Hi, so sorry for the late response. Do you mind reading this essay and informing me about what I can do to improve it. The structure that I'm following is one advised to me by my teacher which I mentioned above. (Note: I haven't finished the essay yet.)
War photographer critiques society's indifferent consumptions of war and the effect of conflict on the individual. Similarly, Remains explores the permanent effect of memories on the individual as a result of the power of indoctrination.
At the start of War Photographer, Duffy explains how the photographer finds relief within his own isolation after the chaotic environment and trauma of war. He mentions how the photographer is "finally alone" with "spools of suffering set out in ordered rows" before him which indicates the solemnity of the photographer and how only he knows his job. The use of the word, "ordered" connotes how the photographer is imposing order on the chaos of war which explains the potency of his job. It can also paint a disturbing image of war as the "ordered rows" may be the dead bodies of the soldiers. Perhaps Duffy is trying to show how the photographer is trying to regain his strength after the terrorizing effect of conflict as he orders the images. However, the poet could also be portraying the photographer as a symbolic representation of society as society tries to find order in war but war is unpredictable and the reality is there is no order. Alternatively, at the start of Remains, Simon Armitage explores the reality of conflict through the indoctrination of soldiers. The poem begins with in media res, "On another occasion, we got sent out" to indicate the cyclical experiences of the soldier and how conflict has become second nature for him. It also expresses a wearied tone and could suggest how the soldier has become desensitised to conflict. The use of the pronoun "we" exemplifies how the soldier has been expelled from his identity and no longer knows his place in society. Perhaps the poet is emphasizing the consequence of indoctrination as soldiers have become a resource for the military and can be disposed of as they are just 'soldiers' but in reality they are individuals which sacrifice their life on the frontlines.