Can someone please mark this RE essay?

That's strange for the book references, does that give more marks? My teacher says it doesn't matter
And you're right, I do a weird structure - I did two against and two agree but for both religions so they're balanced. And I don't want to contradict anything to you - but my friends did a lot of introductions though they never received marks for it, so now I'm conflicted xD.
And for the evaluation, should I say something like: "this demonstrates that Jews do not support nuclear weapons as....."
Thank you soooo much!!

Of course I mean it! There are answers out there with less than half the effort of this and still get full marks. With RE, it seems the examiners have to dish out the marks as long as some content and evidence is there.

I have an RE exam tomorrow (GCSE AQA exam board).
I did a really quick 12 mark question and it took me 7 minutes to type out. This is probably the quality of work I'd produce in my exam as I took no references or any minutes extra than needed. It's bad, I know - but I must know what mark it would receive. And if the mark is really bad, could you please give any tips?

Question: "There are no good reasons for countries to possess nuclear weapons"
Many Christians may agree as nuclear weapons prohibit the loving nature God wants us to act onto others. For example, in the Bible Jesus said "those who live by the sword die by the sword". This ultimately shows that nuclear weapons only create a vicious cycle of blood feuds which will never reach a conclusion of peace.

Other Christians believe that if for any reason another country has caused pain or torment to its enemy, then a proportional retribution should follow. For in the Bible it says that we should take "an eye for an eye and a tooth for a tooth". This shows that following actions of injustice, we should be able to deploy the same attributes, otherwise if we stay silent, evil will persevere.

Some Jews may agree as nuclear weapons are an unjustifiable act of murder which only creates greater pain to others. In the Torah it says "if one man murders a man, the scriptures will consider him as if he killed the whole world." This shows the importance of sanctity of life as God created everyone and it's only acceptable for God to take back the life that He created.

Other Jews may disagree as sometimes in order to annihilate any evil doings, violence through weaponry must be used, otherwise being too kind will lead to a greater evil. In the Torah it says, "sword against nation shall never again know war". This quote demonstrates that Jews look forward to a time of peace, elucidating that nuclear weapons should be used in dire cases if this is the only way to achieve their Messianic age.

In conclusion, both religions do not support such a high mass of killing but do consider it in dire cases where no other form of retribution or deterrence can occur.

That's strange for the book references, does that give more marks? My teacher says it doesn't matter
And you're right, I do a weird structure - I did two against and two agree but for both religions so they're balanced. And I don't want to contradict anything to you - but my friends did a lot of introductions though they never received marks for it, so now I'm conflicted xD.
And for the evaluation, should I say something like: "this demonstrates that Jews do not support nuclear weapons as....."
Thank you soooo much!!

If you give a book reference, it makes the examiner more likely to give a higher mark within the level you have been placed in.
By evaluation I mean something like:
This is a strong argument because if christians use nuclear weapons, they violate the commandments of God and hence commit a sinful action. This makes it less likely that they will be sent to heaven on judgement day and will instead experience suffering in hell

I'm so, so happy! Thanks very much! Good luck to your exams <3

The intro doesnt have to be long. Something like:
In this essay, I will argue against the statement 'xyz'

Thank you. Same goes for you but if I were you I wouldn't worry too much, you've got this.

Damn, I wish someone told me that...I never knew - I'd have to go through all of the quotes and memorise all of the references
And thank you for clearing the evaluation up!

Damn, I wish someone told me that...I never knew - I'd have to go through all of the quotes and memorise all of the references
And thank you for clearing the evaluation up!

It's not the end of the world if you can't learn the book but it helps.
Good luck for your exam tomorrow

Also, stop saying "many Christians" or "some Jews" be more specific. Some Christian such as...

I have an RE exam tomorrow (GCSE AQA exam board).
I did a really quick 12 mark question and it took me 7 minutes to type out. This is probably the quality of work I'd produce in my exam as I took no references or any minutes extra than needed. It's bad, I know - but I must know what mark it would receive. And if the mark is really bad, could you please give any tips?

Question: "There are no good reasons for countries to possess nuclear weapons"
Many Christians may agree as nuclear weapons prohibit the loving nature God wants us to act onto others. For example, in the Bible Jesus said "those who live by the sword die by the sword". This ultimately shows that nuclear weapons only create a vicious cycle of blood feuds which will never reach a conclusion of peace.

Other Christians believe that if for any reason another country has caused pain or torment to its enemy, then a proportional retribution should follow. For in the Bible it says that we should take "an eye for an eye and a tooth for a tooth". This shows that following actions of injustice, we should be able to deploy the same attributes, otherwise if we stay silent, evil will persevere.

Some Jews may agree as nuclear weapons are an unjustifiable act of murder which only creates greater pain to others. In the Torah it says "if one man murders a man, the scriptures will consider him as if he killed the whole world." This shows the importance of sanctity of life as God created everyone and it's only acceptable for God to take back the life that He created.

Other Jews may disagree as sometimes in order to annihilate any evil doings, violence through weaponry must be used, otherwise being too kind will lead to a greater evil. In the Torah it says, "sword against nation shall never again know war". This quote demonstrates that Jews look forward to a time of peace, elucidating that nuclear weapons should be used in dire cases if this is the only way to achieve their Messianic age.

In conclusion, both religions do not support such a high mass of killing but do consider it in dire cases where no other form of retribution or deterrence can occur.

Just a quick note that it may say in the 12 marker to refer to non-religious viewpoints. If so, I'd refer to it.
And the conclusion in my opinion needs a little more depth, but apart from that, it's great

Thank you so much!!!

I have an RE exam tomorrow (GCSE AQA exam board).
I did a really quick 12 mark question and it took me 7 minutes to type out. This is probably the quality of work I'd produce in my exam as I took no references or any minutes extra than needed. It's bad, I know - but I must know what mark it would receive. And if the mark is really bad, could you please give any tips?

Question: "There are no good reasons for countries to possess nuclear weapons"
Many Christians may agree as nuclear weapons prohibit the loving nature God wants us to act onto others. For example, in the Bible Jesus said "those who live by the sword die by the sword". This ultimately shows that nuclear weapons only create a vicious cycle of blood feuds which will never reach a conclusion of peace.

Other Christians believe that if for any reason another country has caused pain or torment to its enemy, then a proportional retribution should follow. For in the Bible it says that we should take "an eye for an eye and a tooth for a tooth". This shows that following actions of injustice, we should be able to deploy the same attributes, otherwise if we stay silent, evil will persevere.

Some Jews may agree as nuclear weapons are an unjustifiable act of murder which only creates greater pain to others. In the Torah it says "if one man murders a man, the scriptures will consider him as if he killed the whole world." This shows the importance of sanctity of life as God created everyone and it's only acceptable for God to take back the life that He created.

Other Jews may disagree as sometimes in order to annihilate any evil doings, violence through weaponry must be used, otherwise being too kind will lead to a greater evil. In the Torah it says, "sword against nation shall never again know war". This quote demonstrates that Jews look forward to a time of peace, elucidating that nuclear weapons should be used in dire cases if this is the only way to achieve their Messianic age.

In conclusion, both religions do not support such a high mass of killing but do consider it in dire cases where no other form of retribution or deterrence can occur.

I would have to give this a 6 as you have not really analysed your points which is key to getting into the top bracket.