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The homework task was to write a detailed summary of act 1 of Romeo and Juliet let me know what you think
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It's a good and detailed summary. Just watch out for grammar, repetition and your wording. For example:

The prologue introduces us to the play and tells us the play is based on 2 lovers who are from 2 arguing families.

Don't repeat "us" twice and always the use words in place of numbers.

You could say this:

The prologue introduces the reader to the play and its central issue of two star-crossed lovers who cannot be together due to their rival families.
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It's a good and detailed summary. Just watch out for grammar, repetition and your wording. For example:

The prologue introduces us to the play and tells us the play is based on 2 lovers who are from 2 arguing families.

Don't repeat "us" twice and always the use words in place of numbers.

You could say this:

The prologue introduces the reader to the play and its central issue of two star-crossed lovers who cannot be together due to their rival families.
Thank you i will make those changes now
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