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I am first year Theology undergraduate who has received the following feedback from an essay. I'm pleased with the mark of 75%, but disappointed with the predominately negative comments. What can I do to inprove or am worrying over nothing?

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Communication skills
Very good on the whole, with a few inaccuracies. Consistency needed in presentation of bibliography (sometimes surname placed first, sometimes the Christian name, resulting in inconsistencies when the list is put into alphabetical order)

Knowledge and understanding
You show an excellent grasp of the issues. The only room for improvement is to be more specific, e.g. when referring to his ‘opponents’ (p. 1), or to the question of the biblical basis for his ideas on original sin (p. 3).

Research skills
Extremely impressive bibliography for Level 4 work – perhaps to the point of overkill: there is no need at this level to compare different editions of the same secondary work, as you do with both Brown and Burnaby.

Analytical/critical skills
An excellent argument that is scrupulously fair and balanced and well-informed. Well done!
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And what comments are negative exactly?
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errm they are good if you ask me?

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I find the comments to be constructive, if I'm honest. Praise for each section, then a point to improve on next time. what's wrong with that?
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What's wrong with them- 75% is a good mark for a university essay and to provide feedback that is worth something those little details had to be picked up on.
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I also don't really see what the problem is, the two areas of criticism (provide a consistent bibliography and be specific) seem fairly constructive and easy to achieve. I wish I got 75s and feedback that constructive for my essays.
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Be thankful you get any feedback!! I have sheets back from tutors where I have been given fails with no comments as to why!!
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(Original post by anon53)
Communication skills
Very good on the whole, with a few inaccuracies. Consistency needed in presentation of bibliography (sometimes surname placed first, sometimes the Christian name, resulting in inconsistencies when the list is put into alphabetical order)

Knowledge and understanding
You show an excellent grasp of the issues. The only room for improvement is to be more specific, e.g. when referring to his ‘opponents’ (p. 1), or to the question of the biblical basis for his ideas on original sin (p. 3).

Research skills
Extremely impressive bibliography for Level 4 work – perhaps to the point of overkill: there is no need at this level to compare different editions of the same secondary work, as you do with both Brown and Burnaby.

Analytical/critical skills
An excellent argument that is scrupulously fair and balanced and well-informed. Well done!
If you think that's negative, you really need to improve on reading comprehension.
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I also don't really see what the problem is, the two areas of criticism (provide a consistent bibliography and be specific) seem fairly constructive and easy to achieve.
Very true, simple, essential essay skills. If you lack them, don't whinge, sort it out.
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OP is blatantly just fishing for (more) compliments. *Yawn*.
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I'd love feedback like that with that mark- one of my friends got an essay back with simply 'This is ****, did you do any of the reading?'!
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...tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am....
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...tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am....
Boosh, you are wonderful. Cheers for that rep btw
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lol well, ok yes.

oh, and you're welcome
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Ummm that's not what I call negative. Just a couple of point of good constructive criticism about minor details (you're not going to cry over getting your referencing a bit wrong are you?). The most important part is the argument and you got praise indeed for it!

I think you have issues myself!
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I think the thread title should be changed to "ohhhh, everyone, look, give me attention, GIMME GIMME GIMME praise, I wroted a fantastical essay and think you should all know"

:rolleyes:
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How on earth is that negative?
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(Original post by Reflexive)
And what comments are negative exactly?
:ditto:
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(Original post by The Boosh)
...tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am tell me how wonderful i am....
Ditto methinks
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It's just positive feedback, no negative seen here.
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