Pls can someone mark my AQA English Language paper 1? Thank you in advance!

I know this is quite a lot so you don't have to mark it all if you don't want too. Btw I did the June 2022 past paper if that helps.
Question 2: “How does the writer use language here to describe the conflict between Kino and the Scorpion?” (8 marks)
The writer uses language to describe the conflict between Kino and the scorpion as being tense, dangerous and like a song. This is shown through the juxtaposition when he refers to the scorpion as the “song of Evil” and his family as the “song of the Family”. This puts a clear divide between Kino’s family and the scorpion who is their “foe” that wants to harm them. The use of the capital letter in “Evil” and “Family” only further emphasises their roles as enemies who wish to cause harm to each other, although for different reasons, as Kino wants to protect his family, but the scorpion wants to harm them because that’s its nature. The threat of the scorpion is further emphasised through the use of the triple “savage, secret, dangerous”, proving how large of a negative impact the scorpion has on the family. The adjective “savage” implies the scorpion has no care for human life and instead simply disregards it, possibly due to it’s violent nature. The adjective “secret” implies that the scorpion’s appearance is surprising, unexpected, and it is not meant to be anywhere near the family.
Question 3: Structure (8 marks) "How has the writer structured the text to interest you as a reader?"
The writer uses differentiating sentence structures throughout the text to interest us as reader and make us want to read on when a paragraph composed of almost entirely longer sentences is broken up by a short sentence “Kino and Juana froze in their positions.” when they first notice the scorpion. This shows how tense they are that the scorpion, which poses a large threat, is so close to their baby– who would be especially vulnerable if it were to be attacked. It also consumes all of their attention and makes them stop what they were doing, proving how it has soured the regular, normal attitude between them before the scorpion arrived. As readers we can clearly see how much concern the parents have for their baby in the face of danger, making us admire them for it. After the baby is stung they speak in short sentences “Scorpion. “The baby has been stung.”, showing their desperation to get help for the baby and how their focus shifted away from the scorpion towards their injured child. As readers this causes us to want to read on as we are concerned for the baby and want to know if they make it to the doctor successfully and if the baby survives.
Question 4 (Everything) (16 marks)
"In this part of the story, Juana's reaction to the danger facing their baby is different to Kino's. The writer shows that Kino is unhelpful, and it is Juana who tries to save the baby's life
To what extent do you agree?"
I agree that Juana’s reaction to when the baby gets stung is very different to Kino’s, with Juana immediately trying to save the baby’s life and Kino acting unhelpfully. However, this could be because Kino feels helpless and like he has not done enough to try and save the baby when we learn that the scorpion “Fell past his finger, fell on the baby’s shoulder, landed and struck.” Showing that he was not able to stop the scorpion in time, resulting in it stinging his baby, which could possibly be a fatal wound for someone so young. Although, the adjective “fell” may suggest that the situation was out of his control and there wasn’t much he could do to stop the scorpion, who’s course seemed to be set and unstoppable. His feelings of failure are further shown when “Kino hovered; he was in the way.”. It is almost as if he thinks there is nothing more he can do for the baby after failing to capture the scorpion, like he has given up. However, the adjective “hovered” suggests that maybe he does want to help, he is just unsure of how to do so. As readers we realise that his unhelpful actions could be due to feelings of inadequacy after not being successful in capturing the scorpion the first time. Whereas, Juana immediately springs into action and attempts to save the baby when she “had the baby in her arms now… sucked hard and spat”. This shows how strong her maternal instincts are as she is quick to both comfort her baby by holding it in her arms and try to remove the venom so the baby has a higher chance of survival. The simile “eyes as cold as the eyes of a lioness” shows her immediate change in attitude and personality from “patient and fragile” when the baby is threatened, possibly from desperation to do anything to save the baby. As readers we will admire her determination to do anything she can to save her baby, based on what is available to her.
SECTION B
Question 5: creative writing. (40 marks)
Life saving rescue
The boat rocks under the sea’s violent intensity, struggling against the current that seems so focused on pulling it under. Still, it persists, rocking against the waves in a chaotic dance. It would survive– and so would the soul on board. That was certain.
It was a small thing, the boat: from stern to end it barely measured more than 20 feet, it was only graced with the presence of a singular crew member and, worst of all, the emergency motor attached to the back simply refused to start up. It was a dire situation, indeed.
If you were to peek inside the equally tiny cabin, you would see a quivering, shaking man, quaking in all-consuming fear. Once a strong sailor, who had supposedly braved each of the seven seas in true captain fashion, now reduced to a crying, panicking mess. He believed that he was well and truly stuck. Stuck was the only way to describe it; it’s not like anyone was coming for him in this storm. A melancholic sort of resignation set deep into his heart, there was nothing he could do now.
Only mere hours ago, the man and the boat were waiting portside to set sail. To go on one final adventure– for old time’s sake. A fresh coat of paint– the brightest Ruby red you had ever seen– adorned the boat’s like a particularly beautiful piece of jewellery. No doubt that the boat would be proudly showing its new outfit off, if it were able to. The sailor was equally as proud, wearing his old sailing suit that somehow still fit like a glove. It’s deep, black stitching, a stark contrast to his freshly trimmed white beard that was so long it would even make Santa jealous. But, that felt like hours ago.
Suddenly, a horn sounded. An extremely loud horn. Pulling himself from his sobs and prayers, the old sailor stared out of the window; it was old and thick and warped his view horrendously. He desperately wanted to find the source of that angel’s call. A nondescript, yet impossibly large and impossibly grey ship appeared in his vision. Full of life again, the sailor whooped and cheered with all his might. Until his lungs were burning with undiluted passion. He was going to be saved! He was going to survive! He was going to live!

Hi there,
Question two I believe that you would get 7 out of 8 and this is because I am unsure if capitalisation would get you a mark, because it’s borderline structure. Other than than, I thought it was great!
Question 3 you expanded a lot about sentence structure but to get too band you have to mention more than one technique so perhaps talk about how the short sentence also created a shift in tone? Overall I think 6/8 just because of that but your wording is excellent
Question 4, a really really good answer! 13/16! This is because of a few things, you need to be able to look at alternative ways of analysis in top band. Now you have almost done this when you discuss ‘hovered’ but I think you need to be more concise, but explaining how hovered could mean that he wants to help but also could mean that he’s in shock and can’t help at all. Also, you forgot to link bank to the question at the end (only a little thing, but really important to remember)
Question 5, LOVE LOVE LOVED this! Literally only 1 piece of advice that I have is that at the beginning when you list descriptions of the boat, you use a colon then separate the clauses with a comma when it should be a semi-colon. That’s literaly it. I loved this sm. 39/40
Overall, you did really really well! FYI, I’m not an examiner, I’m a have student like u but in my mocks I consistently get 9’s (Sorry that sounds like I’m such a proud neek I swear I’m not lmao) so I think my advice and marking is okay?? But idk coz I’m not a teacher.
Anyway, good luck for ur exam ))

Thank you so much! Those are pretty high marks lol

I know this is quite a lot so you don't have to mark it all if you don't want too. Btw I did the June 2022 past paper if that helps.
Question 2: “How does the writer use language here to describe the conflict between Kino and the Scorpion?” (8 marks)
The writer uses language to describe the conflict between Kino and the scorpion as being tense, dangerous and like a song. This is shown through the juxtaposition when he refers to the scorpion as the “song of Evil” and his family as the “song of the Family”. This puts a clear divide between Kino’s family and the scorpion who is their “foe” that wants to harm them. The use of the capital letter in “Evil” and “Family” only further emphasises their roles as enemies who wish to cause harm to each other, although for different reasons, as Kino wants to protect his family, but the scorpion wants to harm them because that’s its nature. The threat of the scorpion is further emphasised through the use of the triple “savage, secret, dangerous”, proving how large of a negative impact the scorpion has on the family. The adjective “savage” implies the scorpion has no care for human life and instead simply disregards it, possibly due to it’s violent nature. The adjective “secret” implies that the scorpion’s appearance is surprising, unexpected, and it is not meant to be anywhere near the family.
Question 3: Structure (8 marks) "How has the writer structured the text to interest you as a reader?"
The writer uses differentiating sentence structures throughout the text to interest us as reader and make us want to read on when a paragraph composed of almost entirely longer sentences is broken up by a short sentence “Kino and Juana froze in their positions.” when they first notice the scorpion. This shows how tense they are that the scorpion, which poses a large threat, is so close to their baby– who would be especially vulnerable if it were to be attacked. It also consumes all of their attention and makes them stop what they were doing, proving how it has soured the regular, normal attitude between them before the scorpion arrived. As readers we can clearly see how much concern the parents have for their baby in the face of danger, making us admire them for it. After the baby is stung they speak in short sentences “Scorpion. “The baby has been stung.”, showing their desperation to get help for the baby and how their focus shifted away from the scorpion towards their injured child. As readers this causes us to want to read on as we are concerned for the baby and want to know if they make it to the doctor successfully and if the baby survives.
Question 4 (Everything) (16 marks)
"In this part of the story, Juana's reaction to the danger facing their baby is different to Kino's. The writer shows that Kino is unhelpful, and it is Juana who tries to save the baby's life
To what extent do you agree?"
I agree that Juana’s reaction to when the baby gets stung is very different to Kino’s, with Juana immediately trying to save the baby’s life and Kino acting unhelpfully. However, this could be because Kino feels helpless and like he has not done enough to try and save the baby when we learn that the scorpion “Fell past his finger, fell on the baby’s shoulder, landed and struck.” Showing that he was not able to stop the scorpion in time, resulting in it stinging his baby, which could possibly be a fatal wound for someone so young. Although, the adjective “fell” may suggest that the situation was out of his control and there wasn’t much he could do to stop the scorpion, who’s course seemed to be set and unstoppable. His feelings of failure are further shown when “Kino hovered; he was in the way.”. It is almost as if he thinks there is nothing more he can do for the baby after failing to capture the scorpion, like he has given up. However, the adjective “hovered” suggests that maybe he does want to help, he is just unsure of how to do so. As readers we realise that his unhelpful actions could be due to feelings of inadequacy after not being successful in capturing the scorpion the first time. Whereas, Juana immediately springs into action and attempts to save the baby when she “had the baby in her arms now… sucked hard and spat”. This shows how strong her maternal instincts are as she is quick to both comfort her baby by holding it in her arms and try to remove the venom so the baby has a higher chance of survival. The simile “eyes as cold as the eyes of a lioness” shows her immediate change in attitude and personality from “patient and fragile” when the baby is threatened, possibly from desperation to do anything to save the baby. As readers we will admire her determination to do anything she can to save her baby, based on what is available to her.
SECTION B
Question 5: creative writing. (40 marks)
Life saving rescue
The boat rocks under the sea’s violent intensity, struggling against the current that seems so focused on pulling it under. Still, it persists, rocking against the waves in a chaotic dance. It would survive– and so would the soul on board. That was certain.
It was a small thing, the boat: from stern to end it barely measured more than 20 feet, it was only graced with the presence of a singular crew member and, worst of all, the emergency motor attached to the back simply refused to start up. It was a dire situation, indeed.
If you were to peek inside the equally tiny cabin, you would see a quivering, shaking man, quaking in all-consuming fear. Once a strong sailor, who had supposedly braved each of the seven seas in true captain fashion, now reduced to a crying, panicking mess. He believed that he was well and truly stuck. Stuck was the only way to describe it; it’s not like anyone was coming for him in this storm. A melancholic sort of resignation set deep into his heart, there was nothing he could do now.
Only mere hours ago, the man and the boat were waiting portside to set sail. To go on one final adventure– for old time’s sake. A fresh coat of paint– the brightest Ruby red you had ever seen– adorned the boat’s like a particularly beautiful piece of jewellery. No doubt that the boat would be proudly showing its new outfit off, if it were able to. The sailor was equally as proud, wearing his old sailing suit that somehow still fit like a glove. It’s deep, black stitching, a stark contrast to his freshly trimmed white beard that was so long it would even make Santa jealous. But, that felt like hours ago.
Suddenly, a horn sounded. An extremely loud horn. Pulling himself from his sobs and prayers, the old sailor stared out of the window; it was old and thick and warped his view horrendously. He desperately wanted to find the source of that angel’s call. A nondescript, yet impossibly large and impossibly grey ship appeared in his vision. Full of life again, the sailor whooped and cheered with all his might. Until his lungs were burning with undiluted passion. He was going to be saved! He was going to survive! He was going to live!