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Lily09897
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hey guys just wanna have feedback on my essay war photographer and remains.

In both ‘War Photographer’ and ‘Remains’ the effects of war are presented negatively specifically for the soldiers. The effects of war are arguably very significant as they are based on how the effects of war have affected the soldiers. Some readers may argue that the effects of war have positive effects as they are preparing to become patriotic, and also defending their country no matter the circumstances, but the negative effects are much more severe as the soldiers are witnessing “a hundred agonies in black and white.”

In both ‘Exposure’ and ‘War Photographer’ form is operated in order to present the effects of war, but for different purposes. Duffy employs the form technique of an enjambment to reveal the gradual development of the photograph of how he’s editing the photos within the poem. During the development of his photos, he’s also suffering alongside with the long-lasting effect of the war of how he has witnessed graphical images from war and can’t escape them. The soldiers are suffering from PTSD. Therefore the effects of war have proven that as a result of PTSD he’s only remaining with graphic images. In contrast to ‘Remains’, Armitage commences the poem with media res. He: the author presents the soldiers being interviewed probably by a psychiatrist or reporter of how “on another occasion got sent out". Now, this gives an effect of one soldier but only such inferences. The soldiers didn’t desire to face them as it was a bad psychological effect of leaving it last. "We got sent out" is similar to the school language. but being deployed, now, sounding like a punishment. Like school it's a kind of exclusion and psychologically is going to happen to the soldiers. As for the soldiers being expelled from their identity its affecting them psychologically. Therefore, this can present the effects of war that the reader must decide whether the soldier is going to commit suicide or the lack of control the soldier has.

Furthermore, both poets explore the effect of war on how the soldiers are encountering the deaths of other soldiers and that they are now suffering from those deaths. In 'War Photographer' it conveyed how at the first stanza on the second line of how the "spools of sufferings are set out in ordered rows." As for the word "spools", it's a double entendre of unravelling the negative that was on a spool, and the other meaning is that it can be that the "spools of suffer" illustrates a soft sound but also mirroring the idea of sinisterness of how these photo is forcing the war photographer to suffer from PTSD. Also, the photographs are set out in "ordered rows''; which can be an allusion to the semantic field of depicting an image to the reader that he: the war photographer is imagining gravestones being sorted out the images in war cemeteries as he's remembering those photographs that he took and how the idea of death is presented via graves. Furthermore, it presents an image to the photographer that he's earning a living through other dead people. For war photographers, the war photographer is profiting from other people's death and trying to prevent further death that will expose what death is really like and how they are now suffering from those deaths - that's continuously traumatising them. It is exactly identical to 'Remains' of how the soldiers in the sixth stanza, on the last line, how the "drink and drugs won't flush him out." From the employment of a metaphor, it is highlighting the significance of how it is delivering the drugs that won't flush him out. It's applying strong repetition suggesting it is from depression as the images of death caused them to witness images that are constantly causing the soldiers to suffer, and as a result of this it has caused them to suffer from PTSD. Armitage isn't only describing one experience, but a collective experience and the effects of memories that have remained as suggested from the title. It is one soldier who represents other soldiers' emotions. That's a deliberate technique to display how they are forcing themself to take these drugs in order to relieve those memories that are constantly haunting them.

Moreover, in ‘War Photographer’ and ‘Remains’ structure is operated in order to present the worst effects of how it can be escaped whereas for others it cannot be escaped as suggested from the structure of the poem. That’s conveyed of how Duffy has established this poem being a narrative poem, focusing that the readers have acknowledged that the photographer is processing the photos that he’s editing. Further on, Duffy creates a sense of detachment or perhaps the cynicism of how the actions are reflecting for both the soldiers and people who are losing their lives and are also suffering from PTSD with the end result being that only a few are chosen for the newspaper article. With all this occurring as a result of structure, we can interpret that the war photographer is suffering from PTSD and also has the desire to be a war photographer or not. This is the opposite in ‘Remains’ as at the end of the poem in the last stanza Armitage describes how "hands" is a rhyme to "sand" and "land". It's connoting that if we were to have a happy ending the writer would end it with rhyming couplet however rhyming couplet isn't in it until the end. Armitage describes that ironically the looter is lucky enough to have a happy life instead of the soldiers. It’s also mirroring that as discordance is being employed it shows how the words at the end of each line neither fit in nor flows within the poem. That’s - further - emphasised how at the end of ‘Remains’ the “hands” aren’t really rhyming with "land" and "sand" implying that from the words neither flowing in nor fitting it conveying the effects of war has caused the ending to be that they were will forever be trapped in this war and are unable to escape the war.


To conclude, ‘War Photographer’ depicts the effect of conflict being less severe as the photographer has been given certain freedom such as resigning from being a war photographer, and that they witness everything gradually not having a severe drastic effect on them. But on the other hand ‘Remains’ effect of war is much more severe as they witness everything that occurs in war as well as being forced to be in war no matter the secondary impacts.
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You haven’t paid attention to any of the feedback you have gotten on any of the pieces you’ve posted on your other account so why post another piece again?
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