can I start a sentance with Especially intrigued by..

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is it formal and does it make sense? Especially intrigued by___, I completed___
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Probably make it ‘Being especially intrigued by’
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THANKS!
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Clearly, you could write "Intrigued by virology, I completed an online course." You could prefix that with "Being", but it's not necessary, and is less succinct.

Inserting "especially" in front doesn't fundamentally change the structure, so therefore you can say "Especially intrigued by virology, I completed an online course." Of course, it would only really make sense if the text preceding this sentence makes it clear what the "especially" is in relation to.
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You could, but it sounds a bit clunky, to be honest.

What would the whole sentence be?
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I agree in that it sounds clunky. It's never recommended to start sentences like that. Just go with: I completed ____ because I found it especially intriguing. As an aside, intriguing doesn't really mean anything (even if it's not as infamously bad as interesting). Find an adjective that allows you to convey your meaning as precisely and succinctly as possible without resorting to a shallow non-word.
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(Original post by female_L)
is it formal and does it make sense? Especially intrigued by___, I completed___
I just wanted to add that I would recommend doing a spell check after writing your Personal Statement. I noticed your spelling of the word 'sentence'.

You will want to give the best impression of yourself when you submit this, so watch out for little things like that.
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Sentence* and I would start by saying 'After being especially intrigued by...'
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It's a perfectly acceptable sentence, as long as it reads well in context. I wouldn't judge it either clunky or elegant in isolation. It could work well as a 'follow-on' clause, after a semicolon.
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