Does "A very strong wind" make sense?

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"The door was already wide open from other students that had passed before me, as I was walking through, a very strong wind blew which caused me to loose my balance"
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"The door was already wide open from other students that had passed before me, as I was walking through, a very strong wind blew which caused me to loose my balance"
Yes, but lose only has one 'o'
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A few months ago I was almost blown over by a very strong wind
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Yes, but lose only has one 'o'
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It does make sense, it's a bit wordy though. 'Already' is implied so you don't need that as well, and causing works better than which caused to me.

Those things are optional, but you definitely need to split the sentences. So 'The door was wide open from the students that had passed before me. As I was walking through a strong wind blew, causing me to lose my balance'.

Good description though
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"The door was already wide open from other students that had passed before me, as I was walking through, a very strong wind blew which caused me to loose my balance"
The door was already open wide from the horde of students who had marched before me. I meekly attempted to follow, only to be flung aside like a ragdoll by a gust of wind with the force of a sledgehammer.
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Yes. It makes sense.
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It does make sense, it's a bit wordy though. 'Already' is implied so you don't need that as well, and causing works better than which caused to me.

Those things are optional, but you definitely need to split the sentences. So 'The door was wide open from the students that had passed before me. As I was walking through a strong wind blew, causing me to lose my balance'.

Good description though
thank you very much!
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