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Firstly, your written expression needs work. Your points are unclear, as is your meaning. There is no way you can achieve level 3 / 4 with this lack of clarity. L3, ‘clear, relevant’, means that you can compare the sources in obvious ways – to do this, you need to express yourself in a clear way.
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Your point needs more detail – what experiences do they face? What perspective do they share?
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Where is your evidence for Source B in your first paragraph? You need to compare, meaning you need words like ‘similarly’ within the paragraph and throughout your response.
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Where is evidence of Walker’s humour? You don’t discuss this, despite mentioning that this is their viewpoint.
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You need more references to techniques and their effect.
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You need to sustain your comparison throughout (A+B / A+B) What is your comparative point in the second paragraph? Where is your reference to writers’ perspectives?
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Clearly indicate the source that evidence is taken from.
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How are the quotations in your second paragraph juxtaposed? What is inhuman about ‘unprotected flesh and bone’?
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Firstly, your written expression needs work. Your points are unclear, as is your meaning. There is no way you can achieve level 3 / 4 with this lack of clarity. L3, ‘clear, relevant’, means that you can compare the sources in obvious ways – to do this, you need to express yourself in a clear way.
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Your point needs more detail – what experiences do they face? What perspective do they share?
•
Where is your evidence for Source B in your first paragraph? You need to compare, meaning you need words like ‘similarly’ within the paragraph and throughout your response.
•
Where is evidence of Walker’s humour? You don’t discuss this, despite mentioning that this is their viewpoint.
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You need more references to techniques and their effect.
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You need to sustain your comparison throughout (A+B / A+B) What is your comparative point in the second paragraph? Where is your reference to writers’ perspectives?
•
Clearly indicate the source that evidence is taken from.
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How are the quotations in your second paragraph juxtaposed? What is inhuman about ‘unprotected flesh and bone’?
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Firstly, your written expression needs work. Your points are unclear, as is your meaning. There is no way you can achieve level 3 / 4 with this lack of clarity. L3, ‘clear, relevant’, means that you can compare the sources in obvious ways – to do this, you need to express yourself in a clear way.
•
Your point needs more detail – what experiences do they face? What perspective do they share?
•
Where is your evidence for Source B in your first paragraph? You need to compare, meaning you need words like ‘similarly’ within the paragraph and throughout your response.
•
Where is evidence of Walker’s humour? You don’t discuss this, despite mentioning that this is their viewpoint.
•
You need more references to techniques and their effect.
•
You need to sustain your comparison throughout (A+B / A+B) What is your comparative point in the second paragraph? Where is your reference to writers’ perspectives?
•
Clearly indicate the source that evidence is taken from.
•
How are the quotations in your second paragraph juxtaposed? What is inhuman about ‘unprotected flesh and bone’?
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