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Creative Writing AQA Language Paper 1 Question 5 - Answer someone mark

Swish! Whine! Whistle!

The wind oozed in from the dismal abyss. The wind renewed its perpetual rage; like a distraught mother that had her new-born ripped from her untimely. Battering, smashing, exploding quietly everything in its path. Its destruction was uniform. The fortress of stone rocks clashed against the ominous dark wind. The abrading force of the wind was immense as it scraped violently against the archaic rocks. Lacerating was the pain that besieged the defenceless rocks (which cried out in humble submission), the wind ignored its pleas. Quickly, the wind’s biting cold pierced and exposed the gaps in the wall causing the rock to turn into small sediment, while shuddering, crumbling, trembling in fear of this unstoppable brute.

Swish!

Pacing onwards, the wind haunted its next victim, the vast defenceless grassland ahead. The grassland was tormented by the wind’s relentless fury as it whipped nervousness into the wind’s inanimate foe; carefully, the wind struck into a quiet but exploding fury upon the innocent bed of daffodils. The once yellow petals turned into a violent amber by the wind’s ceaseless onslaught.

Swish!

The biting, searching cold of the wind prowled stealthily like an unwelcome lion into the unsuspecting antelope’s watering-hole. Around the mountainous mountains causing the mountains to – thunder, boom, clash – in violent reproach against the wind. The clash illuminated the air transforming the mundane, melancholy suffocating atmosphere into one of vibrate passionate flair. However, the flair was short-lived and soon extinguished and smothered by the battle; as the mountains released a deep bellow causing a lacerating wound to whine which whirled away in wiching agony.

Swish!
The deafening smell of decay from the stone fortress plagued the air. Additionally, to the fortress’ nervous sweat of apprehension caused the wind to hone in of the fortress. Acting callously and ruthlessly in nature the wind set its lustful sights on the stone fortress. Its extensive fortifications that spanned the fortresses’ entirety was just a mere toy in the sight of the wind. The wind played and laughed for a while but soon it grew bored. Utterly, obliterated the rubble lamented in defeat.

Swish!

A ting of death lurked and marked the now barren, fruitless, miserable wasteland. The wind boomed triumphantly and oozed slowly into the dismal abyss.

Swish! Whine! Whistle!

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Vetrix42

Here is the link to the question: file:///C:/Users/The%20Bejides/Pictu...1%20Qu%205.pdf

Please mark out of 40 and give EBI.

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Vetrix42

Sorry this is the link: file:///C:/Users/The%20Bejides/Pictures/Scans/English%20Language%20Paper%201%20Qu%205.pdf

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Vetrix42

To the question 5 extract. Please mark out of 40 and how I can improve. file:///C:/Users/The%20Bejides/Pictures/Scans/English%20Language%20Paper%201%20Qu%205.pdf

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