your hair seams fine to me =/
i dont see anything wrong with it.
Are you going anywhere on holiday?
It looks fine matey, u just need to be careful not to spike it all up in a brushed back fashion (it ends up looking afroish and not nice!) - a bit like u have in the top pic.
But overall, ur first attempt is good ... brush it off to one side..and try to keep a fringe ie. dnt spike it up as well.
every day is gonna be differant, hair grows and its gonna be hard to get it the exact same every time, just do your best and worst case just get another hair cut to style it.