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what english language grade is this but what mark it is out of 40. 24 for content and 16 for spag. and a grade between 9-1. also what can i improve on. its about food poverty. some you may not understand as we done articles and took some notes over them.
Destroy Destitution Finish Food Poverty

There have been many many ways of preventing food poverty, but unfortunately from the catastrophic year: 2020 has been uncontrollable and has included the middle incomers into food poverty. All
the wealthy stockpiling upon stockpiling, but do any emotion exist in them? Not to mention shop managers.
2020 devastated food poverty. A myriad of factors caused food poverty to rise - staggeringly. How living prices increase, can be
endeavouring, how communities are not united; how one person carries food poverty by a single back.
Why the middle incommers?
Food poverty in 2020. Increased by a staggering 54%. A majority were the middle incommers. The life-changing: COVID 19 has caused
54% of UK citizens to be, wistfully, shoved into this unfortunate situation. They endeavour food poverty. But why has it increased by
54%? Other years it was only a meagre 2-5%. How has living costs increased by a whopping 34%? How? COVID-19. These ruthless-rich
stockpiles and stockpiled to the point that everything in the shop was empty. Again, no pity exists for these managers of supermarkets, who
decided to increase their prices (for their own greater good). What previously was the low incommers who had suffered; now middle
incommers join the herd.
Guess how much they suffer?
How much has it affected them? Unequivocally, it isn’t 20%, but it's a colossal figure: 88% who are suffering - at the moment. An
additional 88%. That's 5 in 8 of the entire UK population. This is - unmeasurably - dominant leading to people relying on food banks on the
most important day of the year: Christmas. Christmas is to be eating good food, but Jack describes how challenging and expensive it was
that “we boiled broccoli to eat”. Food poverty has been challenged in every way to have basic-cheap food.
We must combine communities!
One community, add another, add another community destroys food poverty. In Sweden 29 out of 31 communities became elite in 2020 to
improve food poverty. From 29% to 3% within three months. Power of community is so dominantly-strong that it can do anything. But, the
United Kingdom is very challenging for us to become elite. We as a community will have no food poverty. We donate food, and we donate
to food banks. If, we can be a large community then food poverty will be easy like 1 2 3.
Marcus Rashford the superhero!

Recent articles present how Marcus Rashford has lately been attempting to eradicate food poverty. He has, substantially, managed to
reduce food poverty through a plethora of strategies. Through food banks, through food vouchers, through food benefits and many more.
There are more than 10,000 food banks spread across the UK for all those needing, food vouchers are sent daily to prevent those who suffer
poverty from dying from starvation and there is a benefit being adequate making those who suffer being elated with joy.
To sum up...
Imagine your suffering from food poverty. Being hungry, being thirsty and being tired. Do not exacerbate this situation. Instead, help.
Helping us to make this poverty into nothing, but smithereens. Remember “there is history to not repeat it”, so don't do with food poverty.
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(Original post by Lily09897)
what english language grade is this but what mark it is out of 40. 24 for content and 16 for spag. and a grade between 9-1. also what can i improve on. its about food poverty. some you may not understand as we done articles and took some notes over them.
Destroy Destitution Finish Food Poverty

There have been many many ways of preventing food poverty, but unfortunately from the catastrophic year: 2020 has been uncontrollable and has included the middle incomers into food poverty. All
the wealthy stockpiling upon stockpiling, but do any emotion exist in them? Not to mention shop managers.
2020 devastated food poverty. A myriad of factors caused food poverty to rise - staggeringly. How living prices increase, can be
endeavouring, how communities are not united; how one person carries food poverty by a single back.
Why the middle incommers?
Food poverty in 2020. Increased by a staggering 54%. A majority were the middle incommers. The life-changing: COVID 19 has caused
54% of UK citizens to be, wistfully, shoved into this unfortunate situation. They endeavour food poverty. But why has it increased by
54%? Other years it was only a meagre 2-5%. How has living costs increased by a whopping 34%? How? COVID-19. These ruthless-rich
stockpiles and stockpiled to the point that everything in the shop was empty. Again, no pity exists for these managers of supermarkets, who
decided to increase their prices (for their own greater good). What previously was the low incommers who had suffered; now middle
incommers join the herd.
Guess how much they suffer?
How much has it affected them? Unequivocally, it isn’t 20%, but it's a colossal figure: 88% who are suffering - at the moment. An
additional 88%. That's 5 in 8 of the entire UK population. This is - unmeasurably - dominant leading to people relying on food banks on the
most important day of the year: Christmas. Christmas is to be eating good food, but Jack describes how challenging and expensive it was
that “we boiled broccoli to eat”. Food poverty has been challenged in every way to have basic-cheap food.
We must combine communities!
One community, add another, add another community destroys food poverty. In Sweden 29 out of 31 communities became elite in 2020 to
improve food poverty. From 29% to 3% within three months. Power of community is so dominantly-strong that it can do anything. But, the
United Kingdom is very challenging for us to become elite. We as a community will have no food poverty. We donate food, and we donate
to food banks. If, we can be a large community then food poverty will be easy like 1 2 3.
Marcus Rashford the superhero!

Recent articles present how Marcus Rashford has lately been attempting to eradicate food poverty. He has, substantially, managed to
reduce food poverty through a plethora of strategies. Through food banks, through food vouchers, through food benefits and many more.
There are more than 10,000 food banks spread across the UK for all those needing, food vouchers are sent daily to prevent those who suffer
poverty from dying from starvation and there is a benefit being adequate making those who suffer being elated with joy.
To sum up...
Imagine your suffering from food poverty. Being hungry, being thirsty and being tired. Do not exacerbate this situation. Instead, help.
Helping us to make this poverty into nothing, but smithereens. Remember “there is history to not repeat it”, so don't do with food poverty.
I would mark it as an 19 for concent and 14 for SPaG. Good usage of recent information.You should limit over-exaggeration.After all it should state and describe food poverty,it should not be written to influence.Also,there is some commonity,some colloquial language which make the text look like a bit ankward in structure and language.This doesn't make people attracted to it,but rather repels them.

After all,it is a very good piece of work.Fix the things that I mentioned and that you need to improve and you will be just fine.Well done!!!
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