Religious study paperWatch
If someone please mark my RS question and suggest how I can improve.
However, I can see some good explanation
Regardless, I got a 9 in my exams last year and I followed this structure when it came to 12/15 markers:
[blank] may agree with this statement [try to rephrase the question every now and again] since [explain your point]. Evidence of this can be found in [insert your sources of wisdom and authority]. Now link back to your question by saying how strong/weak the argument is which acts as a tiny conclusion.
Repeat this for 3 times for both for and against the statement (3 v 3). Followed by a short conclusion where you summarise your points both for and against.
Again, I don't want to mislead you incase you do a different exam board or if you've simply been taught differently. I couldn't read your answer that well since the photos were a bit blurry so I apologise for the general advice.