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In a hurry I submitted it poem by mistake, it went for the huge competition in my country, ages from 9 to 25 are taking part in it, I don’t think this poem is going to help me win, I really need an honest review about this poem, the theme is “tomorrow”


The contemplation of the bright flowers
I hope tomorrow would bloom
Or yet again I would assume,
And watch as the dark devours

A little garden of my imagination
For some peace of the burden
I know this world has given,
One day, I’ll meet my destination

When harshly cut out, ripping it from it’s life
Does anyone know?
This is what happens with a knife
But it doesn’t hurt the same
as the source has been changed

Tomorrow would bring days or nights
Sometimes I’m not sure,
Which one is right?
All I know is both have thorns
like every flower in the little garden
that was born


Is the poem really bad and doesn’t make sense or is it good enough to win me the competition??
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I’m not an English expert, but I really liked it. I have to say I did not quite follow the line “I’ll meet my destination”, but that might just be me. Good luck with the competition!
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