English Language Paper 2 Question 3 Aqa

HI guys just wanted to come on here and ask you what language techniques you were able to identify in source A for question 3. I just managed 3 paragraphs and here's what I did please let me know what you think.
Para 1 - I focused on the simile 'Made hell look like Disneyland' . I spoke about how it clearly over exaggerates to the reader how bad the nightshift was. I also spoke about the violent imagery associated with 'Hell' and said it connotes fire, pain and suffering which contrasts the word 'Disneyland' which implies a sense of fun of freedom. After analysing those 2 words I spoke about how they juxtapose each other and help the reader understand how bad the doctor is struggling to deal with the nightshift.
Para 2- I focused on the repetition of nurses, emergency and bleep. I said the constant repetition highlights how intense and relentless the nightshift was to work in. There isn't any time to think or gather thoughts before the next demand is put forward to you. I also zoomed in on the use of commas in-between the repetition. I said it slows the pace at which the reader reads the text down to show how long the nightshift really felt . The doctor felt as if the shift would last forever and the intensity was relentless
Para 3 - Was a bit shorter as I had already analysed in depth . I picked up on the extended metaphor of the shift becoming a ship which the doctor was controlling . I said this metaphor is continued throughout the paragraph to create a sense of unease and tension . Readers have already been told that he hasn't learnt how to control the ship so they may begin to worry for his safety and creates tension as to what is going to happen next.
Please let me know what you think and what you did

I think that’s quite good, I did something similar too but I wasn’t able to finish my paper and only nearly finished all the other questions. Do u think it is possible for me to get a 6 in English Language, considering this paper and paper 1 (which didn’t go too great either)

A six is definitely achievable. I think my first paper didnt go too well either. How was your question 5?

My question 5 on paper 1 was okay but I only managed to write 2 pages. My question 5 on paper 2 was good but I only wrote 2 paragraphs, how was urs

I kind of started off with a dystopian world where the rich were painted as the enemy and they were glaring down upon the poor from the pedestal. I portrayed the malevolent millionaires as greedy and as power hungry. The poor get poor the richer get richer. Unfortunately this is the current situation today
Second para I spoke about who I am and why you should listen to me. I used a lot of we and our to create a sense of unity. I spoke about all the positives behind the youth and how we can use these skills to break the mould and hope for a better future where society works together hand in hand
Para 3 was mainly facts about things such as carbon emissions as well as an anecdote. I said I was greeted by a homeless man last week and when I went home to research details on the homeless people I was left feeling lonely just as the homeless feel. The media is controlled by the rich hence why there is no news on the homeless .
Para 4 I spoke about how when we were younger we uses to idolise people such as firemen nurses and policemen because of how they were selfless and always contributed to society. As we have gotten older we have become manipulated by the system to believe that being a millionaire and living in Dubai is the true meaning of happiness and not giving back to the community. I uses a kind of flash back to when I was a child and how I used to adore policemen
Para 5 I spoke about how we can tackle this using an extended metaphor. I described the ocean of opportuneities that we need to dive into to find answers . To navigate the copy waves we all must one as one unit and as one society. Key workers roles should be glorified once again as they were in the past and a sense of unity and togetherness can be developed within society. We should try and help others rather then chasing temporary money for a false sense of authority
Para 6 I just did. utopia talking about how much better society would be if everyone worked hand in hand to illuminate the hearts and minds of thousands of people within a city
what u think

HI guys just wanted to come on here and ask you what language techniques you were able to identify in source A for question 3. I just managed 3 paragraphs and here's what I did please let me know what you think.
Para 1 - I focused on the simile 'Made hell look like Disneyland' . I spoke about how it clearly over exaggerates to the reader how bad the nightshift was. I also spoke about the violent imagery associated with 'Hell' and said it connotes fire, pain and suffering which contrasts the word 'Disneyland' which implies a sense of fun of freedom. After analysing those 2 words I spoke about how they juxtapose each other and help the reader understand how bad the doctor is struggling to deal with the nightshift.
Para 2- I focused on the repetition of nurses, emergency and bleep. I said the constant repetition highlights how intense and relentless the nightshift was to work in. There isn't any time to think or gather thoughts before the next demand is put forward to you. I also zoomed in on the use of commas in-between the repetition. I said it slows the pace at which the reader reads the text down to show how long the nightshift really felt . The doctor felt as if the shift would last forever and the intensity was relentless
Para 3 - Was a bit shorter as I had already analysed in depth . I picked up on the extended metaphor of the shift becoming a ship which the doctor was controlling . I said this metaphor is continued throughout the paragraph to create a sense of unease and tension . Readers have already been told that he hasn't learnt how to control the ship so they may begin to worry for his safety and creates tension as to what is going to happen next.
Please let me know what you think and what you did

Wow. That is so good. Honestly idek u and I’m so proud of u for that cos that is amazing. Much better than mine, and probably most peoples. You deserve a great grade for that

I did at least the two points same as you, the Hell one and the repetition of nurses and emergency.

What did you say about the repetition? I said it highlights how relentless and intense working on the nighty shift has become for the doctor

I said the same thing and how frustrated he was with the patients and the night shift, it was all torture for him as he went through the shift.

HI guys just wanted to come on here and ask you what language techniques you were able to identify in source A for question 3. I just managed 3 paragraphs and here's what I did please let me know what you think.
Para 1 - I focused on the simile 'Made hell look like Disneyland' . I spoke about how it clearly over exaggerates to the reader how bad the nightshift was. I also spoke about the violent imagery associated with 'Hell' and said it connotes fire, pain and suffering which contrasts the word 'Disneyland' which implies a sense of fun of freedom. After analysing those 2 words I spoke about how they juxtapose each other and help the reader understand how bad the doctor is struggling to deal with the nightshift.
Para 2- I focused on the repetition of nurses, emergency and bleep. I said the constant repetition highlights how intense and relentless the nightshift was to work in. There isn't any time to think or gather thoughts before the next demand is put forward to you. I also zoomed in on the use of commas in-between the repetition. I said it slows the pace at which the reader reads the text down to show how long the nightshift really felt . The doctor felt as if the shift would last forever and the intensity was relentless
Para 3 - Was a bit shorter as I had already analysed in depth . I picked up on the extended metaphor of the shift becoming a ship which the doctor was controlling . I said this metaphor is continued throughout the paragraph to create a sense of unease and tension . Readers have already been told that he hasn't learnt how to control the ship so they may begin to worry for his safety and creates tension as to what is going to happen next.
Please let me know what you think and what you did

i missinterpreted the text and thought he was sayingit was good how badly do u think il get marker down.. is a 7 even still possible

i missinterpreted the text and thought he was sayingit was good how badly do u think il get marker down.. is a 7 even still possible