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Why is saying goodbye so hard?
The way i choke on my words
The feel of a tear running down my face
The questioning thought of if you find this as difficult as i do
Wondering if you will remember me?
If you will think of me?
Or will you just keep moving
Finding your next girl that can give you what you need
What you want
Someone to talk to at night til the early hours of the morning
Domeone to tell your deepest darkest secrets to
Someone to seek comfort from
Someone to cry withSomeone to laugh with
Someone to lay with
Am i just another body to you?
Another mark on your list?
Do i mean as much to you as you mean to me?

I wrote it on my phone and realize there are grammar issues sorry
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Why is saying goodbye so hard?The way i choke on my wordsThe feel of a tear running down my faceThe questioning thought of if you find this as difficult as i doWondering if you will remember me?If you will think of me?Or will you just keep movingFinding your next girl that can give you what you needWhat you wantSomeone to talk to at night til the early hours of the morningSomeone to tell your deepest darkest secrets toSomeone to seek comfort fromSomeone to cry withSomeone to laugh withSomeone to lay withAm i just another body to you?Another mark on your list?Do i mean as much to you as you mean to me?I wrote it on my phone and realize there are grammar issues sorry
It is a bit hard to read in first place and I personally found it lengthy but there are some nice sentences such as Another mark on your list? . It also seemed like as if this is a chat instead of poem because of the length. I am not a poetry type of person just someone enjoying literature but I would say 6 If you want to write poems you should because it is art and your expression.

Also welcome to TSR
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