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Guys check out my gothic writing from 3 years ago

Hi everyone, so like I found this in my google drive from about 3 years ago (yes I know) and just decided to share it with you guys. I don't really need any corrections since it was a long time ago but you can give me some to improve my writing!! It was actually for class work but my english teacher didn't even comment on it. T-T
Btw it's just the introduction I think
Anyways here it is...

Trapped

I woke up in total darkness. Where am I? What time is it? The air had turned black all around me. Am I in heaven? What happened to me? Then soon I realised I was in school. Bleary-eyed, I carried my bag and went to the corridor, it was empty with horror, even the furniture had gone. As I wandered like a lost dog through the school I felt like something was watching me as the place became foggy. No, No, No .This must be a dream or a NIGHTMARE.I thought. The lights flickered and then went off, then continued. All of a sudden a shrill cry echoed in the mist. My hair stood on end, a shiver raced down my spine and a lump came to my throat.

I didn't think I was still in my school-I didn't know what to do so I made up my mind to follow the sound thinking I could find help. It led me outside and ominous black clouds covered the sky which released a sudden shower. Cold and wet, tired and exhausted I went outside made my way along the eerie path in a possessed looking forest. I have to squint my eyes to make out what 's in front of me. I can see my breath when I breathe out and can hear the sound of my own breathing.

The faint howling of the wind sounds like ghosts swarming on Halloween. I notice an old abandoned, shabby house far off in the distance, in desperate need for a new paint job. I hadn't seen the house before or even been to this part of the town. Help me! Help me! Came the call from behind the wooden door of the building. As I approach the house, I smell its old musty odour. Cautiously, I turned the handle. I pushed open the old creaky door and looked inside. The inside looks like what you’d expect. Cobwebs linger in every witch way, and antique furniture layered with dust sits perfectly arranged in the living room. With every heavy step and pressure on the floor boards, it feels as if the house will collapse on top of me. I make my way into the kitchen. An old wooden table sits in the corner, along with matching chairs and a red, soiled knife.

Anxious to get out of this place, I start to walk back to the door and exit, but stop dead in my tracks. My heartbeat increases as I intently listen to a hard pounding noise that appears to be getting louder by the second. Bang, Bang, Bang. I crouch behind a nearby staircase as the volume of the pounding increases followed by an ear splitting scream. All of a sudden, it stops and it is as quiet as a graveyard .I got the nerve to stand up and go to see what's going on. As I passed the kitchen ,my surprise turned to horror - A lifeless girl about my age with gaping marks on her body was on the floor, Flabbergasted, I ran to the entrance to find out it was locked then I ran helter-skelter all over the house, the air turned black all around me. I couldn't find an exit, so I went upstairs into a bedroom to hide. Footsteps slowly creaked on every step of the stairs. The bedroom door handle turned slowly. This might be my end or a new beginning - I was trapped.

Lmao
Thanks for reading and have a lovely day....

(edited 2 months ago)

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