I think McGinger is being quite generous with you. The very first sentence contains a factual error - no country is 'emerging...into a COVID-free nation' because COVID will become endemic - and that is the transition we are on, not a transition to a 'zero-COVID world'.
Far, far too much waffle and too many words. You continue in your 'argument' to suggest that COVID can be eliminated without any sort of persuasive argument as to how that could be achieved.
Some of your language is poor. You don't start a sentence with 'Ultimately', and things like 'When the threat is a virus that's main weapon is its ability to spread' is wrong. There are also contractions (best avoided) and wrong plurals.
Overall, there is far too much circumlocution, repetition and padding. You could probably reduce the word count by 40% and not change the meaning. You need to make an argument in your answer - punchy, attacking, and without all this waffle and verbiage. Get to the point quickly, make your argument, back it up with something, conclude it punchily.