Stormy weather description

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Maximus The 1st
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At the moment I am working on editing a short weather description over on the topic of a storm, any updates to it will be posted to this thread but please give recommendations because it just does not feel fluid yet.

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Winds flexed their muscles in the East, whipping the clouds into shape, marching them across a molten silver sky. The black jackboots of the rain tramped across the horizon, stamping cold onto the world beneath, as though some long dead tyrant had returned, armed with winter’s fury. No one was safe. Through this nurturing black came bold streaks of light, pulsing starlight, lightning in great networking forks.

A black cape enveloped the sky: cosmic swirls of thunder clouds armoured in battleship grey; those coming behind streaked with the black of coal smoke; those on the horizon nothing but a smudge on a canvas.
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A good start. You could aim to describe your own feelings on the adverse weather events as well. Make some brief summary notes. And to gain some more marks, include a short paragraph on what the storm clouds look like, how many people actually do witness the event, and so on. Outline or provide a few additional details on the rain, whether or not there are any winds and discuss current wind speed too. Throw in a mini weather report if possible. Refrain from lying however. You could even interview a few selected witnesses about what they saw and felt.
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