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Write about the presentation of Macbeths character throughout the play (25)

Macbeth a tragedy play was preformed in 1606 which is a morally disguised play confides Macbeth as a ambitious and vile person throughout the play in many ways. Corruption and guilt of Macbeth is shown to depict his personality to see how “brave Macbeth” is changing throughout the play shown by his atrocious actions and ways he tries to conceal his changes.

At the start of the play , Macbeth is evidently described as a loyal , honourable but high status solider who is easily deprived from his ambitious thinking as we immediately sees his corruption when he is doing anything Macbeth as the adjective sentence “vaulting ambition” connotes how satisfied and great it is for him to manage refine his ambition at the start with the “weird sisters” as he turns his humanity to becoming consumed as he starts to have conscience in himself. The horrendous adjective “vaulting” describes how his ambition becomes worse as he starts to have desires for power. As many people in the late 16’s century were part of doing evil acts to become hero’s as this juxtaposes how Macbeth is described at the very start of the play. Audience will feel disheartened as he is foreshadowed to lead to demise by his actions and his ways of becoming a hero.

Further on we evoke his ambition in depth as we see he explores others to complete his bad deeds for his ambition as he starts to accumulate his decisions on what he wants to do “is this a dagger which I see before me” shows the rhetorical question shows his soliloquy to have been revealed that he his trying to kill King Duncan so that he could act his corruption through and imaginary “dagger” which shows the noun is a metaphorical word to him becoming conscience of him having violence as this highlights how many other soldiers in the olden days would have a sense of military duty to ensure they could contemplate their actions in becoming more heroic just like Macbeth further down the play. Audience will reflect how Macbeth is obliging to the witches prophecies

Additionally, we are shown to see Macbeth is callous and dependent on his disguise of erupting his ambition to become worse as he is impatient to achieve his goals as Lady Macbeth is serving Macbeth some help as the image “wash this filthy witness from your hands” suggests the dramatic irony depicts how Lady Macbeth is seeing him mentally detioriating as he starts to confuse himself to as he sees blood-like evidence to show that he’s conscience isn’t right because of what he has done. The adjective “Filthy” refers to the how murderous he is so he would “wash” his hands so he doesn’t get seen by anyone else. Like Macbeth others would have copied and traced the blood on their hands to show how they killed innocent enemy’s in a war-like atmosphere. As this will make the Audience uncomfortable at the way Macbeth is handling the situation of him becoming more remorseful of his ambition.

Moreover, as Macbeth is still see as ambition character he is still elevating the ways he accumulates in what he does in order to fulfil his goals as he starts to be confused in how to kill the king ”O, horror , horror , horror” is an repetition clarifies Macduff’s reaction is to Macbeth as this shows the adjective “horror” immediately shows how Macbeth is toxic and has been ruined with disdain emotions in himself. As this shows how he reflects what is to make him more successful so makes the audience think as it will traumatise them is this actually is real for an “brave Macbeth” to do such a callous thing.

Further on in the middle of the play, we clearly see Macbeth is being grasped by guilt and remorse as he starts to disclose his kingship in order for him to become a higher status “full of scorpions is my mind” is metaphorically shown to suggest he has a fear of guilt not being maintained properly as such doesn’t show the other characters. But also, reflects how Macbeth is overprotective of having a better ambition through many ways. The image “scorpions” obscurely shows how evil but lethal feelings are to others in Banquo’s and Macduff’s family as he evidently craves for he needs to kill others. People in the olden days may be prone to having mixed emotions in doing evil. Audience will feel cold-hearted as Macbeth is negatively turned his ways badly as he starts to overthink loads.

Also, Macbeth is not reluctant to change his ways as he turns bad to worse as he becomes in a chaotic situation as he datively is very quickly at unease as he starts dwell on losing the crown from Banquo as he has a sense of guilt “gory locks” depicts he is badly comforted by himself. The verb “locks” again shows how he emphasises his luck to become fasten tightly as if no one could steal from him. This also shows he would not compete for his ambitions because he is being corrupted and so Banquo will gather his guilt within his actions. Also the imagery “gory” again highlights how bloodstained the locks would be like a sharp knife had covered it.

Overall , Macbeth is forced to become more evil throughout the play with his ambition as the writes used a cycla structure to show that Macbeth is a murder not a killer
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i am assuming this essay is GCSE right?
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i am assuming this essay is GCSE right?
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1st para- I would say that they would admire Macbeth's actions and see him as a brave soldier who is willing to sacrifice himself for his own country.

The dagger soliloquy also shows a transition in Macbeth because at first his sentences are long and complex highlighting his uncertainty and confusion but later the sentences become short - showing a clear resolution and decisiveness to kill Duncan. Also the killing of the King hints to the idea of regicide which wouldn't be encouraged by the audience because of their firm belief in the divine right of the kings - and contextually, there was also a regicide attempt on King James (King at the time), thus King James ensured to send a message to the society at the time telling them about his disapproval of it. Therefore, no one would even dream to commit a crime as such because it meant committing a crime against God.

We also see hesitation in Macbeth to commit the crime. I am not sure what quote it is but I think it is "Neptune's ocean...blood". It shows how Macbeth realises the gravity of his action and how the blood is a phycological stain that can never be removed. Also, the washing of blood has religious connotation to pontius pilate who washed his hands after killing Christ but he ultimately regretted it.

I hope that helped to improve your answer but I can't really give you a score because I have never marked any essays.
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1st para- I would say that they would admire Macbeth's actions and see him as a brave soldier who is willing to sacrifice himself for his own country.

The dagger soliloquy also shows a transition in Macbeth because at first his sentences are long and complex highlighting his uncertainty and confusion but later the sentences become short - showing a clear resolution and decisiveness to kill Duncan. Also the killing of the King hints to the idea of regicide which wouldn't be encouraged by the audience because of their firm belief in the divine right of the kings - and contextually, there was also a regicide attempt on King James (King at the time), thus King James ensured to send a message to the society at the time telling them about his disapproval of it. Therefore, no one would even dream to commit a crime as such because it meant committing a crime against God.

We also see hesitation in Macbeth to commit the crime. I am not sure what quote it is but I think it is "Neptune's ocean...blood". It shows how Macbeth realises the gravity of his action and how the blood is a phycological stain that can never be removed. Also, the washing of blood has religious connotation to pontius pilate who washed his hands after killing Christ but he ultimately regretted it.

I hope that helped to improve your answer but I can't really give you a score because I have never marked any essays.
ok thanks for this it helps but is it a good essay or no as i am not sure ahhaha pls tell me thanks
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ok thanks for this it helps but is it a good essay or no as i am not sure ahhaha pls tell me thanks
Well as a GCSE essay, it is quite good. I would ask you to add more for your analysis for some quotes. When I did my GCSEs, I didn't really use to write an introduction or conclusion. I did 3/4 chunky paragraphs that all had a statement, quote, technique identification, 3 analysed points for the quote and context.
All the best for your assessment!
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