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can i use bullet point in essays?

hii, so im asking this question in relevance to aqa a level psychology
in a 16 marker, when im outlining the findings of research, can i write these in bullet points? i.e.:
(this is abt Rutter et al's study)
The findings of this assessment over this longtitudinal period were: - around 50% of Romanian orphans were disadvantaged in cognitive functioning at initial assessment, whilst the control group did not show these deficits
- children adopted at different stages demonstrated different effects: children adopted after 6 months showed significantly delayed physical, emotional and intellectual development.
- In terms of IQ levels, children adopted after 24 months had an average IQ of 77 compared to 102 for those adopted under 6 months. Those with intellectual problems continued to have them at the 15 year follow-up.
- A small number of cases presented quasi-autism tendencies, with children having problems understanding the meaning of social contexts.
- Children adopted after 6 months at age 6 showed disinhibited attachment (an overly friendly behaviour to strange adopts; this was more common in those adopted after 2 years old).
- At age 11, over half the children who showed disinhibited attachment at age six still displayed this behaviour.
- at age 4, the Romanian orphans showed great improvements in physical and cognitive development, with the orphans adopted before 6 months of age doing as well as the British adopted children.

Reply 1

no, and 16 markers are mostly AO3 so you shouldn't be writing enough AO1 to need bullet points
(edited 1 year ago)

Reply 2

Original post by unxmutual
hii, so im asking this question in relevance to aqa a level psychology
in a 16 marker, when im outlining the findings of research, can i write these in bullet points? i.e.:
(this is abt Rutter et al's study)
The findings of this assessment over this longtitudinal period were: - around 50% of Romanian orphans were disadvantaged in cognitive functioning at initial assessment, whilst the control group did not show these deficits
- children adopted at different stages demonstrated different effects: children adopted after 6 months showed significantly delayed physical, emotional and intellectual development.
- In terms of IQ levels, children adopted after 24 months had an average IQ of 77 compared to 102 for those adopted under 6 months. Those with intellectual problems continued to have them at the 15 year follow-up.
- A small number of cases presented quasi-autism tendencies, with children having problems understanding the meaning of social contexts.
- Children adopted after 6 months at age 6 showed disinhibited attachment (an overly friendly behaviour to strange adopts; this was more common in those adopted after 2 years old).
- At age 11, over half the children who showed disinhibited attachment at age six still displayed this behaviour.
- at age 4, the Romanian orphans showed great improvements in physical and cognitive development, with the orphans adopted before 6 months of age doing as well as the British adopted children.


Heyy, u would have to summarise this AO1 right down and not in bullet point form-because remember that in a 16 marker it’s usually a split of 6 marks for AO1 and 10 marks for AO3, and the whole essay should be written in 20-23 mins💔💔

The only time you coulddd use bullet points in the essay is if you have a whole 16 marker left and not enough time to write it, in which case u could bullet point some AO1 in order to get a few more marks in.

Reply 3

Original post by sophiahh
Heyy, u would have to summarise this AO1 right down and not in bullet point form-because remember that in a 16 marker it’s usually a split of 6 marks for AO1 and 10 marks for AO3, and the whole essay should be written in 20-23 mins💔💔
The only time you coulddd use bullet points in the essay is if you have a whole 16 marker left and not enough time to write it, in which case u could bullet point some AO1 in order to get a few more marks in.


hi! okay tysm for the advice 💕☺️

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