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The opening paragraph is becoming problematic. I've completed every other paragraph with books, experience, lectures and some current affairs (ps is for law by the way) - but I just can't seem to come up with an opening paragraph that's coherent. Any ideas?
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Why you want to study law.
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The opening paragraph is becoming problematic. I've completed every other paragraph with books, experience, lectures and some current affairs (ps is for law by the way) - but I just can't seem to come up with an opening paragraph that's coherent. Any ideas?
Just get straight to the point which is useful advice.
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Why you want to study law.
I'm really interested in how it interlinks with current affairs, particularly with world politics. I also like the ethics & theoretical side of law. It's just the opening line that's really difficult
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Just get straight to the point which is useful advice.
I'm attempting to, but I don't want it to sound too basic
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I'm attempting to, but I don't want it to sound too basic
Think about how many pretentious thesaurus-abuse opening lines the poor *******s have to read.
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The opening paragraph is becoming problematic. I've completed every other paragraph with books, experience, lectures and some current affairs (ps is for law by the way) - but I just can't seem to come up with an opening paragraph that's coherent. Any ideas?
What inspired you to study law
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I'm really interested in how it interlinks with current affairs, particularly with world politics. I also like the ethics & theoretical side of law. It's just the opening line that's really difficult
Sometimes the opening line doesnt have to be the first thing you do towards the PS
I outlined my PS
Did the Middle bits then worked upwards
Then that gave me a good idea to structure my introduction
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State a fact about law that intrigues you and how it inspired you, or maybe a particular experience that triggered this.
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I'm really interested in how it interlinks with current affairs, particularly with world politics. I also like the ethics & theoretical side of law.
That'll do...give a specific example for the first sentence and maybe a second example (or part of the first example) for the second sentence.

And remember -
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Sometimes the opening line doesnt have to be the first thing you do towards the PS
I outlined my PS
Did the Middle bits then worked upwards
Then that gave me a good idea to structure my introduction
Did you read the post? they've already finished the rest of it
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Did you read the post? they've already finished the rest of it
my bad
thats a bit embarassin
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State a fact about law that intrigues you and how it inspired you, or maybe a particular experience that triggered this.
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That'll do...give a specific example for the first sentence and maybe a second example (or part of the first example) for the second sentence.

And remember -
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Thanks for the advice. Does this sound aright for an opening line 'Law expresses an ideal reality - one of justice, equality and inclusion'? Is it too abstract/non-specific?
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Thanks for the advice. Does this sound aright for an opening line 'Law expresses an ideal reality - one of justice, equality and inclusion'? Is it too abstract/non-specific?
two things
a) don't post your PS online - you may well end up flagged for plagiarism if you submit a PS with sentences matching exactly content online
b) that's too abstract. Your PS is about YOU and YOUR interest in law - it's not an essay on what law is. Pick a current affairs topic with legal implications that you've been following, say what has interested you about it.
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