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Its question 5 of this paper
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The writers both convey similar feelings and experiences about meeting the birds for the first time. In Text One, the writer describes the creature “Scutt [ling] around in the gutter. This reveals that the magpie maybe frightened of the surrounding because they maybe in a new place. The word “scuttles” shows that the magpie could be scavenging around for shiny objects as they are fascinated by their appearance. In addition, the word “scuttles” can also emphasise the magpie’s fast movements due to the fact that it may not want to be noticed. Contrastingly, the word “corner” can give negative connotations to the reader that the magpie is suspicious or being secretive. IN Text 1, the writer meets the magpie for the first time. However, in Text 2 the writer adopted the goshawk following the tragic passing of her father. This is revealed when it says “This was not my hawk.” The line is repeated multiple times in the extract and this can suggest Macdonalds’s panic over the sitiuation. Furthermore, she may ave been under a sense of extreme shock because of the experience. Also, she uses italics to heighten the tension and add emphasis. Despite this difference, the sources are similar because they are both written in first person.

Secondly, the writers both convey similar feelings regarding the two birds. In text one the writer is reluctant about looking after the bird due to the fact that they are extremely perplexed with what to do with it. This is revealed when it says “Isn’t there someone else who can deal with this.”. This reveals that the writer may not want to have the big responsibility. The two words “someone else” can demonstrate that Charlie may feel that he was especially chosen to look after the magpie. Similarly, in text 2 Helen Macdonald has a panicked feeling and response because of the magpie, revealing “This is not my hawk.” This reveals she is under extreme pressure and stress on a quest to find her hawk. The word “this” can suggest that she is disregarding the second hawk due to the fact that she has attachment feelings for the first hawk. Despite the similarity, the sources differ in that Text 1 emphasis how Charlie does not want to look after the hawk while Text 2 demonstrates throughout the disapproval of the second hawk.


Thirdly, both writers present the feelings about the two hawks through the use of similes. In Text 1, the writer describes the magpie as “demanding and unreasonable as a toddler in a sweet shop.” In addition, both toddlers and magpies are fascinated by colourful and shiny things like sweet shops and this could be the reason why Gilmour uses this simile. The word “demanding” can reveal the magpie’s sense of urgency to find something shiny and like a toddler in a sweet shop the magpie is attached to the thing they desire to have (in this case shiny things) and would do anything until the object is in their possession. Similarly, in text 2 Macdonald descibes the hawk like a ‘madwomen in a melodrama’. This could reveal that she believes the hawk is mentally unstable due to its intense emotions. This could reveal the hawk’s very dramatic. Despite this similarity, the sources differ in that Text 1 links the magpie to something that can be related to in real life like a “toddler in a sweet shop” while text 2 simile is something lesser on the happier scale and the reader may not be able to relate.
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Hi, I just had a skim through this, and it is very good. I really like the structure, and she did very well in analysing and noticing the language techniques used, which is crucial.
One bit of advice from me, is that at the end of each paragraph, when a broader similarity/difference is explained, try to develop this further. For example, the similarity in the first paragraph, what is the effect that they both use first person? Here, this is a great place to talk about the genre, text 2 employs the first person as it is a memoir. Does this apply for text 1 too?
As well as this, I don't know if this was taught, but try to include the purpose of the text. In text 2, the purpose of the text is to entertain the general adult audience. Is that perhaps why Macdonwald uses similes?
Also make sure you're answering the question - talk about the perspective of both writers.
A little sentence to conclude could be good at the end if you have time - doesn't matter if you can't. But you could discuss if the texts are more similar or more different.

I would personally give this answer a level 4 - perhaps 17-18/22.

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