns out its eric that did it and shes like omg wtf, talk about context with women, marriage and things) (and basically style it out like that to get top marks)

    if any info is wrong then plz tell me so i can edit as i did this exam last yr so im a bit dusty lol
    if anyone wants to use this and add more or change things then go ahead
    good luck, inspector calls was my favourite to read and write about (bc it was the easiest in my opinion), and i hope anyone reading this gets good results for this exam!!
    Oh my god thank you this way really helpful!!
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    (Original post by gingerbread10000)
    Try to embed the quote, it will make your paragraph worth more marks. Try to only mention the literary device in the second/third sentence, as it makes your point weaker. Your point seems kinda detached from the rest of the paragraph- You have only proven that Mr. Birling is conceited, you have not mentioned the other Birlings.

    Here's an example:
    Notably, Priestly conveys Mr. Birling in an arrogant and ignorant man. During his speech, Mr. Birling claims that the Titanic is a "unsinkable" as this play was performed in the 1940's, the audience was experiencing dramatic irony, as they knew this was not the case. This implies that Mr. Birling is clueless, and will use the impressiveness of an item to prove its worth, almost as he does for himself. Priestly was trying to show that the upper classes saw themselves as above the rest of society, however that their perceived success was as fragile as the Titanic. The audience is able to see this, as they are able to acknowledge that he is trusting of the Titanic. Therefore, Priestly was successful in displaying Mr. Birling as someone who is overly reliant on his position in society to prove his worth.
    Oh okay thank you!
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