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Can anyone be willing to mark my essay on power in London and tissue
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Can anyone be willing to mark my essay on power in London and tissue
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sure.
how is power presented in london and tissue
!! I have one more paragraph on tissue and another paragraph comapeing them but is this good so far?
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how is power presented in london and tissue
!! I have one more paragraph on tissue and another paragraph comapeing them but is this good so far?
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It’s good, but I do A-level English Literature. My advice would be to comment on language techniques because you seem to talk about structure a lot more. Use quotes!!! Each paragraph should have at least 2-3 quotes and analyse it in detail. For example you mentioned the authority repressing people, talk about the quote “hapless Soldiers sigh”, the sibilance and s consonants exemplifies how the society is so repressive that even brave soldiers can’t deal with the society’s rules, and so on. Your context AO3 is BRILLIANT! Though but you need to strengthen your AO2, more quotes. You are also evaluative which is great. I would give it a 6 or 7, but a full on 7 with AO2 strengthened.
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It’s good, but I do A-level English Literature. My advice would be to comment on language techniques because you seem to talk about structure a lot more. Use quotes!!! Each paragraph should have at least 2-3 quotes and analyse it in detail. For example you mentioned the authority repressing people, talk about the quote “hapless Soldiers sigh”, the sibilance and s consonants exemplifies how the society is so repressive that even brave soldiers can’t deal with the society’s rules, and so on. Your context AO3 is BRILLIANT! Though but you need to strengthen your AO2, more quotes. You are also evaluative which is great. I would give it a 6 or 7, but a full on 7 with AO2 strengthened.
Yes as I said I hadn’t quite finished it and I need to do a paragraph on tissue and another paragraph for both which includes quotes so don’t worry 😭😭 but If i include more quotes which I’m going to now how many marks out of 30 I think this would be
Again I have got loads of quotes but hadn’t wrote them in yet
So out of 30 if I enhance ?
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Yes as I said I hadn’t quite finished it and I need to do a paragraph on tissue and another paragraph for both which includes quotes so don’t worry 😭😭 but If i include more quotes which I’m going to now how many marks out of 30 I think this would be
Again I have got loads of quotes but hadn’t wrote them in yet
So out of 30 if I enhance ?
Uh, maybe 15 or 16, I’m basing this based on my marked essays from school. So if you were to add quotes and analysis then maybe 18. Not sure this is an estimate.
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Uh, maybe 15 or 16, I’m basing this based on my marked essays from school. So if you were to add quotes and analysis then maybe 18. Not sure this is an estimate.
How that low my friend wrote something similar to me and got 27
U gotta be joking 😭
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Uh, maybe 15 or 16, I’m basing this based on my marked essays from school. So if you were to add quotes and analysis then maybe 18. Not sure this is an estimate.
Look at this essay this got 27/30 and I got into a lot more depth I know about the quotes but I focused on structure mainly then started to go onto quotes and need to finish it but I went into more detail in one of he quotes she used ?
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How that low my friend wrote something similar to me and got 27
U gotta be joking 😭
I’m basing it on A-level. Uh, now that you say that, maybe a 25, I am a bit harsh with marking, but that’s because you need more quotes and analysis and layers of interpretation.
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I’m basing it on A-level. Uh, now that you say that, maybe a 25, I am a bit harsh with marking, but that’s because you need more quotes and analysis and layers of interpretation.
Maybe a 25? Why not 27? Like that video 😭😢😢😢 why don’t I send u my full analysis essay Tommorow and u give a full mark AND DONT WORRY I WILL USE QUOTES I DIDNT GET ONTO THAY PART YET
DO U RECOMMEND ME DOING 6 paragraphs
SO ONE MORE LANGUAGE PARAGRAPH FOR TISSUE
And another paragraph and use quotes?
IS THE QUOTE I USED FOR LONDON AND ITS INTERPRETATION GOOD SO FAR?

And what texts did u study at GCSE I need a bit help on lit and massively on lang if u can help
Ur massively helping me out I really want an 8 so any tips
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Maybe a 25? Why not 27? Like that video 😭😢😢😢 why don’t I send u my full analysis essay Tommorow and u give a full mark AND DONT WORRY I WILL USE QUOTES I DIDNT GET ONTO THAY PART YET
DO U RECOMMEND ME DOING 6 paragraphs
SO ONE MORE LANGUAGE PARAGRAPH FOR TISSUE
And another paragraph and use quotes?
IS THE QUOTE I USED FOR LONDON AND ITS INTERPRETATION GOOD SO FAR?

And what texts did u study at GCSE I need a bit help on lit and massively on lang if u can help
Ur massively helping me out I really want an 8 so any tips
Yeah sure I don’t mind, I don’t like language i hate it. I done time and place in the anthology, a Christmas carol, an inspector calls and Macbeth.
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Maybe a 25? Why not 27? Like that video 😭😢😢😢 why don’t I send u my full analysis essay Tommorow and u give a full mark AND DONT WORRY I WILL USE QUOTES I DIDNT GET ONTO THAY PART YET
DO U RECOMMEND ME DOING 6 paragraphs
SO ONE MORE LANGUAGE PARAGRAPH FOR TISSUE
And another paragraph and use quotes?
IS THE QUOTE I USED FOR LONDON AND ITS INTERPRETATION GOOD SO FAR?

And what texts did u study at GCSE I need a bit help on lit and massively on lang if u can help
Ur massively helping me out I really want an 8 so any tips
What exam board are you doing?
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Maybe a 25? Why not 27? Like that video 😭😢😢😢 why don’t I send u my full analysis essay Tommorow and u give a full mark AND DONT WORRY I WILL USE QUOTES I DIDNT GET ONTO THAY PART YET
DO U RECOMMEND ME DOING 6 paragraphs
SO ONE MORE LANGUAGE PARAGRAPH FOR TISSUE
And another paragraph and use quotes?
IS THE QUOTE I USED FOR LONDON AND ITS INTERPRETATION GOOD SO FAR?

And what texts did u study at GCSE I need a bit help on lit and massively on lang if u can help
Ur massively helping me out I really want an 8 so any tips
Do 5 paragraphs
An Introduction
1 paragraph for London saying why it is different
1 paragraph any differences in tissue and London
1 paragraph for tissue saying why it is different
1 paragraph stating the similarities, if they have any.
1 paragraph talking about the differences or similarities
Conclusion

Use at least 2 quotes in each paragraph. If it's the technique explain it in dept and what are the impacts. Talk about tone and atmosphere of poem. The interpretation is good for the quote, last paragraph.
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Yeah sure I don’t mind, I don’t like language i hate it. I done time and place in the anthology, a Christmas carol, an inspector calls and Macbeth.
How do u answer it
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How do u answer it
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Answer what?
How does dickens presents the fear of Scrooge
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How does dickens presents the fear of Scrooge
Can you give me some quotes to help you out?
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Can you give me some quotes to help you out?
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