GCSE English Language paper 2 question 2

Hi, could somebody who is familiar with the English language marks scheme mark this question for me please, thank you.

2017 June paper 2

One difference between how the boys play in source A and source B is the boy in source A enjoys “running up to people.” This suggests he likes running. On top of that, it infers the boy is energetic and maybe also excited by visitors. Unlike in source A, the boy in source B plays,”drums and tin trumpets”. This suggests the boy enjoys playing music. This infers his parents also play a musical instrument and the boy is inspires by the parents and therefore wants to follow i their footsteps.

Another difference between how the boys play in source A and source B is the boy in source A is “nestled in the crook of my arms.” This suggests the boy does not pay much interest in his environment. This infers the boy does not care and does not like learning new information. On the other hand, boy in source B, “liked to ask questions.” This suggests he is interested and observant of what surrounds him. This infers the boy loves learning.

Another difference between how the boys play in source A and B is the boy in source A was often,”sucking on my little finger.” This suggests the boy in source A is immature in comparison to the other boy. This infers the boy in source A is younger than the boy in source B. This is because the boy in source B,” had a habit of whistling.” This suggests the boy is older than 3 because it is very unlikely that a baby could whistle. This infers the boy is older than boy in source A.

Hi, could somebody who is familiar with the English language marks scheme mark this question for me please, thank you.

2017 June paper 2

One difference between how the boys play in source A and source B is the boy in source A enjoys “running up to people.” This suggests he likes running. On top of that, it infers the boy is energetic and maybe also excited by visitors. Unlike in source A, the boy in source B plays,”drums and tin trumpets”. This suggests the boy enjoys playing music. This infers his parents also play a musical instrument and the boy is inspires by the parents and therefore wants to follow i their footsteps.

Another difference between how the boys play in source A and source B is the boy in source A is “nestled in the crook of my arms.” This suggests the boy does not pay much interest in his environment. This infers the boy does not care and does not like learning new information. On the other hand, boy in source B, “liked to ask questions.” This suggests he is interested and observant of what surrounds him. This infers the boy loves learning.

Another difference between how the boys play in source A and B is the boy in source A was often,”sucking on my little finger.” This suggests the boy in source A is immature in comparison to the other boy. This infers the boy in source A is younger than the boy in source B. This is because the boy in source B,” had a habit of whistling.” This suggests the boy is older than 3 because it is very unlikely that a baby could whistle. This infers the boy is older than boy in source A.

can I just ask what grade you're aiming for?

but speaking of the actual writing, it is good, it just needs a few tweaks here and there.

for example when you said 'This suggests he likes running', it's not really necessary, because we already knew that fact from the quotation. so, you could use that phrase and instead say: this suggests/ shines a light on/implies his energetic and excitable nature.

Then, you could use 'furthermore' instead of 'on top of that' and talk further about how the boy is lively around visitors.

At the end of that paragraph, you've written 'This suggests the boy enjoys playing music. This infers his parents also play a musical instrument and the boy is inspired by the parents and therefore wants to follow in their footsteps.' However, I would say: from this, we can infer (then insert the stuff about instruments and inspiration.)

Also, think about if the two boys -as you've written about them in the first paragraph- are actually different in terms of their passion for running/music. If they are, that's fine, I was just wondering.

sorry, i couldn't edit the rest of it like above, but if I have time I can come back to do some more. hope that helped : )

I don’t know what grade im aiming for but hopefully 5/6/7 out of 8 for this question. I understand that it was stating the obvious but I was trying to complete it in less than 20 minutes. Hah I’ll definitely take you’re comments on board and do some practice. What mark do you think I would get out of 8 for this question because I have no idea where I’m at because of lockdown and disruption and I have mocks in the coming weeks 😭

id say this is at a 5/8, but at the top of a 5- if I can say that. Getting to a six would be really easy for you if you just correct some of the stuff that I pointed out (there's also a couple of spag errors).

What about getting to the top end 7-8. I also thought that SPaG is not taken into account with this question, or that’s what I’ve been told by my teacher. Thank you though

top level will take some time- you need high-level vocabulary that is not repeated throughout and you need actual inferences- not just a re-phrasing of the quotation
and yeah, while spag doesn't have its own section of marks, in english its always accounted for when deciding the final mark, so while it doesn't have to be super high level (at least in this 8 marker), it needs to be correctly used consistently at the minimum.
hope this helps

Hi, could somebody who is familiar with the English language marks scheme mark this question for me please, thank you.

2017 June paper 2

One difference between how the boys play in source A and source B is the boy in source A enjoys “running up to people.” This suggests he likes running. On top of that, it infers the boy is energetic and maybe also excited by visitors. Unlike in source A, the boy in source B plays,”drums and tin trumpets”. This suggests the boy enjoys playing music. This infers his parents also play a musical instrument and the boy is inspires by the parents and therefore wants to follow i their footsteps.

Another difference between how the boys play in source A and source B is the boy in source A is “nestled in the crook of my arms.” This suggests the boy does not pay much interest in his environment. This infers the boy does not care and does not like learning new information. On the other hand, boy in source B, “liked to ask questions.” This suggests he is interested and observant of what surrounds him. This infers the boy loves learning.

Another difference between how the boys play in source A and B is the boy in source A was often,”sucking on my little finger.” This suggests the boy in source A is immature in comparison to the other boy. This infers the boy in source A is younger than the boy in source B. This is because the boy in source B,” had a habit of whistling.” This suggests the boy is older than 3 because it is very unlikely that a baby could whistle. This infers the boy is older than boy in source A.