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adolescent love you were to me
till the stroke of time cut us apart

wallow i may because of my love for thee
vanishing like a cool nightly breeze

oh joy! i sing as i see you again after many years
your beauty brings me to tears
your voice a hallow, suddenly brilliant sound
the seraphs in heaven, soulfully we are bound

yet as time may have it, we depart each others presence once more
only to find are hearts breaking like a splintered door

high tide it is! as we have found new love
shy, brown and beautiful she stands, unafraid to show her wings that dove

yet it be that dove in which your soul presides
as you sell your soul to the angels above, in hope of keeping the bliss of this love
in holy matrimony, the angels and her sing!
crying as you watch, see that your losing who you to be

her heart now in unison with the heavens
your heart in the grave
dread overwhelming, you lay in the sand, thinking about your time with the dove

understanding, you try to move on
never able to as your heart stands with love
never ending love, love for the dove
Original post by cameron.locke
adolescent love you were to me
till the stroke of time cut us apart
wallow i may because of my love for thee
vanishing like a cool nightly breeze
oh joy! i sing as i see you again after many years
your beauty brings me to tears
your voice a hallow, suddenly brilliant sound
the seraphs in heaven, soulfully we are bound
yet as time may have it, we depart each others presence once more
only to find are hearts breaking like a splintered door
high tide it is! as we have found new love
shy, brown and beautiful she stands, unafraid to show her wings that dove
yet it be that dove in which your soul presides
as you sell your soul to the angels above, in hope of keeping the bliss of this love
in holy matrimony, the angels and her sing!
crying as you watch, see that your losing who you to be
her heart now in unison with the heavens
your heart in the grave
dread overwhelming, you lay in the sand, thinking about your time with the dove
understanding, you try to move on
never able to as your heart stands with love
never ending love, love for the dove

Awful if it was opposite day. This poem is trash, because it's being left in the dust unnecessarily. I really dislike this poem, I've never seen something quite like it, simply because I cant write anything on the same level as this. The words are not suited for any living human being with a pair of brain cells, no this is only best for extraterrestrial more intelligent life, for only they would seem to understand
Original post by cameron.locke
adolescent love you were to me
till the stroke of time cut us apart
wallow i may because of my love for thee
vanishing like a cool nightly breeze
oh joy! i sing as i see you again after many years
your beauty brings me to tears
your voice a hallow, suddenly brilliant sound
the seraphs in heaven, soulfully we are bound
yet as time may have it, we depart each others presence once more
only to find are hearts breaking like a splintered door
high tide it is! as we have found new love
shy, brown and beautiful she stands, unafraid to show her wings that dove
yet it be that dove in which your soul presides
as you sell your soul to the angels above, in hope of keeping the bliss of this love
in holy matrimony, the angels and her sing!
crying as you watch, see that your losing who you to be
her heart now in unison with the heavens
your heart in the grave
dread overwhelming, you lay in the sand, thinking about your time with the dove
understanding, you try to move on
never able to as your heart stands with love
never ending love, love for the dove

class
i don't like poetry usually but this read nicely
i like the !s
Original post by battle_machine07
Awful if it was opposite day. This poem is trash, because it's being left in the dust unnecessarily. I really dislike this poem, I've never seen something quite like it, simply because I cant write anything on the same level as this. The words are not suited for any living human being with a pair of brain cells, no this is only best for extraterrestrial more intelligent life, for only they would seem to understand

bro get of here if your going to talk trash like that i like to see you make a poem oh that's right you can't go cry to your mom little baby
Original post by Anonymous
bro get of here if your going to talk trash like that i like to see you make a poem oh that's right you can't go cry to your mom little baby

if you even cared to read the entire thing, i was praising their gift. But you lack the attention span of a 5 year old.
Original post by battle_machine07
if you even cared to read the entire thing, i was praising their gift. But you lack the attention span of a 5 year old.

bro you 2years old talking trash lol bro thinks he's all that i like to see you do something about it oh that's only if your mommy lots you out
Original post by zack19002006
bro you 2years old talking trash lol bro thinks he's all that i like to see you do something about it oh that's only if your mommy lots you out

so now ik who left that pitiful attempt at an insult. Wonderful. Again, please reread my first comment: it was intended for humorous purposes to praise the author of this great poem. Im not pretending I can do this: I can't. But you seemed to miss the joke. It comes from a show called Key and Peele. why not watch it? you'll grow a pair..
r/whooooosh
Original post by battle_machine07
so now ik who left that pitiful attempt at an insult. Wonderful. Again, please reread my first comment: it was intended for humorous purposes to praise the author of this great poem. Im not pretending I can do this: I can't. But you seemed to miss the joke. It comes from a show called Key and Peele. why not watch it? you'll grow a pair..
r/whooooosh
For an 18 year old this is quite unexpected. I deadass thought you were like at most 10 years old. How tf are you 18 and speaking like this. It just doesn't add up. Either you're lying or you're just really temperamental.
I thank you all for the praise, and comments.
Original post by battle_machine07
if you even cared to read the entire thing, i was praising their gift. But you lack the attention span of a 5 year old.

lol fr
This poem is one of many of mine, if you wish to see more poems, go to my website
poemsbycameronwlocke.godaddysites.com
Original post by cameron.locke
This poem is one of many of mine, if you wish to see more poems, go to my website
poemsbycameronwlocke.godaddysites.com

you're a legend mate. keep on making your poems
Original post by cameron.locke
This poem is one of many of mine, if you wish to see more poems, go to my website
poemsbycameronwlocke.godaddysites.com

class, i'll check it out ^^

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