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Wow, Im no expert me being a physicist and all but thats a pretty decent poem. How old are you by the way?

Its all very apt in the current political climate despite being written ages ago. I think it should be added to the list. I vote for that 1
Thank you F1 fanatic I'm glad you like it . I did it for my music class at my last school. I'm 15 by the way and I'm doing my GCSE's. I didn't actually realise that it still applies now but now you mention it I guess it kinda does. Thanks again for your support .
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Poetry sucks more than books
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Thank you F1 fanatic I'm glad you like it . I did it for my music class at my last school. I'm 15 by the way and I'm doing my GCSE's. I didn't actually realise that it still applies now but now you mention it I guess it kinda does. Thanks again for your support .
Cool :cool: Theres no need to thank me by the way, its a good poem . You ought to publish a book of poetry. hehehe :stupido:
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here are some of mine:
My fair maiden

Your beauty fills me such rapture,
My soul sings joyous hymns when you are near.
My being praises your perfect form
Instead of lamenting it's own existence.

Gladly a slave to you I will become,
Simply to be in the presence of your glory,
serve your every desire for but a glimpse,
Just one glimpse of your enchanting eyes.

Intoxicated by your aura I quickly become,
drunk on the air that you breathe.
high whenever you utter sweet words,
lulled to sleep by your soft song.

My dark goddess

So close to the abyss was I,
Ready to forsake this cruel world of malice,
to leave this foul place of pain and suffering,
Thinking this desolate land held nothing but the worthless fallen.

But as i looked into the darkness I saw you,
ascending from a sea of impenetrable gloom,
a dark goddess ready to accept me,
your lowly acolyte, unworthy even to stutter your name.

Lightly you embraced me, stealing all words from me,
leaving my enthralled with your Divine charms,
such pure yet primal passion pulsed through my veins,
Leaving my blind to all but your smile.

lowly you led me from the precipice,
guiding my feet from the path of oblivion
towards the realms of the living,
to those fools I had despised and rejected.

I gazed once again on this cruel world of malice,
but saw no foul house of pain and suffering
and the worth of these people returned to my eyes,
your gloomy light redeeming all creation to me.

My eyes were drawn once again to your captivating eyes
And saw that glow I had yearned for,
But all too soon i felt my heart failing,
What right or worth did I possess to gain your affections?

In my anguish I was again lost,
oblivious to the warmth in your eyes,
'cry not fair mortal,' spoke you,
'worthy of me are you'

Beast

All those times I looked in the mirror
and saw nothing but a beast,
Such a repulsive face that could only draw pity.
All those times they called me unsightly
Broke my spirit completely.

Long years had a yearned for acceptance
but none was to be found in this cruel limbo.
All hope had fled from me,
instead self-loathing racked my being.

but hear! a voice in the distance,
an angel calling my name.
I followed the sweet melody,
stumbling blind under it's spell.

At last the darkness was lifted,
and before me stood a goddess of darkness.
Gently she kissed me,
filling my body with such sweet ecstacy.

ecstacy was soon consumed by doubt,
"I beg you my lady, play not a trick on this beast" I sobbed.
Her etheral voice once again captivated me,
"You are no beast."
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Cool :cool: Theres no need to thank me by the way, its a good poem . You ought to publish a book of poetry. hehehe :stupido:
It would be cool to have my own poetry book. It is something I have been interested in since I got chosen to be in a poetry book when I was eight , but I doubt that I'm good enough to have my own poetry book.
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It would be cool to have my own poetry book. It is something I have been interested in since I got chosen to be in a poetry book when I was eight , but I doubt that I'm good enough to have my own poetry book.
You be an excellent poet lass, also a great song writer as well.
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It would be cool to have my own poetry book. It is something I have been interested in since I got chosen to be in a poetry book when I was eight , but I doubt that I'm good enough to have my own poetry book.
Have confidence girl. You can do anything you like if you put your mind to it. I am a great believer in these things. If you have the motivation & determination to do whatever you like it will be achieved

Remember that. So no more "I dont think Im good enough"
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yea, you should publish them on poetry poem . People there give ya loads of feedback on each poem and really encourage you to publish them in a book.
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yea, you should publish them on poetry poem . People there give ya loads of feedback on each poem and really encourage you to publish them in a book.
I am a member of http://www.allpoetry.com which does a similar thing.
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What a talented bunch of grapes we all are

Kisses for the votes guys
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What a talented bunch of grapes we all are
i think im one of the sour grapes :rolleyes:
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I know this is a bit off of the subject a bit (mate don't hurt me) but was anyone on here a member of gothictears when it was still up and running?
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i think im one of the sour grapes :rolleyes:
Sour grapes are the best, they give such a nice taste.
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What a talented bunch of grapes we all are

Kisses for the votes guys
I voted first! More kisses for me
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:rolleyes:
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:rolleyes:
Art Competition is next door, mate That's pretty funny, submit it!
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Beauties thorn, a rose, a figure
To often used and spoke with vigor,
by cliche'd so called masters start
to break traditions, break a heart
but not in terms of sunshine story
or illusion in a misplaced glory
In ways of what we see and hear
but words not meant to tell or fear
but tell a tale the tears belong
to those who've spend their whole lives wrong
and focused on literal speach
it matters of the life they preach
across the boundaries we created
a community of difference hated
a hero with a standing call
of hope, to wish, to see it fall
but true heros are not known as so
their life they live, from life they go
but leave behind which unknown where
the hope we feel and do not share


Its not as good, but its different at least
that was way better I thought. i would have voted for it.....but it wasn't linked!
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thread stater, I think you we should have a first place, second place and third place. - that way three people can feel good about their work instead of just one
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You have my vote Ladyshort4U
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You have my vote Ladyshort4U

awwww thank you appreciated...It's nice to see people voting for my poem because I am really self concious about my writing and it's the first time I've posted one of my "works" online so thanx again canuck
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