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Possibly one of the worst poems, lol. I wrote this in order to move on from someone, two people in fact. If no good, be honest. I respect constructive criticism.

Title: Time To Leave You Behind

Haunted by past events
Segments of you
Find someone new
Included to forget you
Time to leave you behind

You echo on my mind
I am blind to find someone new
All I can think of is you
Time to leave you behind

Broken hearted since you left
You were kind
You echo on my mind
Time to leave you behind

Shot in the heart
You torn me apart
Locked in the dark
Time to leave you behind

You echo on my mind
Find comfort in pain
Nothing but rain
Time to leave you behind
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pretty good
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Anonymous #1
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Sorry, just realised that I made a mistake.

Inclined to forget you is what I meant to write.
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😮😁👌
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This is one of the best poems I’ve read
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(Original post by CaptainDuckie)
This is one of the best poems I’ve read
I very much doubt that, but cheers. 🍻😂
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I very much doubt that, but cheers. 🍻😂
Nah seriously, the way you used stanzas is beautiful.

I think I’ll rate it a solid 9/10, I’m expecting to read more from you.
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I very much doubt that, but cheers. 🍻😂
its good. better than the poem i wrote lol
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(Original post by BluMoon06)
its good. better than the poem i wrote lol
I could rate your poem if you post it, if not, it is fine. But I am sure it is not as bad as you believe.
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i bet you're crying.
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i bet you're crying.
No, my eyes are completely tears-free.
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No, my eyes are completely tears-free.
no you are crying i can see lol
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That's great! x

Take it down before someone steals it
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(Original post by IlikeDonerKebab)
no you are crying i can see lol
Lol, I assure you I am not.
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(Original post by HumbleBee_x)
That's great! x

Take it down before someone steals it
Too late, that's the problem with posting anonymously. Thanks.
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it better as a song than poem, but it's good
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I could rate your poem if you post it, if not, it is fine. But I am sure it is not as bad as you believe.
i made it in year 5 lol
all my life i wanted to be a poet but by the end of year 5 i realised how **** i was and gave up. havent made a poem since
it went something along the lines of...
"roar roar roar
the crowd wants more
war war war
dont be a bore"
bad ik lmao whats sad is i actually thought that was good 😔😂😂
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it better as a song than poem, but it's good
Surely it isn't long enough for a song? Then again, some songs are short.
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Possibly one of the worst poems, lol. I wrote this in order to move on from someone, two people in fact. If no good, be honest. I respect constructive criticism.

Title: Time To Leave You Behind

Haunted by past events
Segments of you
Find someone new
Included to forget you
Time to leave you behind

You echo on my mind
I am blind to find someone new
All I can think of is you
Time to leave you behind

Broken hearted since you left
You were kind
You echo on my mind
Time to leave you behind

Shot in the heart
You torn me apart
Locked in the dark
Time to leave you behind

You echo on my mind
Find comfort in pain
Nothing but rain
Time to leave you behind
Very good ,

What about mine

They seek him here, they seek him there
Those police men seek him everywhere
Is he in heaven?
Or is he in in hell ?
That damn elusive sh a dow
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(Original post by BluMoon06)
i made it in year 5 lol
all my life i wanted to be a poet but by the end of year 5 i realised how **** i was and gave up. havent made a poem since
it went something along the lines of...
"roar roar roar
the crowd wants more
war war war
dont be a bore"
bad ik lmao whats sad is i actually thought that was good 😔😂😂
Now, I am crying because of your poem. It is a good attempt and you should keep it, I find hilarious, especially the bottom line.
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