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Pls could someone be kind enough to mark my Macbeth paragraph which I will post in the reply section. I’m doing AQA 9-1 so it would be helpful if u could grade my work using 9-1. Also pls give me improvement comments. Thanks
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Pls could someone be kind enough to mark my Macbeth paragraph which I will post in the reply section. I’m doing AQA 9-1 so it would be helpful if u could grade my work using 9-1. Also pls give me improvement comments. Thanks
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The question is how is ambition presented in Macbeth
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I sat these examinations last year (9-1 first timer), so my feedback may not be as accurate, and may differ from other people.

So this is a very good paragraph. It shows intepretation of quotes, and also uses subject terminology when analysing certain words said in the play.
However, there is a lot of quoting for one paragraph, as it should focus more on one aspect, to attain more AO1 marks. The AO3 in this paragraph, was talking about the Jacobean audience, was also excellent but brief (however, with time, this amount would be expected.)

This may just be me, but I don't feel like there's any evaluative comments. What I mean by this, is whether Shakespeare is effective, successful in portraying Lady Macbeth as a certain type of character, and why he is.

I would probably say grade 7, however due to the subjective nature of examinations and examiners, this could make a case for grade 8.
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I sat these examinations last year (9-1 first timer), so my feedback may not be as accurate, and may differ from other people.

So this is a very good paragraph. It shows intepretation of quotes, and also uses subject terminology when analysing certain words said in the play.
However, there is a lot of quoting for one paragraph, as it should focus more on one aspect, to attain more AO1 marks. The AO3 in this paragraph, was talking about the Jacobean audience, was also excellent but brief (however, with time, this amount would be expected.)

This may just be me, but I don't feel like there's any evaluative comments. What I mean by this, is whether Shakespeare is effective, successful in portraying Lady Macbeth as a certain type of character, and why he is.

I would probably say grade 7, however due to the subjective nature of examinations and examiners, this could make a case for grade 8.
Thank you so much. Also what do u mean by evaluative comments. The question is about ambition. What could I say ?
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