please rate my poem - The verse of my love

a full stomach
a full heart

bliss of love
beating heart, breathing soul
soulless, sold your soul
soul sold for blissful love

Lilly, the girl made of love
this girl, the dove

the remembrance of love
Lilly's the dove
the dove, my heart inclined
love, my being refined

beauty hidden in cloth
beautiful, hoped to betroth

ruined, fateful mistake
a sinners hand gladly take

cheat, beat, entreat
bed, bled, dead
love, lost, never forgotten

sinners hand, ran
holy father sought

Christ found
sinners led

left dead
the sinner bled

left to die, soulless
dove-less
laying in the bad bed
bad, mad, sad
bed, bled, dead
notably dead

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