medicine personal statement feedback

hello! is there anyone here that's helping students applying to undergrad medicine with personal statement writing? I'd really like a second opinion on what I have so far.

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artful_lounger

Universities Forum Helper

Do not post your personal statement online on any public forums (such as in this one), and it is strongly recommended to not share it with anyone you don't trust and know personally (and who ideally is not applying to university currently). This is because if you publish it publicly on a webpage, it will be cached by google and flat in UCAS's plagiarism checker. Likewise if you share it with someone you've never met that you only know online, you have no guarantee they won't copy it in full or in part for also applying this cycle (which would flag as plagiarism/collusion) or just publish on a webpage somewhere else without your knowledge which as noted would be cached by google and thus flag as plagiarism.

TSR operates a free, secure personal statement review service with only DBS checked reviewers who are not currently applying to university, where statements are submitted to a private forum on the website where it can't be cached by google. They also have a lot of experience! You can read more about this service including how to use it here: https://www.thestudentroom.co.uk/showthread.php?t=4237154

Finally I'd also note that many medical schools don't even read the personal statement, and I think few if any actually formally score it at any point in the application process and just check to verify that it's not been plagiarised and there aren't any glaring red flags (e.g. saying "I want to be a doctor so I can get unrestricted access to controlled substances!" or something equally obviously bad...). So I wouldn't overly worry about it. Medicine is probably one of the subjects where it's of much more limited importance I gather.