S6 subject choices help???

One thing we need to consider is how Saudi Arabia is luring our favourite players from their passionate clubs as Saudi Arabia spends ground-breaking amounts of money to steal them away. This was visualised through a largely unknown Saudi Arabian football team called Al Nassr buying beloved star Cristiano Ronaldo. Once our Manchester United’s admirable winger, now the face of Saudi’s sporting scene for the eyewatering amount of £200 million – how admirable! This isn’t the first occurrence where our beloved players have been bought for astonishing amounts of money. Throughout the summer of 2024, the total amount of money spent by Saudi clubs totalled to an unimaginable $1,000,000,000 on football alone. This has also caused a chain reaction; Saudi’s sportswashing has expanded to a various number of our favourite sports like; boxing, golf, UFC, horse-racing, and the list goes on endlessly, all under the control of the Saudis. Whilst the Saudis enjoy sports, we, the fans, are outraged. After a boxing event where neither fighter originated from a Saudi Arabian background, the venue not being in Saudi – their national anthem was played...sports lovers didn’t enjoy this. The crowd booed over the performance. Whilst these actions are deeply reprehensible, it showcases the importance that sport’s fans are mystified and fed up with Saudi’s reign over sport. Rumours suggesting that Saudi paid money for their anthem to be played have spread, linking back to Saudi Arabia using their wealth as an advantage to showcase their power over the world. By impacting every sport, Saudi is “sports washing”. This term is used to describe the practice of using sports to improve a country’s reputation tarnished by wrongdoing. The purpose of sporting has been lost, why should we let this continue? Fans have started to criticise players that have chosen the path of Saudi football clubs, saying that ‘players are going just for the money, rather than the passion,’ which is fully understandable, why else would you leave the spotlight for an unknown team? Saudi Arabia is sportswashing sports by using their immense wealth to gain a positive recognition and attempting to cover their human rights issue – but do they know that this ruins their reputation more?
Forget the journalist Jamal Khashoggi who was brutally murdered in a Saudi consulate who was just trying to sign some documents related to his marriage. Just imagine the sadness brought to his family and his soon to be wife? The terror continues as all his fellow colleagues who are either in prison or are constantly harassed. Don't think of the endless human rights abuse allegations and brutal executions. No, let's focus on the fact that they host my favourite sport, and they sign my favourite players. Who cares about the mass killings of migrants?
A significant reason for Saudi focusing their attention on sport is to make the reputation and the image of Saudi better and more tempting for tourists, but this isn't the full story. Saudi has an appalling reputation of human rights abuses. Executions are on the increase with nearly ‘200 people killed just this year’ which is a horrifying statistic, this is the case due to Saudi’s use of devilish death penalties and extreme medieval punishments. Many executed were punished for supporting anti-government protests, which brings up the fact that there is no right to protest in Saudi! Salma al–Shebab, a 36-year-old mother of two, was arrested in 2021 while on holiday in the Gulf Kingdom. Al-Shebab was a student at the University of Leeds with hopes and desire to finish her dentistry degree; however, she was jailed over posts calling for the release of activists. She was sentenced to 34 years before having her sentence reduced to 4 years. This is just one example of the horrifying stories occurring in Saudi.
Simply we can't tolerate this, just imagine the unbearable thoughts of her children, truly upsetting. Saudi are diverting the attention away from their awful acts such as their human rights issues. This can be backed up by how women are discriminated against, for example, women's have no freedom to travel, cannot get their own passport and furthermore were not able to drive until 2018. The US government and various human rights charities ‘criticised Saudi in the past for preventing girls from playing sports’, which is illogical as the US continues to support Saudi. Previous Formula 1 Driver, Lewis Hamilton has expressed that Saudi needs to “improve its human rights record”, announcing this the day before the Saudi Grand Prix. Saudi has one of the longest contracts and pays one of the largest fees on the F1 calendar, a staggering £53 million per year. This proves the fact that Saudi uses their wealth to redefine their reputation and avoid the endless number of allegations towards them. We cannot allow Saudi Arabia to effectively own the sporting world unless there’s equal opportunities and treatment for all.

One thing we need to consider is how Saudi Arabia is luring our favourite players from their passionate clubs as Saudi Arabia spends ground-breaking amounts of money to steal them away. This was visualised through a largely unknown Saudi Arabian football team called Al Nassr buying beloved star Cristiano Ronaldo. Once our Manchester United’s admirable winger, now the face of Saudi’s sporting scene for the eyewatering amount of £200 million – how admirable! This isn’t the first occurrence where our beloved players have been bought for astonishing amounts of money. Throughout the summer of 2024, the total amount of money spent by Saudi clubs totalled to an unimaginable $1,000,000,000 on football alone. This has also caused a chain reaction; Saudi’s sportswashing has expanded to a various number of our favourite sports like; boxing, golf, UFC, horse-racing, and the list goes on endlessly, all under the control of the Saudis. Whilst the Saudis enjoy sports, we, the fans, are outraged. After a boxing event where neither fighter originated from a Saudi Arabian background, the venue not being in Saudi – their national anthem was played...sports lovers didn’t enjoy this. The crowd booed over the performance. Whilst these actions are deeply reprehensible, it showcases the importance that sport’s fans are mystified and fed up with Saudi’s reign over sport. Rumours suggesting that Saudi paid money for their anthem to be played have spread, linking back to Saudi Arabia using their wealth as an advantage to showcase their power over the world. By impacting every sport, Saudi is “sports washing”. This term is used to describe the practice of using sports to improve a country’s reputation tarnished by wrongdoing. The purpose of sporting has been lost, why should we let this continue? Fans have started to criticise players that have chosen the path of Saudi football clubs, saying that ‘players are going just for the money, rather than the passion,’ which is fully understandable, why else would you leave the spotlight for an unknown team? Saudi Arabia is sportswashing sports by using their immense wealth to gain a positive recognition and attempting to cover their human rights issue – but do they know that this ruins their reputation more?
Forget the journalist Jamal Khashoggi who was brutally murdered in a Saudi consulate who was just trying to sign some documents related to his marriage. Just imagine the sadness brought to his family and his soon to be wife? The terror continues as all his fellow colleagues who are either in prison or are constantly harassed. Don't think of the endless human rights abuse allegations and brutal executions. No, let's focus on the fact that they host my favourite sport, and they sign my favourite players. Who cares about the mass killings of migrants?
A significant reason for Saudi focusing their attention on sport is to make the reputation and the image of Saudi better and more tempting for tourists, but this isn't the full story. Saudi has an appalling reputation of human rights abuses. Executions are on the increase with nearly ‘200 people killed just this year’ which is a horrifying statistic, this is the case due to Saudi’s use of devilish death penalties and extreme medieval punishments. Many executed were punished for supporting anti-government protests, which brings up the fact that there is no right to protest in Saudi! Salma al–Shebab, a 36-year-old mother of two, was arrested in 2021 while on holiday in the Gulf Kingdom. Al-Shebab was a student at the University of Leeds with hopes and desire to finish her dentistry degree; however, she was jailed over posts calling for the release of activists. She was sentenced to 34 years before having her sentence reduced to 4 years. This is just one example of the horrifying stories occurring in Saudi.
Simply we can't tolerate this, just imagine the unbearable thoughts of her children, truly upsetting. Saudi are diverting the attention away from their awful acts such as their human rights issues. This can be backed up by how women are discriminated against, for example, women's have no freedom to travel, cannot get their own passport and furthermore were not able to drive until 2018. The US government and various human rights charities ‘criticised Saudi in the past for preventing girls from playing sports’, which is illogical as the US continues to support Saudi. Previous Formula 1 Driver, Lewis Hamilton has expressed that Saudi needs to “improve its human rights record”, announcing this the day before the Saudi Grand Prix. Saudi has one of the longest contracts and pays one of the largest fees on the F1 calendar, a staggering £53 million per year. This proves the fact that Saudi uses their wealth to redefine their reputation and avoid the endless number of allegations towards them. We cannot allow Saudi Arabia to effectively own the sporting world unless there’s equal opportunities and treatment for all.

Saudi Arabia, once a barren desert, is now home to the world’s most abundantly wealthy sportsmen. - Reduced some wordiness, the word abundant sort of contradicted with barren and shrivelled, so I moved it. But I really liked this opening statement. (I removed shrivelled too, just because I think using less words to show how ‘empty’ it was, better shows the point)
Saudi wealth is putting our beloved sports at risk, persuading treasured athletes to abandon their passions for prodigious wages, which includes a mouth-watering $315,000,000 per season. - I tried to change it to add more emphasis on how it’s Saudi Arabia causing this and not just athletes leaving, at first it wasn’t exactly clear until the next sentence, but you want it to be as clear as possible to the reader when you can.
Saudi Arabia is dominating the sporting world through vicious bribery, using their sporting reach to greaten their political power and enhance their reputation, while turning a blind eye to humanitarian rights violations,. - I changed the sentence structure as I felt the human right violations part was like a wedge between the same point.
Established leagues across the globe are being stripped of their talents, as how can they possibly compete with Saudi pay checks in the realm of sports? Simply put, they can't. - I changed the structure to try and emphasise the impact this is having on sports leagues.
Is this the dramatic ending of our adoration of sports?
What must be considered, is that Saudi Arabia is luring our favourite players away from their lifelong clubs and into their arms, spending ludicrous amounts of money. - Tried to personify it a bit, as it shows that their actions are deliberate, and calculated. Also tried to reduce wordiness. - I think lifelong is better word choice, as you later criticised them for choosing money over the sport, so I just though this showed how they’re disloyal.