English literature an inspector calls - essay review !!

N1c0l3z

Hi , would anyone like to read my essay on mr birling and give me feedback on what to improve :smile:

Reply 1

N1c0l3z

Original post by NotRike

Yeah sure, go for it.

here ! thank you :smile:

Reply 2

NotRike

I'll go paragraph by paragraph.
Paragraph 1 - I think on the whole the analysis is quite good and there's good nuance and variation.
I would point out that it is usually good at the start of the essay, particularly about an individual/character to link them to one of the seven deadly sins. So here, you could perhaps link the "heavy-looking" quote to how Mr. Birling embodies gluttony, which is ultimately done through exploiting his workers, and subjecting them to terrible conditions, to the point at which Eva Smith and her fellow factory workers started a protest.
Always generally good to make the link with seven deadly sins ... don't know whether you have covered yet.

Reply 3

NotRike

Paragraph 2 - good analysis and contextual links at the end again. Addressed quite important bits of quotes and analysis. I would say on the Titanic bit, you can furthermore say that the Titanic represents the symbol of the Birling families' wealth and societal status, which seems unsinkable from the outside, but by the end of the play is completely wrecked and ruined (due to the public scandal about Eva's death) just like the Titanic.
Nice bit of analysis our teacher told us. Shows you understand the story.

Reply 4

NotRike

Paragraph 3 - yes. You could maybe talk about the old vs young social divide, and how Mr. Birling embodies rigid traditionalism, and how he refuses to change his views (as you have done).
Apart from this, I'd say on the whole (from this brief overview) your essay is quite solid. I'd give it a 23/30.