Gcse english lan paper 1 question 2

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'overall the writer uses language to describe the character' is unnecessary and almost feels like a tacky ending. I'm sure your examiner knows that the writer is using language. It is fine to use it once to remind the examiner but not twice.

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Instead of saying the word indicates, the adjective/verb/adverb indicates would be better and more precise

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instead of the phrase shows, the personification/metaphor of... shows

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Expand more on 'how' this is achieved

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e.g) The word “polished” indicates how the woman was speaking smoothly and confidently because polished has connotations of...