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Can someone mark this and give me feedback on this question, please
Icy winds flexed their muscles in the East, whipping the clouds into shape, marching them across the sky. The black jackboots of the rain tramped across the horizon, stamping cold onto the world frozen beneath, as though some long-dead tyrant had returned, armed with winter.

Towering through the lands, the dusty grey mountains encapsulated the serene waters in its hand, almost protecting it from any dangers that it might face in this torrential weather. Small sprouts of moss burst out from the tiny cracks in the mountains. Ivory and white, the snow blanketed the mountain, tucking it into a deep, endless sleep.
In the blistering heat, when the snow has dissipated into a liquid state, elegant marigold slithers from the mountain, decorating it with an explosion of colour in the midst of the colourless lands.

On the icy plate, black and white penguins waddled their feet on the ice, imprinting their footsteps onto the crumbly snow. Electrifying,(with each step)shock waves of chills were sent down their spines.
Hunger, starvation and weakness: these penguins, who clustered here every morning, were hungry for food. The kind of hunger that boils in your stomach as if a monster was trapped inside, scraping its claws on the walls of your stomach for a chance to escape.

The once fat-filled penguins were now being eroded to the bone as their own bodies started to eat at themselves, leaving a painful but slow death for some.

Barely being able to hold themselves upright. Barely being able to survive the piercing cold.

Sadness had made a home into the fibres of their weakening heart as the raw, pink muscle was being sliced and pierced with every death. Even a glint of happiness was sucked away as if sadness was the only emotion able to stay alive.

Serene winds whistled through the deathly silent lands, humming its melodic music to any living species. It's entertaining, despite there being no one to listen to it.

Small waves formed in the empty ocean as the winds caressed the skin of the ocean, jumping the waters upward with the flow of the wind. The splashing of the water echoed for an eternity.

The ocean was large in depth; the ocean was alone with companionship.

From above, you could see the shadow of the once-powerful titanic. It had carried 5000 people across the Atlantic ocean, and the people on board had lives that had disappeared.

Monumental, the people on the ship had once danced, wearing their elegant Victorian dress, letting the edges of their dresses touch the cold marble floor and holding the soft, supple hands of their new friends.

Rich and decadent, the food was plated in an orderly manner on the oak table, which made the travellers salivate with hunger, lusting for the food to burst its exquisite flavours into their pink mouths.

Children, too, were being carried on this now sunken ship. Children who had smiles radiating from their plushy cheeks as they ran around with their siblings.

Children who now never got married, never experienced life and whose souls who forever stayed as a child

The sky put on its black cape: the closest clouds cuddled, armoured in battleship grey; those coming behind streaked with the black of coal smoke; those on the horizon dark as slate. Beneath a watcher might shut their eyes and pray for liberation, dreaming of the lives of the sunken ship.
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Hi- I can have a look, just clarifying that this is for the English Lang GCSE?
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yes it is
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this is the image that the story is based
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