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I've had a random idea for a book...what do you guys think?
A society in which the seven deadly sins are diseases...and maybe the population gets wiped out? I'm not sure yet. I'm thinking it an be dystopian, and it sort of acts like a critique on society and warns of the greed of Mankind?
Is this already a thing... or is my creativity god-like B-) (jokes though)
What do y'alls think?
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Sounds good. I don't recognise the plot from anything I have read so I'd say you're imagination is wicked.
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Yeah it sounds like an awesome story. Maybe you could have 7 characters who embody the sins and their struggles with the sin and how they overcome it or eventually give in.
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Ooo it sounds like a book or anime plot. Your imagination is impressive, good luck if you continue it!
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yeah it sounds like an awesome story. Maybe you could have 7 characters who embody the sins and their struggles with the sin and how they overcome it or eventually give in.
sounds great!
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pls make this book. especially with the character idea
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(Original post by hannah.chick)
I've had a random idea for a book...what do you guys think?
A society in which the seven deadly sins are diseases...and maybe the population gets wiped out? I'm not sure yet. I'm thinking it an be dystopian, and it sort of acts like a critique on society and warns of the greed of Mankind?
Is this already a thing... or is my creativity god-like B-) (jokes though)
What do y'alls think?
did you get inspired by corona
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did you get inspired by corona
ehehehehe, weirdly enough, i got it as i was making my bed :cool:
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pls make this book. especially with the character idea
I'll put you in the acknowledgements
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I'll put you in the acknowledgements
omg that would be awesome! i would generally read this book. im a major bookworm but very picky
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I'll post a bit whenever I make a chapter baby ahaaaaaaaa that sounded weird
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ehehehehe, weirdly enough, i got it as i was making my bed :cool:
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I know!

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Weird :lol:
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I know!


Weird :lol:
yeah :rolleyes:
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omg that would be awesome! i would generally read this book. im a major bookworm but very picky
It's not much (and not very good) but... "Once upon a time, Humans lived in perfect harmony. No quarrels, no bickering, no hatred, no envy, jealousy nor greed. Nothing. Pure and utter bliss. But, this is not a fairy tale dear reader, Humans are fickle beings with an intense desire for self-destruction. Peace is never permanent. They did everything they could to keep the peace, but eventually ManKind got greedy, got angry, got lazy. GovernHarmony were furious...but not for long. Anger and rage killed them, too much rage creates too much heat in the body, dear reader. Blood boils, skin burns and a puddle of human gets created. What a frightful sight indeed! EvoEmotion was no more.That was until ManKind did its thing. They came back, but new, fresh, Numb again. At first the Beings were indistinguishable, no eyes, no nose, no hair. Eventually they evolved, became things, did things. Some took the lead, others rebuilt the city after the Sinocide. After some time this new generation were thriving, living, breathing. Everyone was Numb again. Peace again. But...like I said, reader, peace never lasts long does it?...

Hope you like it
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yeah :rolleyes:
It's not much (and not very good) but... "Once upon a time, Humans lived in perfect harmony. No quarrels, no bickering, no hatred, no envy, jealousy nor greed. Nothing. Pure and utter bliss. But, this is not a fairy tale dear reader, Humans are fickle beings with an intense desire for self-destruction. Peace is never permanent. They did everything they could to keep the peace, but eventually ManKind got greedy, got angry, got lazy. GovernHarmony were furious...but not for long. Anger and rage killed them, too much rage creates too much heat in the body, dear reader. Blood boils, skin burns and a puddle of human gets created. What a frightful sight indeed! EvoEmotion was no more.That was until ManKind did its thing. They came back, but new, fresh, Numb again. At first the Beings were indistinguishable, no eyes, no nose, no hair. Eventually they evolved, became things, did things. Some took the lead, others rebuilt the city after the Sinocide. After some time this new generation were thriving, living, breathing. Everyone was Numb again. Peace again. But...like I said, reader, peace never lasts long does it?...

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(Original post by hannah.chick)
It's not much (and not very good) but... "Once upon a time, Humans lived in perfect harmony. No quarrels, no bickering, no hatred, no envy, jealousy nor greed. Nothing. Pure and utter bliss. But, this is not a fairy tale dear reader, Humans are fickle beings with an intense desire for self-destruction. Peace is never permanent. They did everything they could to keep the peace, but eventually ManKind got greedy, got angry, got lazy. GovernHarmony were furious...but not for long. Anger and rage killed them, too much rage creates too much heat in the body, dear reader. Blood boils, skin burns and a puddle of human gets created. What a frightful sight indeed! EvoEmotion was no more.That was until ManKind did its thing. They came back, but new, fresh, Numb again. At first the Beings were indistinguishable, no eyes, no nose, no hair. Eventually they evolved, became things, did things. Some took the lead, others rebuilt the city after the Sinocide. After some time this new generation were thriving, living, breathing. Everyone was Numb again. Peace again. But...like I said, reader, peace never lasts long does it?...

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wow that's good. I love it!
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(Original post by hannah.chick)
I've had a random idea for a book...what do you guys think?
A society in which the seven deadly sins are diseases...and maybe the population gets wiped out? I'm not sure yet. I'm thinking it an be dystopian, and it sort of acts like a critique on society and warns of the greed of Mankind?
Is this already a thing... or is my creativity god-like B-) (jokes though)
What do y'alls think?
Woah this sounds cool!
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(Original post by hannah.chick)
I've had a random idea for a book...what do you guys think?
A society in which the seven deadly sins are diseases...and maybe the population gets wiped out? I'm not sure yet. I'm thinking it an be dystopian, and it sort of acts like a critique on society and warns of the greed of Mankind?
Is this already a thing... or is my creativity god-like B-) (jokes though)
What do y'alls think?
Have you been watching Fullmetal Alchemist recently?
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Have you been watching Fullmetal Alchemist recently?
I have not...is it similar?
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