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Hi, would someone be able to give me a mark and feedback for this essay I wrote on the topic of Crime and Deviance in AQA sociology?
I have put it in a google document as I think it's too long to post on tsr.



Thank you!
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You should really post essays online because it means they will be cached by google and flagged as plagiarism by any plagiarism checking software. Obviously not an issue if it's only an essay for A-level that will be marked internally by your teacher, but any externally marked essay and all essays written at uni will likely be run through such software.
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(Original post by Greta_beecroft)
Hi, would someone be able to give me a mark and feedback for this essay I wrote on the topic of Crime and Deviance in AQA sociology?
I have put it in a google document as I think it's too long to post on tsr.

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1...it?usp=sharing

Thank you!
I fully agree with what artful_lounger said about posting your essay online. If this was a uni essay, it will be cached by Google and potentially flagged as plagiarism by any plagiarism checking software such as Turnitin.

Anyways, I did study A-level Sociology and Crime and Deviance was one of the topics we were taught so I'm happy to give constructive feedback on the essay, but I can't give a mark.
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be careful to avoid plagiarism
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(Original post by artful_lounger)
You should really post essays online because it means they will be cached by google and flagged as plagiarism by any plagiarism checking software. Obviously not an issue if it's only an essay for A-level that will be marked internally by your teacher, but any externally marked essay and all essays written at uni will likely be run through such software.
I was a little worried by that, but there are other example essays online so I didn't think it would matter too much? Or is it still bad?
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I was a little worried by that, but there are other example essays online so I didn't think it would matter too much? Or is it still bad?
It's not that other people will copy it - it's that google has a verbatim copy of your essay recorded in their web cache. That is what turnitin and similar things check for similarity reports, so if you submitted this as formal piece of assessment (i.e. A-level coursework, or a uni assignment) it would flag up with near 100% similarity to an existing "thing" on the internet, and they would assume you plagiarised it.

As I said, if it's just for an in class essay being marked by your teacher for A-level that isn't externally assessed coursework, it's fine. You should however not get into the habit of doing so because it does run the risks outlined above.
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(Original post by artful_lounger)
It's not that other people will copy it - it's that google has a verbatim copy of your essay recorded in their web cache. That is what turnitin and similar things check for similarity reports, so if you submitted this as formal piece of assessment (i.e. A-level coursework, or a uni assignment) it would flag up with near 100% similarity to an existing "thing" on the internet, and they would assume you plagiarised it.

As I said, if it's just for an in class essay being marked by your teacher for A-level that isn't externally assessed coursework, it's fine. You should however not get into the habit of doing so because it does run the risks outlined above.
Oh okay, thank you that makes sense!
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I've just added some feedback via comments on your essay in Google Docs. The structure of the essay can definitely be improved - I would double-check with a teacher with the suggestion I made about how to structure an essay like this because I haven't studied A-level sociology for over 2 years. But, I remember at the time, this was how my teacher wanted us to structure our 20/30 markers. Hope this helps!
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