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A1 English Paper 2 Essay
I was wondering if anyone can help me mark the following English paper 2essay using the IB marking system, based on the 5 categories with a total of 25 points? And please give loads and loads of comment,,,, thanks sooooo much.
The Question is:
"Explore how visual imagery contributes to meaning in poems you have studied. You must refer closely to the work of two or three poets in your study and base your answer on a total of three or four poems."
In poetry, poets use different techniques to convey the message, or meaning of the poems. In this essay, I will base my answer on T. S. Eliot and John Keats. Eliot’s poetry consists of many poems which the meaning is reflected in the stream of consciousness, often with no direct judgement but subtle satire, irony by the cynical tone he creates for the narrators. And as always, stream of consciousness journeys, which the narrators created by Eliot in “Preludes” and “Rhapsody” take readers to, require the use of imagery as it is, perhaps, the most effective way to take readers onto those journeys. Those scene choices in the journey may have certain connotation which makes the poets to choose them; in this way, the visual imagery which is used to give scenes help to contribute to the meaning. When describing the scenes using visual imagery, the narrators may also reflect their feeling through their diction, or tone, or anything; in this way, the visual imagery comes with an emotion again contributes to the meaning of the poems.
On the other hand, poets like Keats might employ other techniques such as telling how they feel and substantiating the meaning by showing the scenes which have mould that particular feeling in poet’s mind, like in “When I have Fears that I may cease to be”; the portrait of those scenes requires the use of imagery again. Keats, in “On First Looking into Chapman’s Homer” also uses imagery, but for different purposes. In this poem, Keats has experienced certain emotion through a journey he has travelled such as reading of Homer’s work, and through analogy with the use of imagery, he compares the different emotions he felt throughout the journey to visual images. The imagery used in this poem is for the purpose of visualizing emotions which cannot be seen. So here we have visual imagery in different usage which contributes to the meanings of different poems; through scene choices of visual imagery used in the stream of consciousness, through the way how the visual imagery is used in the stream of consciousness, through showing scenes which substantiate the meaning and through visualizing the meaning with analogy and visual imagery.
Lastly, visual imagery maybe used when other poetic techniques such as bathos and analogy.
Firstly, one main theme of Eliot’s poetry is the criticism of modernization and its implication on social behaviours, moral, etc. The stream of consciousness in “Preludes” takes readers to scenes of the street in the urban working class residential areas like one of the East End which is a product of modernization. “The grimy scraps/ Of withered leaves about your feet/ And newspaper from vacant lots”, “the sawdust-trampled street”. Then, in “Rhapsody on a Windy Night”, the stream of consciousness also shows us scene of old factory. “A broken spring in a factory yard,/ Rust that clings to the form the strength has left/ Hard and curled and ready to snap.” These above visual imageries choices, instead of images of shiny tall towers and power engines working, help to show the narrators’ dislike of the outlook of modernization. In both streams of consciousness in “Preludes” and “Rhapsody on a Windy Night”, the narrators show images of other forms of decay as well such as physical appearance decay, “yellow soles of feet… both soiled hands” and “washed-out smallpox cracks her face” of the personified moon. These above images show, perhaps, narrator’s gloomy attitude towards human ageing.
The two poems use visual imagery to show images of automatic activities too. Such activities include the things people do to endure life and work, “sleep, prepare for life”, “With all its muddy feet that press/ To early coffee-stands”, the things people do to alleviate the pain of living, “fingers stuffing pipes” which has reference to smoking and some may even interpret the narrator of “Rhapsody of a Windy Night” as drunk as he sees all the twisted images which are not real such as the moon personified as a woman. Furthermore, in “Rhapsody on a Windy Night”, there is image after image which all shows people or object acting automatically, such as the cat which licks the bad butter, “the cat… slips out its tongue and devours a morsel of rancid butter”, the street child who picks up a toy, “the child These images all substantiate the meaning of the poems which is modernization has made life very unbearable and turned everything from human to nature into automatic soulless “machines”. To conclude, visual imagery is used in stream of consciousness poems to show certain images which has specific connotation, hence contribute to the meaning of the poems.
Stream of consciousness is different from a mere narrative by an omniscient view as it gives visual imagery seen by the narrator. The point of view of the narrator may affect the interpretation or the description of specific details of the scenes. These interpretations and description may reflect the emotion or thinking of the narrator. Firstly, those effects can be shown through the diction. For example, in “Preludes”, the emptiness feeling of the narrator is reflected through the use of “broken” and further emphasized by the alliteration of “b” in the visual imagery of “broken blinds and chimney pots”. The loneliness feeling is reflected through his interpretation in the “cab-horse” visual imagery by adding that it’s a “lonely cab-horse”. The narrator’s dislike of prostitutes is reflected through the smile of “like a crooked pin” in “Rhapsody on a Windy Night” when the narrator is giving the visual imagery of a prostitute winking. As these interpretation and descriptions are not objective but subjective, therefore, they reflect the attitude or emotion or thinking of the poets or the narrators. Again, these qualities are very essential to the meaning of the poems, so again, visual imagery contributes to the meaning a lot.
The interpretation and descriptions are manipulating, perhaps, the scenes which the narrator has actually been. But, poets can also use visual imagery for the mere purpose of foreseeing something. This is done in a great deal in “When I have Fears that I may cease to be”. In this poem, the theme is addressed very clearly in the title and the first line which is fear about death. Keats initially states he does fear yet that is not a powerful enough message which is why he further explain his fears by foreseeing with the readers what he can do if he lives on, mainly three things in three separate images. The first one is Keats foreseeing he fully flourishing his poetic career, “High piled books in charactery/ hold like rich garners the full ripen’d grain”. In this case, Keats, in doubt of whether people would understand his desire to succeed in poetry, uses a simile to compare his foreseen success in his poetic career to a success in a farmer’s harvest (“garners the full ripen’d grain”) as people would generally be more familiar to farmers as they are all around. The second one is Keats foreseeing he keeps on enjoying writing poems about nature as he is himself a romanticist poet, “behold upon the night’s starr’d face… trace their shadow with the magic hand of Chance”. The last one is Keats foreseeing he continues to enjoy his joy with the “fair creature of an hour” and its/her “fairy power”. In here, visual imagery is used to provide the scenes which can help Keats to convey his idea as his idea might have come from foreseeing those scenes as well.
Lastly, Keats in “On first looking into Chapman’s Homer” uses visual imagery. He does not show readers scenes he has been or foresees that he will be, but rather scenes other people have been or experienced. Those scenes which are experiences of others are, perhaps, more easy to communicate while the feeling Keats get from his experience is similar, hence he compare his feeling to what normally people would feel if they were in those scenes. For example, there are two special scenes of other people he gives to readers to compare his feeling to the feeling of those people would feel in those scenes though Keats may never been in those scenes. Those includes a “watcher of the skies/ When a new planet swims into his ken” where there is visual imagery with visual imagery, one of a astronomer watching the sky and one of a planet personified as swimming into the astronomer’s eyes. The other one is of explorer Cortez as “he stared at the Pacific” and his men besides him; this is a visual imagery of the scene when, as Keats thought, the first European to look at the Pacific ocean. Keats definitely was not Cortez and he probably was not an astronomer either, yet he employed those two scenes by using visual imageries, as readers would feel overwhelming amazement as we are taken to those scenes and that overwhelming amazement feeling is exactly how Keats felt when he first heard Chapman’s version of Homer’s literature. So once again, visual imagery contributes greatly to the meaning of the poem which Keats want to convey.
That's it,,,,, thanks again!!
The Question is:
"Explore how visual imagery contributes to meaning in poems you have studied. You must refer closely to the work of two or three poets in your study and base your answer on a total of three or four poems."
In poetry, poets use different techniques to convey the message, or meaning of the poems. In this essay, I will base my answer on T. S. Eliot and John Keats. Eliot’s poetry consists of many poems which the meaning is reflected in the stream of consciousness, often with no direct judgement but subtle satire, irony by the cynical tone he creates for the narrators. And as always, stream of consciousness journeys, which the narrators created by Eliot in “Preludes” and “Rhapsody” take readers to, require the use of imagery as it is, perhaps, the most effective way to take readers onto those journeys. Those scene choices in the journey may have certain connotation which makes the poets to choose them; in this way, the visual imagery which is used to give scenes help to contribute to the meaning. When describing the scenes using visual imagery, the narrators may also reflect their feeling through their diction, or tone, or anything; in this way, the visual imagery comes with an emotion again contributes to the meaning of the poems.
On the other hand, poets like Keats might employ other techniques such as telling how they feel and substantiating the meaning by showing the scenes which have mould that particular feeling in poet’s mind, like in “When I have Fears that I may cease to be”; the portrait of those scenes requires the use of imagery again. Keats, in “On First Looking into Chapman’s Homer” also uses imagery, but for different purposes. In this poem, Keats has experienced certain emotion through a journey he has travelled such as reading of Homer’s work, and through analogy with the use of imagery, he compares the different emotions he felt throughout the journey to visual images. The imagery used in this poem is for the purpose of visualizing emotions which cannot be seen. So here we have visual imagery in different usage which contributes to the meanings of different poems; through scene choices of visual imagery used in the stream of consciousness, through the way how the visual imagery is used in the stream of consciousness, through showing scenes which substantiate the meaning and through visualizing the meaning with analogy and visual imagery.
Lastly, visual imagery maybe used when other poetic techniques such as bathos and analogy.
Firstly, one main theme of Eliot’s poetry is the criticism of modernization and its implication on social behaviours, moral, etc. The stream of consciousness in “Preludes” takes readers to scenes of the street in the urban working class residential areas like one of the East End which is a product of modernization. “The grimy scraps/ Of withered leaves about your feet/ And newspaper from vacant lots”, “the sawdust-trampled street”. Then, in “Rhapsody on a Windy Night”, the stream of consciousness also shows us scene of old factory. “A broken spring in a factory yard,/ Rust that clings to the form the strength has left/ Hard and curled and ready to snap.” These above visual imageries choices, instead of images of shiny tall towers and power engines working, help to show the narrators’ dislike of the outlook of modernization. In both streams of consciousness in “Preludes” and “Rhapsody on a Windy Night”, the narrators show images of other forms of decay as well such as physical appearance decay, “yellow soles of feet… both soiled hands” and “washed-out smallpox cracks her face” of the personified moon. These above images show, perhaps, narrator’s gloomy attitude towards human ageing.
The two poems use visual imagery to show images of automatic activities too. Such activities include the things people do to endure life and work, “sleep, prepare for life”, “With all its muddy feet that press/ To early coffee-stands”, the things people do to alleviate the pain of living, “fingers stuffing pipes” which has reference to smoking and some may even interpret the narrator of “Rhapsody of a Windy Night” as drunk as he sees all the twisted images which are not real such as the moon personified as a woman. Furthermore, in “Rhapsody on a Windy Night”, there is image after image which all shows people or object acting automatically, such as the cat which licks the bad butter, “the cat… slips out its tongue and devours a morsel of rancid butter”, the street child who picks up a toy, “the child These images all substantiate the meaning of the poems which is modernization has made life very unbearable and turned everything from human to nature into automatic soulless “machines”. To conclude, visual imagery is used in stream of consciousness poems to show certain images which has specific connotation, hence contribute to the meaning of the poems.
Stream of consciousness is different from a mere narrative by an omniscient view as it gives visual imagery seen by the narrator. The point of view of the narrator may affect the interpretation or the description of specific details of the scenes. These interpretations and description may reflect the emotion or thinking of the narrator. Firstly, those effects can be shown through the diction. For example, in “Preludes”, the emptiness feeling of the narrator is reflected through the use of “broken” and further emphasized by the alliteration of “b” in the visual imagery of “broken blinds and chimney pots”. The loneliness feeling is reflected through his interpretation in the “cab-horse” visual imagery by adding that it’s a “lonely cab-horse”. The narrator’s dislike of prostitutes is reflected through the smile of “like a crooked pin” in “Rhapsody on a Windy Night” when the narrator is giving the visual imagery of a prostitute winking. As these interpretation and descriptions are not objective but subjective, therefore, they reflect the attitude or emotion or thinking of the poets or the narrators. Again, these qualities are very essential to the meaning of the poems, so again, visual imagery contributes to the meaning a lot.
The interpretation and descriptions are manipulating, perhaps, the scenes which the narrator has actually been. But, poets can also use visual imagery for the mere purpose of foreseeing something. This is done in a great deal in “When I have Fears that I may cease to be”. In this poem, the theme is addressed very clearly in the title and the first line which is fear about death. Keats initially states he does fear yet that is not a powerful enough message which is why he further explain his fears by foreseeing with the readers what he can do if he lives on, mainly three things in three separate images. The first one is Keats foreseeing he fully flourishing his poetic career, “High piled books in charactery/ hold like rich garners the full ripen’d grain”. In this case, Keats, in doubt of whether people would understand his desire to succeed in poetry, uses a simile to compare his foreseen success in his poetic career to a success in a farmer’s harvest (“garners the full ripen’d grain”) as people would generally be more familiar to farmers as they are all around. The second one is Keats foreseeing he keeps on enjoying writing poems about nature as he is himself a romanticist poet, “behold upon the night’s starr’d face… trace their shadow with the magic hand of Chance”. The last one is Keats foreseeing he continues to enjoy his joy with the “fair creature of an hour” and its/her “fairy power”. In here, visual imagery is used to provide the scenes which can help Keats to convey his idea as his idea might have come from foreseeing those scenes as well.
Lastly, Keats in “On first looking into Chapman’s Homer” uses visual imagery. He does not show readers scenes he has been or foresees that he will be, but rather scenes other people have been or experienced. Those scenes which are experiences of others are, perhaps, more easy to communicate while the feeling Keats get from his experience is similar, hence he compare his feeling to what normally people would feel if they were in those scenes. For example, there are two special scenes of other people he gives to readers to compare his feeling to the feeling of those people would feel in those scenes though Keats may never been in those scenes. Those includes a “watcher of the skies/ When a new planet swims into his ken” where there is visual imagery with visual imagery, one of a astronomer watching the sky and one of a planet personified as swimming into the astronomer’s eyes. The other one is of explorer Cortez as “he stared at the Pacific” and his men besides him; this is a visual imagery of the scene when, as Keats thought, the first European to look at the Pacific ocean. Keats definitely was not Cortez and he probably was not an astronomer either, yet he employed those two scenes by using visual imageries, as readers would feel overwhelming amazement as we are taken to those scenes and that overwhelming amazement feeling is exactly how Keats felt when he first heard Chapman’s version of Homer’s literature. So once again, visual imagery contributes greatly to the meaning of the poem which Keats want to convey.
That's it,,,,, thanks again!!
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Okay, i'd grade it the way mine would've been graded....sorry if this is harsh, but i'll try to justify myself as much as possible
The Question is:
"Explore how visual imagery contributes to meaning in poems you have studied. You must refer closely to the work of two or three poets in your study and base your answer on a total of three or four poems."
In poetry, poets use different techniques to convey the message, or meaning of the poems.(unnecessary) In this essay, [COLOR="Red"]I[/COLOR](avoid this) will base my answer on (name the poems by Eliot) T. S. Eliot and (name the poems by Keats)John Keats. Eliot’s poetry consists of many poems which the meaning is reflected in the stream of consciousness, often with no direct judgement but subtle satire, irony by the cynical tone he creates for the narrators. And as always, stream of consciousness journeys, which the narrators created by Eliot in “Preludes” and “Rhapsody” take readers to, require the use of imagery as it is, perhaps, the most effective way to take readers onto those journeys. Those scene choices in the journey may have certain connotations which makes(made) the poets to choose(chose) them; in this way, the visual imagery which is used to give scenes help to (creates scenes which) contribute to the meaning. When describing the scenes using visual imagery, the narrators(speakers) may also reflect their feeling through their diction, or tone, or anything(don't say that!); in this way, the visual imagery comes with an emotion again contributes to the meaning of the poems.
On the other hand, poets like Keats might employ other techniques such as telling how they feel and substantiating the meaning by showing the scenes which have mould that particular feeling in poet’s mind, like in “When I have Fears that I may cease to be”; the portrait of those scenes requires the use of imagery again. Keats, in “On First Looking into Chapman’s Homer” also uses imagery, but for different purposes. In this poem, Keats has experienced certain emotion through a journey he has travelled such as reading of Homer’s work, and through analogy with the use of imagery, he compares the different emotions he felt throughout the journey to visual images. The imagery used in this poem is for the purpose of visualizing emotions which cannot be seen. So here we have (informal) visual imagery in different usage which contributes to the meanings of different poems; through scene choices of visual imagery used in the stream of consciousness, through the way how the (delete)visual imagery is used in the stream of consciousness, through showing scenes which substantiate the meaning and through visualizing the meaning with analogy and visual imagery.
Lastly, visual imagery maybe used when other poetic techniques such as bathos and analogy.
Firstly, one main theme of Eliot’s poetry is the criticism of modernization and its implication on social behaviours, moral, etc.(Donot use etc.) The stream of consciousness in “Preludes” takes readers to scenes of the street in the urban working class residential areas like one of the East End which is a product of modernization. “The grimy scraps/ Of withered leaves about your feet/ And newspaper from vacant lots”, “the sawdust-trampled street”. Then, in “Rhapsody on a Windy Night”, the stream of consciousness also shows us scene of old factory. “A broken spring in a factory yard,/ Rust that clings to the form the strength has left/ Hard and curled and ready to snap.” These above visual imageries (images or imagery)choices, instead of images of shiny tall towers and power engines working, help to show the narrators’ dislike of the outlook of modernization. In both streams of consciousness in(delete) “Preludes” and “Rhapsody on a Windy Night”, the narrators show images of other forms of decay as well such as physical appearance decay, “yellow soles of feet… both soiled hands” and “washed-out smallpox cracks her face” of the personified moon. These above images show, perhaps, narrator’s gloomy attitude towards human ageing.
The two poems use visual imagery to show images of automatic activities too. Such activities include the things people do to endure life and work, “sleep, prepare for life”, “With all its muddy feet that press/ To early coffee-stands”, the things people do to alleviate the pain of living, “fingers stuffing pipes” which has reference to smoking and some may even interpret the narrator of “Rhapsody of a Windy Night” as drunk as he sees all the twisted images which are not real such as the moon personified as a woman. Furthermore, in “Rhapsody on a Windy Night”, there is image after image which all shows people or object acting automatically, such as the cat which licks the bad butter, “the cat… slips out its tongue and devours a morsel of rancid butter”, the street child who picks up a toy, “the child These images all substantiate the meaning of the poems which is modernization has made life very unbearable and turned everything from human to nature into automatic soulless “machines”. To conclude(only say this if it's your concluding paragraph), visual imagery is used in stream of consciousness poems to show certain images which has specific connotation, hence contribute to the meaning of the poems.
Stream of consciousness is different from a mere narrative by an omniscient view as it gives visual imagery seen by the narrator. The point of view of the narrator may affect the interpretation or the description of specific details of the scenes. These interpretations and description may reflect the emotion or thinking of the narrator(use speaker in poetry). Firstly, those effects can be shown through the diction. For example, in “Preludes”, the emptiness feeling of the narrator is reflected through the use of “broken” and further emphasized by the alliteration of “b” in the visual imagery of “broken blinds and chimney pots”. The loneliness feeling is reflected through his interpretation in the “cab-horse” visual imagery by adding that it’s a “lonely cab-horse”. The narrator’s dislike of prostitutes is reflected through the smile of “like a crooked pin” (simile, also reword to integrate better)in “Rhapsody on a Windy Night” when the narrator is giving the visual imagery of a prostitute winking. As these interpretation and descriptions are not objective but subjective, therefore, they reflect the attitude or emotion or thinking of the poets or the narrators. Again, these qualities are very essential to the meaning of the poems, so again, visual imagery contributes to the meaning a lot.
The interpretation and descriptions are manipulating, perhaps, the scenes which the narrator has actually been. But, poets can also use visual imagery for the mere purpose of foreseeing(foreshadowing?) something. This is done in a great deal in “When I have Fears that I may cease to be”. In this poem, the theme is addressed very clearly in the title and the first line which is fear about death. Keats initially states he does fear yet that is not a powerful enough message which is why he further explain his fears by foreseeing with the readers(what?) what he can do if he lives on, mainly three things in three separate images. The first one is Keats foreseeing he fully flourishing his poetic career, “High piled books in charactery/ hold like rich garners the full ripen’d grain”. In this case, Keats, in doubt of whether people would understand his desire to succeed in poetry, uses a simile to compare his foreseen success in his poetic career to a success in a farmer’s harvest (“garners the full ripen’d grain”
as people would generally be more familiar to farmers as they are all around. The second one is Keats foreseeing he keeps on enjoying writing poems about nature as he is himself a romanticist poet, “behold upon the night’s starr’d face… trace their shadow with the magic hand of Chance”. The last one is Keats foreseeing he continues to enjoy his joy with the “fair creature of an hour” and its/her “fairy power”. In here, visual imagery is used to provide the scenes which can help Keats to convey his idea as his idea might have come from foreseeing those scenes as well.
Lastly, Keats in “On first looking into Chapman’s Homer” uses visual imagery(how?). He does not show readers scenes he has been or foresees that he will be(what?), but rather scenes other people have been or experienced. Those scenes which are experiences of others are, perhaps, more easy to communicate while the feeling Keats get from his experience is similar, hence he compares his feeling to what normally people would feel if they were in those scenes. For example, there are two special scenes of other people he gives to readers to compare his feeling to the feeling of those people would feel in those scenes though Keats may never been in those scenes. Those includes a “watcher of the skies/ When a new planet swims into his ken” where there is visual imagery with visual imagery, one of a astronomer watching the sky and one of a planet personified as swimming into the astronomer’s eyes. The other one is of explorer Cortez as “he stared at the Pacific” and his men besides him; this is a visual imagery of the scene when, as Keats thought, the first European to look at the Pacific ocean. Keats definitely was not Cortez and he probably was not an astronomer either, yet he employed those two scenes by using visual imageries, as readers would feel overwhelming amazement as we are taken to those scenes and that overwhelming amazement feeling is exactly how Keats felt when he first heard Chapman’s version of Homer’s literature. So once again, visual imagery contributes greatly to the meaning of the poem which Keats want to convey.
I've written all over your work (but i'd really like to write more, only i don't have much time)....
Pros
- you've managed to stay within the 2 poets and 4 poems
- you stuck to the topic of visual imagery (though would be useful if you've clarified this in your introduction, what is meant by visual imagery? and what techniques are involved?)
Cons
- Where is your thesis?
- all the poems being compared should be in the introduction
- what are the literary techniques involved (you've named very little). You mentioned diction and tone in the introduciton, but you didn't stress it
- all quotes should be followed by name of technique and the effects
- what are the poetic techniques involved (would be useful to mention these as you are studying poetry)
- quotes not very well integrated
- informal language (don't use I, or anything, etc.)
- do not use "narrator" in poetry, it really annoys examiners...use "speaker"
- you are very wordy
- introduction is too long
- you don't have a concluding paragraph
- this is a comparison essay, each paragraph should compare and contrast the two poets
- sentence structure is very confusing to read
- paragraphs should go: TopicS, SupportS, SS, SS, ConcludingS
- structure should be: introduction, body, body, body, conclusion
Grades (English A1 HL criteria...if you want SL, add 0.5)
A:3.5 (i really don't know how much you know, cuz i didn't study your texts)
B:3
C:2.5
D:2
E:2
= 13/ 25
Sorry mate, i think you're on a 3/4....try to get a proper structure in and it can really improve several criterias, also try to be more formal. Also note that examiners will not give half points and any of those can go up or down.
The Question is:
"Explore how visual imagery contributes to meaning in poems you have studied. You must refer closely to the work of two or three poets in your study and base your answer on a total of three or four poems."
In poetry, poets use different techniques to convey the message, or meaning of the poems.(unnecessary) In this essay, [COLOR="Red"]I[/COLOR](avoid this) will base my answer on (name the poems by Eliot) T. S. Eliot and (name the poems by Keats)John Keats. Eliot’s poetry consists of many poems which the meaning is reflected in the stream of consciousness, often with no direct judgement but subtle satire, irony by the cynical tone he creates for the narrators. And as always, stream of consciousness journeys, which the narrators created by Eliot in “Preludes” and “Rhapsody” take readers to, require the use of imagery as it is, perhaps, the most effective way to take readers onto those journeys. Those scene choices in the journey may have certain connotations which makes(made) the poets to choose(chose) them; in this way, the visual imagery which is used to give scenes help to (creates scenes which) contribute to the meaning. When describing the scenes using visual imagery, the narrators(speakers) may also reflect their feeling through their diction, or tone, or anything(don't say that!); in this way, the visual imagery comes with an emotion again contributes to the meaning of the poems.
On the other hand, poets like Keats might employ other techniques such as telling how they feel and substantiating the meaning by showing the scenes which have mould that particular feeling in poet’s mind, like in “When I have Fears that I may cease to be”; the portrait of those scenes requires the use of imagery again. Keats, in “On First Looking into Chapman’s Homer” also uses imagery, but for different purposes. In this poem, Keats has experienced certain emotion through a journey he has travelled such as reading of Homer’s work, and through analogy with the use of imagery, he compares the different emotions he felt throughout the journey to visual images. The imagery used in this poem is for the purpose of visualizing emotions which cannot be seen. So here we have (informal) visual imagery in different usage which contributes to the meanings of different poems; through scene choices of visual imagery used in the stream of consciousness, through the way how the (delete)visual imagery is used in the stream of consciousness, through showing scenes which substantiate the meaning and through visualizing the meaning with analogy and visual imagery.
Lastly, visual imagery maybe used when other poetic techniques such as bathos and analogy.
Firstly, one main theme of Eliot’s poetry is the criticism of modernization and its implication on social behaviours, moral, etc.(Donot use etc.) The stream of consciousness in “Preludes” takes readers to scenes of the street in the urban working class residential areas like one of the East End which is a product of modernization. “The grimy scraps/ Of withered leaves about your feet/ And newspaper from vacant lots”, “the sawdust-trampled street”. Then, in “Rhapsody on a Windy Night”, the stream of consciousness also shows us scene of old factory. “A broken spring in a factory yard,/ Rust that clings to the form the strength has left/ Hard and curled and ready to snap.” These above visual imageries (images or imagery)choices, instead of images of shiny tall towers and power engines working, help to show the narrators’ dislike of the outlook of modernization. In both streams of consciousness in(delete) “Preludes” and “Rhapsody on a Windy Night”, the narrators show images of other forms of decay as well such as physical appearance decay, “yellow soles of feet… both soiled hands” and “washed-out smallpox cracks her face” of the personified moon. These above images show, perhaps, narrator’s gloomy attitude towards human ageing.
The two poems use visual imagery to show images of automatic activities too. Such activities include the things people do to endure life and work, “sleep, prepare for life”, “With all its muddy feet that press/ To early coffee-stands”, the things people do to alleviate the pain of living, “fingers stuffing pipes” which has reference to smoking and some may even interpret the narrator of “Rhapsody of a Windy Night” as drunk as he sees all the twisted images which are not real such as the moon personified as a woman. Furthermore, in “Rhapsody on a Windy Night”, there is image after image which all shows people or object acting automatically, such as the cat which licks the bad butter, “the cat… slips out its tongue and devours a morsel of rancid butter”, the street child who picks up a toy, “the child These images all substantiate the meaning of the poems which is modernization has made life very unbearable and turned everything from human to nature into automatic soulless “machines”. To conclude(only say this if it's your concluding paragraph), visual imagery is used in stream of consciousness poems to show certain images which has specific connotation, hence contribute to the meaning of the poems.
Stream of consciousness is different from a mere narrative by an omniscient view as it gives visual imagery seen by the narrator. The point of view of the narrator may affect the interpretation or the description of specific details of the scenes. These interpretations and description may reflect the emotion or thinking of the narrator(use speaker in poetry). Firstly, those effects can be shown through the diction. For example, in “Preludes”, the emptiness feeling of the narrator is reflected through the use of “broken” and further emphasized by the alliteration of “b” in the visual imagery of “broken blinds and chimney pots”. The loneliness feeling is reflected through his interpretation in the “cab-horse” visual imagery by adding that it’s a “lonely cab-horse”. The narrator’s dislike of prostitutes is reflected through the smile of “like a crooked pin” (simile, also reword to integrate better)in “Rhapsody on a Windy Night” when the narrator is giving the visual imagery of a prostitute winking. As these interpretation and descriptions are not objective but subjective, therefore, they reflect the attitude or emotion or thinking of the poets or the narrators. Again, these qualities are very essential to the meaning of the poems, so again, visual imagery contributes to the meaning a lot.
The interpretation and descriptions are manipulating, perhaps, the scenes which the narrator has actually been. But, poets can also use visual imagery for the mere purpose of foreseeing(foreshadowing?) something. This is done in a great deal in “When I have Fears that I may cease to be”. In this poem, the theme is addressed very clearly in the title and the first line which is fear about death. Keats initially states he does fear yet that is not a powerful enough message which is why he further explain his fears by foreseeing with the readers(what?) what he can do if he lives on, mainly three things in three separate images. The first one is Keats foreseeing he fully flourishing his poetic career, “High piled books in charactery/ hold like rich garners the full ripen’d grain”. In this case, Keats, in doubt of whether people would understand his desire to succeed in poetry, uses a simile to compare his foreseen success in his poetic career to a success in a farmer’s harvest (“garners the full ripen’d grain”
as people would generally be more familiar to farmers as they are all around. The second one is Keats foreseeing he keeps on enjoying writing poems about nature as he is himself a romanticist poet, “behold upon the night’s starr’d face… trace their shadow with the magic hand of Chance”. The last one is Keats foreseeing he continues to enjoy his joy with the “fair creature of an hour” and its/her “fairy power”. In here, visual imagery is used to provide the scenes which can help Keats to convey his idea as his idea might have come from foreseeing those scenes as well.Lastly, Keats in “On first looking into Chapman’s Homer” uses visual imagery(how?). He does not show readers scenes he has been or foresees that he will be(what?), but rather scenes other people have been or experienced. Those scenes which are experiences of others are, perhaps, more easy to communicate while the feeling Keats get from his experience is similar, hence he compares his feeling to what normally people would feel if they were in those scenes. For example, there are two special scenes of other people he gives to readers to compare his feeling to the feeling of those people would feel in those scenes though Keats may never been in those scenes. Those includes a “watcher of the skies/ When a new planet swims into his ken” where there is visual imagery with visual imagery, one of a astronomer watching the sky and one of a planet personified as swimming into the astronomer’s eyes. The other one is of explorer Cortez as “he stared at the Pacific” and his men besides him; this is a visual imagery of the scene when, as Keats thought, the first European to look at the Pacific ocean. Keats definitely was not Cortez and he probably was not an astronomer either, yet he employed those two scenes by using visual imageries, as readers would feel overwhelming amazement as we are taken to those scenes and that overwhelming amazement feeling is exactly how Keats felt when he first heard Chapman’s version of Homer’s literature. So once again, visual imagery contributes greatly to the meaning of the poem which Keats want to convey.
I've written all over your work (but i'd really like to write more, only i don't have much time)....
Pros
- you've managed to stay within the 2 poets and 4 poems
- you stuck to the topic of visual imagery (though would be useful if you've clarified this in your introduction, what is meant by visual imagery? and what techniques are involved?)
Cons
- Where is your thesis?
- all the poems being compared should be in the introduction
- what are the literary techniques involved (you've named very little). You mentioned diction and tone in the introduciton, but you didn't stress it
- all quotes should be followed by name of technique and the effects
- what are the poetic techniques involved (would be useful to mention these as you are studying poetry)
- quotes not very well integrated
- informal language (don't use I, or anything, etc.)
- do not use "narrator" in poetry, it really annoys examiners...use "speaker"
- you are very wordy
- introduction is too long
- you don't have a concluding paragraph
- this is a comparison essay, each paragraph should compare and contrast the two poets
- sentence structure is very confusing to read
- paragraphs should go: TopicS, SupportS, SS, SS, ConcludingS
- structure should be: introduction, body, body, body, conclusion
Grades (English A1 HL criteria...if you want SL, add 0.5)
A:3.5 (i really don't know how much you know, cuz i didn't study your texts)
B:3
C:2.5
D:2
E:2
= 13/ 25
Sorry mate, i think you're on a 3/4....try to get a proper structure in and it can really improve several criterias, also try to be more formal. Also note that examiners will not give half points and any of those can go up or down.
I fully agree with what talespirit has said.
An introduction is supposed to, in a way, "summarize" your essay, and this is usually done by a thesis statement, which you haven't included. Without a thesis statement of some sort, it becomes harder to see the structure of the essay.
Also, the language of the essay is very informal. One of the criteria is "Formal use of language", so try to avoid using words like "I" and "we" (though it is permissible to use "I" when giving a personal response. However, there are more formal ways to phrase a personal opinion) as well as "etc".
You should also try and use a Point - Evidence - Explanation analysis (or anything to that extent) when trying to make a point. For example, if you wanted to make the point that Eliot uses irony, you would first say:
"Eliot makes frequent use of irony"
then, you could show the evidence: "This can be seen in the line 'bla bla bla bla' "
once you have shown an example, explain: "The words bla and bla create an ironic tone, because.....".
As for a grade, I would agree with what talespirit has said.
A: 3-4
B:3
C:2
D:2
E:2
so 12-13. However, that's a 4.
these are the grade boundaries for A1 essays:
7: 22
6: 18
5: 13
4: 11
3: 8
2: 5
You have to remember that English essays are graded very subjectively though.
An introduction is supposed to, in a way, "summarize" your essay, and this is usually done by a thesis statement, which you haven't included. Without a thesis statement of some sort, it becomes harder to see the structure of the essay.
Also, the language of the essay is very informal. One of the criteria is "Formal use of language", so try to avoid using words like "I" and "we" (though it is permissible to use "I" when giving a personal response. However, there are more formal ways to phrase a personal opinion) as well as "etc".
You should also try and use a Point - Evidence - Explanation analysis (or anything to that extent) when trying to make a point. For example, if you wanted to make the point that Eliot uses irony, you would first say:
"Eliot makes frequent use of irony"
then, you could show the evidence: "This can be seen in the line 'bla bla bla bla' "
once you have shown an example, explain: "The words bla and bla create an ironic tone, because.....".
As for a grade, I would agree with what talespirit has said.
A: 3-4
B:3
C:2
D:2
E:2
so 12-13. However, that's a 4.
these are the grade boundaries for A1 essays:
7: 22
6: 18
5: 13
4: 11
3: 8
2: 5
You have to remember that English essays are graded very subjectively though.
Rider
Speaking about this... Do you have an example of a well written paper 1 or a paper 2 talespirit?
Yes...but it's handwritten = =....i did it in class in about 1hr 20mins (P1) and i've also got P2 from my mocks but it's with my teacher, maybe i'll get it down when i've got time. I'll type it down (i'm not gonna paste the poem down too, but you can google it):
"The Destruction of Sennacherib" by Lord Byron relates in a third-person perspective, an historical event of the defeat of the Assyrian king Sennacherib, caused by a plague which destroyed his army over night. The maraculous nature of the incident conveyed through the speaker's tone of awe, presents the greatness of God who brought about this Miracle. In this poem, the speaker juxtaposes the army with the ocean waves, and with vivid natural imagery as well as through diction, metaphors, the use of colours, and symbolism, paints a picture of the event beautifully.
The poem has a clear structure which effectively reflects the army which it describes. Written in quatrains of rhyming couplets, the anapestic tetrameter gives the poem structured shape and form. The use of anapeastic tetrameter also mimicks the horse hooves which would be heard during the advancement. Regular structure is also an effective way in which to relate a story, especially one of Biblical reference such as this, making it a continuous flow of events.
The first stanza of the opem describes with the tone of aw, the majesty of the Assyrian troops which decended on Jerusalem 'like the wolf on the fold'(1). This use of simile emphasizes the sheer number and fierceness of the army like a hunting pack of wolves. The use of colours 'purple and gold'(2) not only adds colour to this painting, but those two colours also symbolize royalty, gold being the precious metal, while purple is the rarest colour, and symbolizes royalty. Here another simile is used which compares this great army and their spears as being 'stars ont eh sea'(3). This clearly conveys the uncountable spearpoints being as numerous as the number of stars in the sky which stretches as far as the eye could see, and which constantly moves like 'blue waves'(4) of the sea Galilee. This stanza is dedicated to the greatness of the army as nature itself is being brought to compare.
The second stanza is one of the most crucial stanzas which indicates the point of change, and turn of events. The speaker here compares the soldiers whith 'leaves of the forest when summer is green'(5), showing the presence of life and beauty and greatness number of leaves in summer. However, the use of trees also symbolizes change as the change of the seasons can be seen through the leaves. During the sunset, the host can still be seen, very much alive and in great numbers, but by the next morning, they are no more than 'leaves of the forest when autumn hath blown'(7). The use of autumn symbolizes the end of the life cycle and it is when the leaves die and fall. The diction 'withered and strown'(8) clearly depicts an image of scattered, wasted bodies lying across the ground.
Following the transition are stanzas three to five which relates how death itself is personified as an 'Angel'(9), decending onto the hosts, and the deaths of all things living, be they steed or man are described. The wings of the Angel paints an image of a great shadow, that flies and decends upon the dead bodies, very much like birds that fly past, creating a shadow that swipes across the ground below. It is also worth noting that the 'Angel of Death'(9) can also be a mythical allusion, since this poem itself has several references to the unnatural. The use of contrast in this section of the poem emphasizes the horror of the unusual occurance. 'The eyes of the sleepers waxed deadly and chill'(11) contradicts sleeping with eyes being open wide, as though the soldiers are having an unrestful sleep or even death. Diction which idicates suffering is also present as the horses and men are being described as 'gasping'(15), 'distorted and pale'(17). The final stillness which contrasts with the movement and colours in the beginning of the poem helps bring the soldiers' struggle to a close. The presence of silence, the 'dew' and the 'rust'(18) conveys the utter stillness of the morning that has been visited by the Angel of Death.
The final stanza moves away from the battle field and focuses more on the effects of this incident. There is another biblical reference to Baal, a false God being '[broken]'(22) and the 'might' of the 'Gentile'(23) though 'unsmote by the sword'(23) ends up 'melted'(24) at the presence of God. This last stanza emphasizes the might of God which can bring down even the most powerful of armies. Here the simile 'like snow'(24) reflects how the army was there one day and gone the next, very much like melted snow which leaves no trace at all. The exclaimation mark at the end serves to further emphasize the greatness of God.
The story of the plague which fell upon Sennacherib and his troops is beautifully painted by Byron through his juxtaposition of the army to the waves. This poem is paved with vivid images and similes which depicts clearly the majesty as well as the coming of unnatural death. The use of colours and symbolism proves extremely effective, thus the story of Sennacherib's defeat in this poem has been successfully related with flare.
Phew...that was tiring = =
Based on the English A1 HL Criteria:
That was a low 7 i believe
A: 4
B: 5
C: 4.5
D: 4.5
E: 4
= 22/25
NOTE: as this was a poem i wrote it in a chronological structure and didn't do the "one technique per paragraph" structure, however, i usually do that for prose and i find it more useful.
EDIT: There may be typos, please ignore as i typed this all up in like 15 minutes.
mankoosho
I always get a 23/25 on paper 1, but paper 2, i donno, can't manage to handle it right.
Its just that the novels that we read, they are confusing, and not so interesting:
1) Fathers and Sons
2) Pride and Prejudice
3) Great Gatsby
4) Wuthering Heights
Its just that the novels that we read, they are confusing, and not so interesting:
1) Fathers and Sons
2) Pride and Prejudice
3) Great Gatsby
4) Wuthering Heights
Your texts look better than mine:
1) Ethan Frome
2) One Day In The Life of Ivan Denisovich
3) 1984
4) The Handmaid's Tale
All of them pretty much depressing to read = =
talespirit
Your texts look better than mine:
1) Ethan Frome
2) One Day In The Life of Ivan Denisovich
3) 1984
4) The Handmaid's Tale
All of them pretty much depressing to read = =
1) Ethan Frome
2) One Day In The Life of Ivan Denisovich
3) 1984
4) The Handmaid's Tale
All of them pretty much depressing to read = =
Ya, but thats not a good thing. Did you actually read over or are you going to read over through your texts before the exam?
mankoosho
Ya, but thats not a good thing. Did you actually read over or are you going to read over through your texts before the exam?
I kind of read over them when i made my charts for revision (taking out quotes), and i read over my discussion notes and comprehension questions we did in class.
talespirit
I kind of read over them when i made my charts for revision (taking out quotes), and i read over my discussion notes and comprehension questions we did in class.
Would you recommend reading some notes or summaries for the novels, possibly the authors background and about the characters in the novel?
mankoosho
Would you recommend reading some notes or summaries for the novels, possibly the authors background and about the characters in the novel?
The most important thing to remember is key quotes...other than that, try go online (spark notes or something) and look for comprehension questions, they will help you remember the events of the texts. A good way to find good quotes is to read your/or someone else's past essays about those texts and take the quotes from there. I don't think author's background are overly important but can be useful. Look through some past questions and see what kind of things they ask for.
talespirit
The most important thing to remember is key quotes...other than that, try go online (spark notes or something) and look for comprehension questions, they will help you remember the events of the texts. A good way to find good quotes is to read your/or someone else's past essays about those texts and take the quotes from there. I don't think author's background are overly important but can be useful. Look through some past questions and see what kind of things they ask for.
Thanks....I have realized that the questions the IB brings each session are pretty much repeated, not exactly, but the overall aim of the questions is the same, is that true?
mankoosho
Thanks....I have realized that the questions the IB brings each session are pretty much repeated, not exactly, but the overall aim of the questions is the same, is that true?
Yes, they can be repetitive and cover certain areas :
Drama: Opening/Endings, Props, Presentation of character, contrast, visual imagery
Novels: Opening/Endings, Narrative viewpoints, Ways of representing thought and speech, Character, Landscape/setting/place, Time.
talespirit
Yes, they can be repetitive and cover certain areas :
Drama: Opening/Endings, Props, Presentation of character, contrast, visual imagery
Novels: Opening/Endings, Narrative viewpoints, Ways of representing thought and speech, Character, Landscape/setting/place, Time.
Drama: Opening/Endings, Props, Presentation of character, contrast, visual imagery
Novels: Opening/Endings, Narrative viewpoints, Ways of representing thought and speech, Character, Landscape/setting/place, Time.
So it would be a good thing to view past papers and look at the way they ask questions, possible think about how you would answer the questions?
mankoosho
So it would be a good thing to view past papers and look at the way they ask questions, possible think about how you would answer the questions?
Would be a good practice....look up past papers and practice planning answers (30 minutes) writing an introduction, topic sentences, and the quotes you're gonna use.
talespirit
Would be a good practice....look up past papers and practice planning answers (30 minutes) writing an introduction, topic sentences, and the quotes you're gonna use.
Ya, thanks.......
And sorry OP for taking your thread, but I am discussing something you could benefit from!!
GOOD LUCK to all
My texts are:
As I Lay Dying
Alias Grace
Beloved
Perfume
Didnt actually read them word by word, in fact, I did not read them at all
. I just read through the summaries, themes, motifs, etc... and have a solid background about each. However, I find it extremely hard to find similarities between them :/
As I Lay Dying
Alias Grace
Beloved
Perfume
Didnt actually read them word by word, in fact, I did not read them at all
. I just read through the summaries, themes, motifs, etc... and have a solid background about each. However, I find it extremely hard to find similarities between them :/Rider
My texts are:
As I Lay Dying
Alias Grace
Beloved
Perfume
Didnt actually read them word by word, in fact, I did not read them at all. I just read through the summaries, themes, motifs, etc... and have a solid background about each. However, I find it extremely hard to find similarities between them :/
As I Lay Dying
Alias Grace
Beloved
Perfume
Didnt actually read them word by word, in fact, I did not read them at all
. I just read through the summaries, themes, motifs, etc... and have a solid background about each. However, I find it extremely hard to find similarities between them :/Ya, thats a problem. The teacher would compare between the works, but the comparison is not that good to write a composition that will get a good mark!!
thankyou so much guys, it's really helpful, i should try to take in as much as possible before monday LOL
talking of structure, i've read the other threads in this room,
but.. im still a bit confused.
so for paper 1, do you usually structure using paragraphs focusing on seperate techniques, or do you develope it theme by theme?
and for paper 2, you can structure poem by poem, or should you aim for a running comparison such as the method talespirit mentioned? cos for some questions in paper 2, such as question like "how does the structure contribute to the meaning", I found it much more easier to do poem by poem.
thanks again
talking of structure, i've read the other threads in this room,
but.. im still a bit confused.
so for paper 1, do you usually structure using paragraphs focusing on seperate techniques, or do you develope it theme by theme?
and for paper 2, you can structure poem by poem, or should you aim for a running comparison such as the method talespirit mentioned? cos for some questions in paper 2, such as question like "how does the structure contribute to the meaning", I found it much more easier to do poem by poem.
thanks again
midweekbreak
thankyou so much guys, it's really helpful, i should try to take in as much as possible before monday LOL
talking of structure, i've read the other threads in this room,
but.. im still a bit confused.
so for paper 1, do you usually structure using paragraphs focusing on seperate techniques, or do you develope it theme by theme?
and for paper 2, you can structure poem by poem, or should you aim for a running comparison such as the method talespirit mentioned? cos for some questions in paper 2, such as question like "how does the structure contribute to the meaning", I found it much more easier to do poem by poem.
thanks again
talking of structure, i've read the other threads in this room,
but.. im still a bit confused.
so for paper 1, do you usually structure using paragraphs focusing on seperate techniques, or do you develope it theme by theme?
and for paper 2, you can structure poem by poem, or should you aim for a running comparison such as the method talespirit mentioned? cos for some questions in paper 2, such as question like "how does the structure contribute to the meaning", I found it much more easier to do poem by poem.
thanks again
For P1, i doubt you can do it theme by theme (how many themes can a passage possibly contain?), as i said, go for techniques by techniques, or go chronologically (works better for poetry because you get the sense of the poem as a whole). If you're going chronologically (i.e. stanza by stanza), first begin with the whole structure and perhaps narrative viewpoint before breaking the poem down.
For P2, P2 is a comparative essay....which explains in itself the need for clear comparison. You're not comparing poems, you're comparing how each poet use their poems (all the work of one poet is like a text, you're comparing between two texts), so when you quote, you quote certain parts of the poem and cite it by saying 'like a bla bla bla' ([poem], [poet]). If you do it poem by poem, you're just analyzing each poem, but you're not comparing them, which defeats the purpose of P2.
If the question is about 'how structure is used'....you list out the different techniques to do with structure: how many stanzas, are they uniform?, are the lines uniform?, enjambments or ceasuras?, rhyme, rythm....and the effects of each....there, that's the topic of your paragraphs.
EDIT: English A1 HL is not supposed to be easy
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