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(Original post by Iluvatar)
Here's my effort, that i managed to recover in pieces, from the time i got really pissed with my songwriting abilities (or lack of them).

Blurred voices

Sitting here, all alone, conversation far away
I don't know where i'll go, so i think that i'll just stay
Wishing i, was like them, i am scared and i don't know
anything, anymore, feels the same, i want to show

(chorus)

I am really here
I wont disappear
I'm not a monument of stone
I wish it was clear
Theres nothing to fear
Do you know what its like to be alone?

Other people talking is to me just blurred voices
From what i can see, i only have two choices
I can disappear, wish i weren't hear, curl up and die
Or i can just live with hate, stop to late, forget i cried
and sit here and try
not to care any more
unemotive, shut the door
silence, block it out
dont want to have to scream and shout
And live without these blurred voices.

(end chorus)


Walking by, all alone, conversation passing by
I've got nowhere to go, and i don't know how to fly
Wishing i, walked with them, i'm confused and i'm unsure
any sign, any time, no chance for me anymore

(chorus)
and i cant understand
everything is out of hand
and i cant understand
all alone, i will stand
and i cant understand
I live with this true demand
and i cant understand
all these blurred voices, 'cause everyone talks in blurred voices

I'm still here, all alone, no more voices passing by
Blocking out everything, if i don't i'll start to cry
I cant see, anymore, and i'm thaknful for it too
I'm resigned to be alone, forget this life to live whats true...

Don't want to listen any more
Eternal silence in my core
I've turned into a monument of stone
Now i don't really even care
If i can see anybody there
Now i relish what it is to be alone, 'cause in the end were all alone
Hmm not bad, but in my opinion the chourus is a little too long, and the repeat of the chorus comes too soon.
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(Original post by Innocentvictim)
Hmm not bad, but in my opinion the chourus is a little too long, and the repeat of the chorus comes too soon.
Its supposed to be like that. I designed it as a two part chorus, and when i sing it, it does actually fit, even though on paper, the chorus does look too soon.
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Lets all sing a song, sing a song ...
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I guess this is also a song in a way. More of a poem, but songs can rhyme too. I wrote it last year for someone special for valentines day. Enjoy!

Trials of Love

Love is such an unpredictable game
Everywhere you go screams out his name
There’s times you feel you have it all
Try to fly; it’s impossible to fall

He’s all you need to make it right
Your friend, your lover, your shining light
When you’re together, anything is possible
Nobody could ever love him, the way you do

And then one event can change it all
Suddenly, it is possible to fall
Nothing can be said without a fight
All your strength leaves with the tears that fall at night

And then you realise how you need to be together
You don’t want anything less than forever
You put your heart into making everything OK
Into making sure tomorrow is a better day
No, it is a poem. It isn't really written like a song at all, at least in so much as its hard to see how it would fit in with some music.
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(Original post by Iluvatar)
No, it is a poem. It isn't really written like a song at all, at least in so much as its hard to see how it would fit in with some music.
Ok, I will get rid of it.
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I reckon all the talent on TSR should get together and write a musical!!
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I reckon all the talent on TSR should get together and write a musical!!
Maybe... what about though?
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About TSR? I can see myself as being a bit of a recluse... with the one hand... maybe a bit like the phantom of the opera but a little more hilarious
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You and trigger could be the love interest... well ... one of the love interests. Need_money & penguin kid can be the mischevious little shoe-polishers.
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About TSR? I can see myself as being a bit of a recluse... with the one hand... maybe a bit like the phantom of the opera but a little more hilarious
I'm the phantom with a deformed something, who'se obsessed over a pop singer called Shane Filan. Perfect!!! I've got the white mask and everything.
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About TSR? I can see myself as being a bit of a recluse... with the one hand... maybe a bit like the phantom of the opera but a little more hilarious
(Original post by Onearmedbandit)
You and trigger could be the love interest... well ... one of the love interests. Need_money & penguin kid can be the mischevious little shoe-polishers.
Its actually rather worring that you've actually sorted out alot of it in your head already...
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Come on people, anyone else got anything they want to enter in this competition?
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Ok, here I go:

My Time

I try real hard, but I just can't make things go my way,
I tell myself that there's no point worrying,

It makes no sense,
It makes no sense
It makes no __ /

I don't know why, but things just keep happening this way,
I tell myself I can change it, I know I can't, I know I...

Don't blame me, for trying when I'm losing,
Don't blame me, for trying, now I'm dying, I'm just lying here
There's nothing I can do to make it change,
to make it go away...

I'm spending all my time, all my money down the drain,
I'm wasting all my time, all my life down the f*****g drain
and,
It's just the way,
It's just the way,
It's just the way the everything falls apart

It's an horrific life,
It's an horrific life,
It's just the way life goes,

I could try to change it
I could try to change it
I could try, I could,
But it won't work (I know it)
But it won't work (I know it)
But it won't\

Don't blame me for trying when I'm losing,
Don't blame me, for trying, now I'm dying, I'm not lying...

that's why I'm

Spending all my time, all my money down the drain,
I'm wasting all my time, all my life down the f*****g drain
and,

It's just the way,
It's just the way,
It's just the way everything falls apart,

It's an horrific life,
It's an horrific life,
It's just the way life goes,

I could try to change it,
I could try to change it,
I could try, I could...

But it won't work (I know)
But it won't work (I know)
It won't...

It's just my time to go away
It's just my...time.
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(Original post by Iluvatar)
Its actually rather worring that you've actually sorted out alot of it in your head already...
Maybe I'm just that talented, that it only took me about 8 seconds to work out
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This is one of my feeble attempts, they seem good at the time lol, then you read them a week later and think 'oh god...'
The Unmade Bed
Lying in, the unmade bed,
Dreaming in the day.
Lying, remembering what you said
Only yesterday.
Tomorrow, it is just a bed,
But today it feels close to me.
Feeling, thinking, wanting, needing
To re-live my memories.

Chorus:
The unmade bed,
It's all thats left,
Of our night in Heaven.
The unmade room,
Without you,
Feels empty and alone.
The unmade bed,
Sleep alone instead,
Without your arms around me.
The unmade night,
I know it's right,
We'll sleep together for eternity.

The state of,the unmade bed,
The symbol of our love.
Too involved to bother,
Too busy to tidy up.
But now, unmade is messy,
Without you I'm down,
Now our bed is simply mine,
I need your arms around.

(Chr.)

Though you're not gone for good,
You're not here right now.
I won't move, though I should,
Til my bed is ours.
I need you tonight, tomorrow, all,
To warm me up inside,
To catch my nightmares, break my fall,
Cuddle up and hide.
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a tsr musical sounds fun! lol....i like that idea
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Yay, 6 people so far. I want to try to get it up to ten people, so i can start a poll on it.
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Yay, 6 people so far. I want to try to get it up to ten people, so i can start a poll on it.
Drugged up

One day, I was sane
I could look at my refelction
and see just who I am.
walk into the bedroom
Of the gentle Jesus christ
and wallow in the clouds of
of the messiahs bed.

But now i'm feeling all
the impossiblities of this life.
All I want is to get away

(chous)

Dreaming, in the passion of my mind
Separated, from the world that lies behind
Movements float above me in the sky
Then suddenly I ask
Then suddenly I ask
Just who am I?
who am I?
oh yeh.


One night, was insane
Hyped upon narcotics
and that marvellous cocaine
Needle upon the doorstep
Of the colours in the sky
I wallow in the shallows
Of my head

(chours)

Oh how can I
Redeem myself
When all I get is one 2 one
Oh why am
I waiting
For the help
who never comes

(chorus)

I'm still don't belong to this world.
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Drugged up

One day, I was sane
I could look at my refelction
and see just who I am.
walk into the bedroom
Of the gentle Jesus christ
and wallow in the clouds of
of the messiahs bed.

But now i'm feeling all
the impossiblities of this life.
All I want is to get away

(chous)

Dreaming, in the passion of my mind
Separated, from the world that lies behind
Movements float above me in the sky
Then suddenly I ask
Then suddenly I ask
Just who am I?
who am I?
oh yeh.


One night, was insane
Hyped upon narcotics
and that marvellous cocaine
Needle upon the doorstep
Of the colours in the sky
I wallow in the shallows
Of my head

(chours)

Oh how can I
Redeem myself
When all I get is one 2 one
Oh why am
I waiting
For the help
who never comes

(chorus)

I'm still don't belong to this world.
Its only one entry per person, so you'll have to choose which one you want to be voted on.
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Its only one entry per person, so you'll have to choose which one you want to be voted on.

Oh okay, drugged up then.
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