My PS - strong enough for Bristol? Watch

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I want to do Sociology, and I think it's strong, but I'd like you're opinions.
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Don't post your PS on the public part of a forum. There's a specific sub-forum here if you want an opinion/help. Anyone can steal it now.
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You're only going to get people telling you to post it in the PS forum >_<
Edit: I think it ends a bit abruptly but otherwise sounds fine.
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well firstly dont put your PS on here.

I did read throgh it...you're PS sounds like you're trying to be such a smartass (so offence intended)..dont use long overly complicated prose, it only irritates. Cut down on the "technical stuff" and talk more about yourself.
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I so knew that.
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I thought Bristol love smart asses - that was the whole point.
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Erm, the quote at the beginning felt a bit cliche. and I thought the ending was a bit weak.
But that's just me as a reader - move it to PS help for some PROPER advice :P
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Thats brillant, keep this, the quote at the top defines the lengths to which you strived to create this PS. You show determinism and a real liking for this chosen course. Quotes possibly from Durkheim or one of the other founding fathers of Sociology may however bring this PS Up a bit. However, what you have written is excellent and I would not change it.
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(Original post by abbi_louise_whey)
I so knew that.
Oh, did you? In that case, the only sensible thing would have been NOT to post this on here. You know that UCAS is running a PS-plagiarism checking program and that it will be rather hard for you to prove that a given sentence/paragraph is yours, should someone steal parts of it.
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Oh, did you? In that case, the only sensible thing would have been NOT to post this on here. You know that UCAS is running a PS-plagiarism checking program and that it will be rather hard for you to prove that a given sentence/paragraph is yours, should someone steal parts of it.
Yeah, alright love, new member here.
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lol o dear.
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Woopsy.
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Abbi the best thing to do is to go to your careers teacher, but i would advise you to look at the comments and then delete this thread immediately...
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(Original post by abbi_louise_whey)
I thought Bristol love smart asses - that was the whole point.
Bristol likes smart people. They those who aren't clever but try to give the impression that they are. I'd try and avoid giving that impression...
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Bristol likes smart people. They those who aren't clever but try to give the impression that they are. I'd try and avoid giving that impression...
Thats the thing, I'm not trying to give an impression - this is what I'VE written, it's come straight from me.

And how do you delete a thread? Meh.
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I would get this topic deleted too in case the admissions find it and think you stole it :P
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Thats the thing, I'm not trying to give an impression - this is what I'VE written, it's come straight from me.

And how do you delete a thread? Meh.
no I realise that, but using all these really technical words can give off that impression. You should really be saying why you want to study the course rather than talk about it in such detail. Your PS is supposed to describe your ambition and passion for the subject, not the subject itself.
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no I realise that, but using all these really technical words can give off that impression. You should really be saying why you want to study the course rather than talk about it in such detail. Your PS is supposed to describe your ambition and passion for the subject, not the subject itself.
Hmmm, I get what you're saying. I've sent it off now, so I guess I'll have to let them decide whether I'm a smart ass or not.
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