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(Original post by endeavour)
There's a few grammatical and spelling mistakes.
I thought there might have been, thank you for pointing them out.
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*secretly steals win from his girl for a night of poems and passion*


seriously tho, what should i get my boyf? any ideas? win what woul.d u like a girl to get for u?
What is he into? Films, music
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like what? im so crap at these things
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(Original post by endeavour)
There's a few grammatical and spelling mistakes.
Picky, picky :p:

The cunning thing is hes reciting it
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Picky, picky :p:

The cunning thing is hes reciting it
Which is good, seeing as I have a nice deep voice and am very well spoken.
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A rose and a braclet/neckalce or somthing which he can always keep with him (if hes that kind of guy). If its a neckalce you can get a pendant which you can put both your pics in.
But thats just my idea of a good valentines day prezi

p.s. dont 4get the cows heart.......
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(Original post by wiwarin_mir)
Which is good, seeing as I have a nice deep voice and am very well spoken.
Yeeeeh, I remember it from that voice thread you made a while ago. Im a sucker for a well spoken guy! Wow, you write great poems and have a perfect accent, shame your taken
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(Original post by wiwarin_mir)
Which is good, seeing as I have a nice deep voice and am very well spoken.
*sighs and looks longingly at win*

my boyf's not even talking to me
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(Original post by VixenIW)
Yeeeeh, I remember it from that voice thread you made a while ago. Im a sucker for a well spoken guy! Wow, you write great poems and have a perfect accent, shame your taken
I am sure you would chnage your mind once you saw me in real life.
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I am sure you would chnage your mind once you saw me in real life.
Ive seen a picture, does that count? And no it would not make me change my mind
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Seeing as you seem to be good judges, her is another poem for my girlfriend, do you think this would be a good present (well, part of the present):

My dark Goddess

So close to the abyss was I,
Ready to forsake this cruel world of malice,
to leave this foul place of pain and suffering,
Thinking this desolate land held nothing but the worthless fallen.

But as i looked into the darkness I saw you,
ascending from a sea of impenetrable gloom,
a dark goddess ready to accept me,
your lowly acolyte, unworthy even to stutter your name.

Lightly you embraced me, stealing all words from me,
leaving my enthralled with your Divine charms,
such pure yet primal passion pulsed through my veins,
Leaving my blind to all but your smile.

lowly you led me from the precipice,
guiding my feet from the path of oblivion
towards the realms of the living,
to those fools I had despised and rejected.

I gazed once again on this cruel world of malice,
but saw no foul house of pain and suffering
and the worth of these people returned to my eyes,
your gloomy light redeeming all creation to me.

My eyes were drawn once again to your captivating eyes
And saw that glow I had yearned for,
But all too soon i felt my heart failing,
What right or worth did I possess to gain your affections?

In my anguish I was again lost,
oblivious to the warmth in your eyes,
'cry not fair mortal,' spoke you,
'worthy of me are you'
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(Original post by wiwarin_mir)
Seeing as you seem to be good judges, her is another poem for my girlfriend, do you think this would be a good present (well, part of the present):

My dark Goddess

So close to the abyss was I,
Ready to forsake this cruel world of malice,
to leave this foul place of pain and suffering,
Thinking this desolate land held nothing but the worthless fallen.

But as i looked into the darkness I saw you,
ascending from a sea of impenetrable gloom,
a dark goddess ready to accept me,
your lowly acolyte, unworthy even to stutter your name.

Lightly you embraced me, stealing all words from me,
leaving my enthralled with your Divine charms,
such pure yet primal passion pulsed through my veins,
Leaving my blind to all but your smile.

lowly you led me from the precipice,
guiding my feet from the path of oblivion
towards the realms of the living,
to those fools I had despised and rejected.

I gazed once again on this cruel world of malice,
but saw no foul house of pain and suffering
and the worth of these people returned to my eyes,
your gloomy light redeeming all creation to me.

My eyes were drawn once again to your captivating eyes
And saw that glow I had yearned for,
But all too soon i felt my heart failing,
What right or worth did I possess to gain your affections?

In my anguish I was again lost,
oblivious to the warmth in your eyes,
'cry not fair mortal,' spoke you,
'worthy of me are you'
Very good actually. I would think it was a little dark for a valentines poem, but maybe thats fitting? I wouldn't know.
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(Original post by Iluvatar)
Very good actually. I would think it was a little dark for a valentines poem, but maybe thats fitting? I wouldn't know.
I did try to do a light anf fluffy poem but I had a lot of problems doing one, it seems that I can only write darkness.
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(Original post by wiwarin_mir)
I did try to do a light anf fluffy poem but I had a lot of problems doing one, it seems that I can only write darkness.
I know what you mean. I have the same problem sometimes.
I didn't say it had to be light and fluffy, just powerful and deep, but not too dark.
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(Original post by Iluvatar)
I know what you mean. I have the same problem sometimes.
I didn't say it had to be light and fluffy, just powerful and deep, but not too dark.
Being a goth, I am sure my girlfriend won't mind too much.
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Being a goth, I am sure my girlfriend won't mind too much.
Thats what i meant when i said it might be fitting, but i didn't know.
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Thats what i meant when i said it might be fitting, but i didn't know.
True, after all, a light and fluffy girl who loves pink wouldn't really appreciate being recited this poem.
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(Original post by wiwarin_mir)
True, after all, a light and fluffy girl who loves pink wouldn't really appreciate being recited this poem.
, although would you have been likely to fall for a girl like that in the first place?
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, although would you have been likely to fall for a girl like that in the first place?
good point, I find gothic much more attractive for some reason.
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good point, I find gothic much more attractive for some reason.
I can see your point about that, but i've never personally gone for any 'type'.
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