How do i make my writing more fluid and enjoyable to read

I put all my effort into an artist study essay and my teacher turned around and told me to rewrite it without using ai, when i didnt use ai. help? its roughly 1000 words and took nearly a week to complete because i really struggle with writing structure and now their making me rewrite it because it seems ‘robotic’

Reply 1

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Original post by btheartsjuicy

Sorry to see you are having difficulties. Yes, the rise of AI has caused all sorts of issues, and much like your own, it feels like everyone is a suspect!

I find the best way to take on an essay is to divide it up and write a line or two about each section.

The first task is to deal with that word count. One thousand words seems like a mountain, so let's turn those mountains into hills. You will need three paragraphs for the main body and an introduction and conclusion. So, that will be five parts in total. That's five hills. The formula is straightforward.

Between 5% - 10% of the word count should be for the introduction.
Between 5% -10% of the word count should be for the conclusion.
The rest is then divided between the main body (the three paragraphs).

So, for 1000 words, the introduction should be up to 100 words, each paragraph should be 266 words, and the conclusion should be 100 words.

Remember, it does not have to be precise, just thereabout.

So, now we have our hills, we need to weave a river through them. Forget about the introduction and conclusion for now. Each section of the main body should be related to the next. So, first pick a title for each of the three sections, lets use hats as an example:

Part 1: what hats are used for
Part 2: How hats are made
Part 3: History of a particular hat type

Then, we think about that river.

Part 1: hats are worn on the head to keep the head warm, safe and dry, and the style is often linked to fashion.

For the river link to part 2, materials used to make hats serve multiple purposes; while they need to be practical for manufacturing use and style, creating a hat is variable...

Now, part 3: Throughout history, the use and variety of hats is vast; a later development in the evolution of the hat for almost all practicalities is the bowler hat...

Now we have done the three main parts! (Obviously, the above is just an illustration). Your next task is to write the introduction. Now you have the three parts, that's easy!

This essay is about the use, manufacture and history of hats! I will look at the development and methods and focus on the evolution of one style that covers almost all the practicalities of the bowler.

Then, the conculsion! Even easier! Do not add anything new here! Just round up what you said in the three sections—hats, making of hats, and the history of the bowler hat. And why the bowler hat is the best hat in your opinion.

And then you will have a nice flowing essay about - insert subject -!

Notice how each section of the body moves to the next. Materials and use, fashion and manufacture are mentioned all the way through.

So, for your artist!

Pick something about them, their art style, the changes they brought, and so on. And focus on one piece of art they created that sums up all their work, the pinnacle of the evolution of their practice. Just replace the word hat with artist!

I hope that helps!

Good luck with your essay.

Liz✒️

Reply 2

btheartsjuicy

Original post by CCCU Official

Sorry to see you are having difficulties. Yes, the rise of AI has caused all sorts of issues, and much like your own, it feels like everyone is a suspect!
I find the best way to take on an essay is to divide it up and write a line or two about each section.
The first task is to deal with that word count. One thousand words seems like a mountain, so let's turn those mountains into hills. You will need three paragraphs for the main body and an introduction and conclusion. So, that will be five parts in total. That's five hills. The formula is straightforward.
Between 5% - 10% of the word count should be for the introduction.
Between 5% -10% of the word count should be for the conclusion.
The rest is then divided between the main body (the three paragraphs).
So, for 1000 words, the introduction should be up to 100 words, each paragraph should be 266 words, and the conclusion should be 100 words.
Remember, it does not have to be precise, just thereabout.
So, now we have our hills, we need to weave a river through them. Forget about the introduction and conclusion for now. Each section of the main body should be related to the next. So, first pick a title for each of the three sections, lets use hats as an example:
Part 1: what hats are used for
Part 2: How hats are made
Part 3: History of a particular hat type
Then, we think about that river.
Part 1: hats are worn on the head to keep the head warm, safe and dry, and the style is often linked to fashion.
For the river link to part 2, materials used to make hats serve multiple purposes; while they need to be practical for manufacturing use and style, creating a hat is variable...
Now, part 3: Throughout history, the use and variety of hats is vast; a later development in the evolution of the hat for almost all practicalities is the bowler hat...
Now we have done the three main parts! (Obviously, the above is just an illustration). Your next task is to write the introduction. Now you have the three parts, that's easy!
This essay is about the use, manufacture and history of hats! I will look at the development and methods and focus on the evolution of one style that covers almost all the practicalities of the bowler.
Then, the conculsion! Even easier! Do not add anything new here! Just round up what you said in the three sections—hats, making of hats, and the history of the bowler hat. And why the bowler hat is the best hat in your opinion.
And then you will have a nice flowing essay about - insert subject -!
Notice how each section of the body moves to the next. Materials and use, fashion and manufacture are mentioned all the way through.
So, for your artist!
Pick something about them, their art style, the changes they brought, and so on. And focus on one piece of art they created that sums up all their work, the pinnacle of the evolution of their practice. Just replace the word hat with artist!
I hope that helps!
Good luck with your essay.
Liz✒️

thankyou sososososos much! im about to rewrite it now

Reply 3

CCCU Official

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Original post by btheartsjuicy

thankyou sososososos much! im about to rewrite it now

Good luck! 🙂

Reply 4

digital-haunting

Original post by btheartsjuicy

thankyou sososososos much! im about to rewrite it now

The advice aleady given is great. If you still need help, I would recommend using quillbot AI checker just to highlight any areas that may appear to be ai written even though you have written them yourself. Checking this was a lifesaver fir me as some sections that I wrote in an assignment said ai written even though i wrote it myself and I was then able to rewrite them. Hope this helps!