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In my conclusion I've mentioned what i hope to gain from going uni, and how this course will help my career progression, and now im thinking of ending it (my last sentence) by saying what i will do to prepare for the course (primary education) but not sure what to say...ive already got experience so I can't really say I will get more experience

Any ideas or alternate ways to end?
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(Original post by HelloHello143)
In my conclusion I've mentioned what i hope to gain from going uni, and how this course will help my career progression, and now im thinking of ending it (my last sentence) by saying what i will do to prepare for the course (primary education) but not sure what to say...ive already got experience so I can't really say I will get more experience

Any ideas or alternate ways to end?
Hi, I have just applied for Primary Ed. In my conclusion, I wrote a sentence explaining why I would be a worthy candidate to study primary ed. I then reiterated my reason for studying primary ed. Lastly, I summarised the skills that I had mentioned earlier in my personal statement and how these will make me a worthy student at university. Hope this helps!
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Hi, I have just applied for Primary Ed. In my conclusion, I wrote a sentence explaining why I would be a worthy candidate to study primary ed. I then reiterated my reason for studying primary ed. Lastly, I summarised the skills that I had mentioned earlier in my personal statement and how these will make me a worthy student at university. Hope this helps!
Thank you this helps a lot, was really struggling with this last sentence lol

So if I was to write about being a worthy candidate, wud i say it like this: "i think I am a worthy candidate because I" have such and such skills?
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Thank you this helps a lot, was really struggling with this last sentence lol

So if I was to write about being a worthy candidate, wud i say it like this: "i think I am a worthy candidate because I" have such and such skills?
I’m not sure I would use the phrase ‘I think I am a worthy candidate’. Instead say something like ‘the skills I have gained from blah blah, including xyz, place me in good stead to cope/thrive (idk exact wording) with the demands of the course’
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I’m not sure I would use the phrase ‘I think I am a worthy candidate’. Instead say something like ‘the skills I have gained from blah blah, including xyz, place me in good stead to cope/thrive (idk exact wording) with the demands of the course’
Ah thank you, that sounds a lot more formal lol
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My commitment to the course is paramount, and I seek to endeavor success. The fundamentals of education nuture us into the people we are today and I aspire to lead pupils toward a goal of triumph, and progress them through their journey in life - one step at a time.


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My commitment to the course is paramount, and I seek to endeavor success. The fundamentals of education nuture us into the people we are today and I aspire to lead pupils toward a goal of triumph, and progress them through their journey in life - one step at a time.


Just an idea ^
This one sentence is better than my whole personal statement 😂😭
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I’m not sure I would use the phrase ‘I think I am a worthy candidate’. Instead say something like ‘the skills I have gained from blah blah, including xyz, place me in good stead to cope/thrive (idk exact wording) with the demands of the course’
Got one more question, how wud u reword: during my time at uni i hope to gain blah blah by joining a society or something
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Got one more question, how wud u reword: during my time at uni i hope to gain blah blah by joining a society or something
I am excited to take full advantage of the opportunities offered at university, (give example) which will aid me in the development of blah
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This one sentence is better than my whole personal statement 😂😭
It isn't, it sounds awful - very pompous ... do not use. There is also a spelling mistake ...
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It isn't, it sounds awful - very pompous ... do not use. There is also a spelling mistake ...
It Doesn't lol, yeh I won't actually use it, sounds like it came out a book, they wud know i didn't write it 😂😂
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It Doesn't lol, yeh I won't actually use it, sounds like it came out a book, they wud know i didn't write it 😂😂
I have a lot of experience in reading PS - it is terrible!
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