Can someone mark this for me please? (English lang paper 2 Q2 Jun2019)

The boat in source A was described to be a small and new boat. Ben describes the boat he is on as 'brand spanking new' and bought ‘straight from the
organisers.' from this I can infer that the rowing boat, Spirit ,was made solely for the purpose of racing across the Atlantic Ocean. As well as this, the boat was described as "tiny", this represents how the boat was made for only two people and for the purpose of competitive rowing.
On the other hand, in source B the boat was described to be old and relatively big. The boat is described as a ‘tumbling storm-shakened old steamship‘
from this, it can be inferred that the ship is quite old and has been through many hard voyages due to it being ‘storm-shakened.’ The boat was also described to be ‘long and narrow’ with cabins arranged ‘like a row of small cottages’, it can be deduced from this that this boat was built for the purpose of taking a larger number of passengers on a journey unlike the boat in source B, which is meant for two.

(I'm not an examiner) From other exemplars I've seen this is probably a 5-6/8

The boat in source A was described to be a small and new boat. Ben describes the boat he is on as 'brand spanking new' and bought ‘straight from the
organisers.' from this I can infer that the rowing boat, Spirit ,was made solely for the purpose of racing across the Atlantic Ocean. As well as this, the boat was described as "tiny", this represents how the boat was made for only two people and for the purpose of competitive rowing.
On the other hand, in source B the boat was described to be old and relatively big. The boat is described as a ‘tumbling storm-shakened old steamship‘
from this, it can be inferred that the ship is quite old and has been through many hard voyages due to it being ‘storm-shakened.’ The boat was also described to be ‘long and narrow’ with cabins arranged ‘like a row of small cottages’, it can be deduced from this that this boat was built for the purpose of taking a larger number of passengers on a journey unlike the boat in source B, which is meant for two.

I think this is really good, but Im not the best person to ask because I dont do quit well in English Language ☹️
Do you have any advice on how to structure answers or just general tips??

I only recently got better at english language!
PAPER 1
read text twice then write a summary of the context of the text below. use a highlighter to highlight quotes that u can analyse in detail and shortly analyse them in the source booklet
Q1. just read the question + text properly
Q2. 2- 3 PARAGRAPHS. use coloured pens, NO highlighters in the question booklet and underline the all the quotes u could use for the question, do a short plan on the side and it would make ur answer flow better if you plan ur topic sentence beforehand. Also make sure to learn lang techniques so u can recognise them. Don’t spend all ur time on this Q
Q3. 3 MIN PARAS. Highlight any quotes to do with tonal changes due to setting, sentence length/ shifts in focus. Then describe the changes in tone. avoid saying I or the reader, say this suggests, this could be displayed, one could..
Q4. 4 MIN PARAS. DO NOT say I agree with this statement. say to a far extent i think/agree (reword statement) . You will be put in the lower band mark thingy. Talk about lang and structure.Plan each para b4.
Q5.It really depends on you/ what ur better at. It would be great to learn sophisticated lang b4 this exam tho
Paper 2
do the same before answering as paper 1
Q1.Same as paper 1.
Q2.2 PARAGRAPHS. DO NOT REFERENCE ANY LANG TECHNIQUES OR STRUCTURE you’ll get zero. talk only about what’s actually happening in the texts. Highlight comparative points from each source. Don’t talk about how the speaker feels AT ALL . say what you can infer/deduce from the context. eg. the boat was new so i can infer from this it was made for the purpose of this voyage.
Q3. same as Q2 from paper 1. 3 PARAS
Q4.4 PARAGRAPHS. this is like Q2 Paper 2 but now you can analyse language techniques and structure and speakers/ writers intentions
Q5. aim for 5 minimum paragraphs. DONT SAY U AGREE/ DISAGREE with statement you will get capped. Make sure the examiner knows if it’s an article/ speech (show them not tell them) plan each paragraph before! with ur key argument and then talk about the other side of the argument. DO NOT CONTRADICT URSELF. say smth along the lines of ‘however it may be true that (other side of argument) but (smth abt ur side of argument) and don’t stay on the fence agree or disagree only.
SORRY THIS IS SO LONG!😊

OMGG THANK YOU SM ❤️
Im just curious for question 5 paper 2 how do you stay within the formal tone because some people say to write persuasive lang?? Since you said to stick to one side but also have a balanced argument, would that mean you need to address the reader?
This was well explained! and luckily I got time to take it all in haha

NO WORRIESS💗
And thank you sm!
Depends on what structure they ask you to write, you are allowed to write informally but it still has to have a formal aspect to it (if u get what I mean*) eg. Newspaper or magazine articles can have a slightly informal tone but you still have to write grammatically correctly, if it’s for the purpose of the article quotation mark the word you want to use! You can make up or use stories to help back up ur point as well. Also search up diff persuasive lang techniques! Idk if this answered your question or not but I hope this helps*. Also, yes address the reader/audience but in a subtle way (?)

YESS this helped tyy! Lets hope the question is gonna be good!! praying its not environment stuff bc that sucks