English- Which grade would you give this? 1-9Watch
im no expert. Its pretty good. For English Language GCSE they don't care how well the story is writen simply that it is jam packed with all language and structural techniques( a shame really).
a well written story doesn't have to have lots of techniques jam packed in it. But, to do well in the GCSE exam need to include lots of techniques. A well written story won't hurt your chances of doing well in the exam but its not they are after. They are looking for how many techniques you have used using all of them and making the story original is the way to go for exam purposes.