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PLEASE ANALYSE THIS, THE STRUCTURE AND LANGUAGE TECHNIQUES USED AND THEIR EFFECTS? i primise im actually ok at english but this extract is difficult okk

"Tell me about your recurring nightmare, Nathan." We're sitting by the pond on warm paving slabs. The pond's a long rectangle, with water lilies and a bronze statue of Neptune in the middle gone turquoise and bruised. The pond's bigger than our whole garden, which is really just a muddy yard with a washing line and rubbish bins. Dad's lodge in Rhodesia has land going down to a river where there're hippos. I think of Mrs. Marconi telling me to "Focus on the subject." "How do you know about my nightmare?"

"You have that hunted look," says Jonah.

I lob a pebble up, high over the water. Its arc is maths.

"Is your nightmare anything to do with your scars?"

Immediately my hand's pulled my hair down over the white-and-pink-streaked area below my right ear, to hide where the damage shows the most. The stone goes plop! but the splash is invisible. I won't think about the mastiff launching itself at me, its fangs pulling skin off my cheek like roast chicken, its eyes as it shook me like a doll, its teeth locked around my jawbone; or the weeks in hospital, the injections, the drugs, the surgery, the faces people make; or how the mastiff's still waiting for me when I fall asleep.
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talk about the opening direct speech, internal speech. you could mention the neptune figure -the whole 'bruised' description can reflct his own mental state in this context

the last paragraph there's quite a lot: past tense experiences show good story development. the 'roast chicken' and 'doll' similes show how they feel objectifyed
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there's just a few things...idk how many marks this is worth (8?)
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talk about the opening direct speech, internal speech. you could mention the neptune figure -the whole 'bruised' description can reflct his own mental state in this context

the last paragraph there's quite a lot: past tense experiences show good story development. the 'roast chicken' and 'doll' similes show how they feel objectifyed
thank you soo much!!
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there's just a few things...idk how many marks this is worth (8?)
It's just homework, just have to write paragraphs on 3 language techniques and their effects and 3 structure techniques and their effect, stupidly left it till the day before
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PLEASE ANALYSE THIS, THE STRUCTURE AND LANGUAGE TECHNIQUES USED AND THEIR EFFECTS? i primise im actually ok at english but this extract is difficult okk

"Tell me about your recurring nightmare, Nathan." We're sitting by the pond on warm paving slabs. The pond's a long rectangle, with water lilies and a bronze statue of Neptune in the middle gone turquoise and bruised. The pond's bigger than our whole garden, which is really just a muddy yard with a washing line and rubbish bins. Dad's lodge in Rhodesia has land going down to a river where there're hippos. I think of Mrs. Marconi telling me to "Focus on the subject." "How do you know about my nightmare?"

"You have that hunted look," says Jonah.

I lob a pebble up, high over the water. Its arc is maths.

"Is your nightmare anything to do with your scars?"

Immediately my hand's pulled my hair down over the white-and-pink-streaked area below my right ear, to hide where the damage shows the most. The stone goes plop! but the splash is invisible. I won't think about the mastiff launching itself at me, its fangs pulling skin off my cheek like roast chicken, its eyes as it shook me like a doll, its teeth locked around my jawbone; or the weeks in hospital, the injections, the drugs, the surgery, the faces people make; or how the mastiff's still waiting for me when I fall asleep.
lost of visual imagery. and for structure short and long paragraphs perhaps used because there’s going to a sense of understanding to confusion or dread
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lost of visual imagery. and for structure short and long paragraphs perhaps used because there’s going to a sense of understanding to confusion or dread
what does the visual imagery show though? like I know it creates the surroundings but you can say that about any text? right?
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talk about the opening direct speech, internal speech. you could mention the neptune figure -the whole 'bruised' description can reflct his own mental state in this context

the last paragraph there's quite a lot: past tense experiences show good story development. the 'roast chicken' and 'doll' similes show how they feel objectifyed
what does the dialogue show though? and with the neptune figure, should I link it to the fact neptune is known to over power those snaller than him, or does that have nothing to do with the context, im sorryy, perhaps not as good as english as i thought
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what does the dialogue show though? and with the neptune figure, should I link it to the fact neptune is known to over power those snaller than him, or does that have nothing to do with the context, im sorryy, perhaps not as good as english as i thought
-the dialogue immediately draws in the reader; it makes the story revelant because its happening right there.
-your point about neptune is great! and if you add in the idea about him being 'bruised', you can show how strongly depressed the boy's mind set is (that even neptune, a god, is being beaten down in this world)

good luck!
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-the dialogue immediately draws in the reader; it makes the story revelant because its happening right there.
-your point about neptune is great! and if you add in the idea about him being 'bruised', you can show how strongly depressed the boy's mind set is (that even neptune, a god, is being beaten down in this world)

good luck!
thank you so much!
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With structure you're looking at how the writer has put together the opening/middle/ending. The writer is usually trying to have some kind of effect on the reader and you have to work out what the writer is trying to achieve in the text. I'm presuming that this is at the beginning of a story, so the writer is probably trying to set the scene in the reader's mind in a particular way. You can use things like punctuation, sentence and style length as well as tone of language to show this.

For language features, it's just a matter of finding writing techniques, trying to pick out as much information out of them as possible and saying what the reader will think, feel or imagine from this.
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