English Structure- Paper 1

Level 3: 6 marks
Make sure you fully explain why the author has made the choices. You do it for some points, but not all.

Make sure u always state the method, then explain WHY it has been Done Make sure the why is well explained, and offer a few alternative interpretations to hit the 'perceptive' band

Exactly like that, but remember the whole point is the method so link the explanation back to the method. In this question, go for method, quote, why.
If you send me another I will happily mark it

When you mean method do you mean like the tense atmosphere or what the reader focuses our attention to.

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I have been told that it isn't good to look at techniques like foreshadowing and stuff by my teacher. Instead she told me to focus on what the writer focuses on and why he wants us to look at that. Below I have written a answer for the 8 marker. It is from a November 2023 paper. Could you guys please mark it and tell me how i can improve?
At the beginning of the extract the writer focuses the reader’s attention on the warmth of the sun. “The sun was warming the brush house” gives the reader the impression that it will be a tranquil,utopian narrative. The attention is then shifted to the baby’s parents, “ kino and Juana froze in their positions” giving the impression that something bad is happening for them to react that way,Before introducing the scorpion, the shift in focus creates a more threatening atmosphere making the reader feel anxious for the babies safety.
The writer then focuses our attention between Kino and the scorpion switching between them. It shows the equal power dynamics between them creating a sense of unease for the reader as they are not sure who will win. The writer focuses our attention to the actions of the scorpion, “ tail rose up over it’s back” creating a sinister and threatening atmosphere and leading the reader to think that the scorpion will win over Kino. The writer ends with the phrase,” the thorned tail jerked upright” gives us the impression that the scorpion has stung Kino creating a sense of fear for the reader.
The writer then uses a single sentence paragraph to heighten the fear of the moment. “Shook the rope and the scorpion fell” the contrast between a weak child and a dangerous scorpion creates an atmosphere of jeopardy making the reader feel worried about the child’s life.
The writer then focuses our attention to the scorpion stinging Coyotito. “Fell on the baby’s shoulder,landed and struck” which makes the reader visualise the events unfolding properly building tension with each step. The writer then says, “beat it until it was only a fragment in the dirt” this relives the reader of their stress as they know that the danger has been neutralised.

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At the beginning of the extract the writer begins with the short sentence to focus the readers attention on the master craziness. The phrase, " Master was a little crazy" which gives the reader the impression that the Master might be of danger to Ugwu. The writer then zooms in on the Master's craziness. The phrase," talked to himself,did not return greetings and had too much hair". This creates a threatening atmosphere as the reader understands the extent of his craziness and further increasing the reader's anxiousness. The attention is then shifted to the good qualities of the master. The phrase," But he is a good man" this relieves the reader of unease as we are assured of the Master's virtue. The writer then focuses our attention on Ugwu awe. The phrase," ate meat every day"this makes the reader feel empathetic towards Ugwu. The writer focuses our attention here to highlight how poor Ugwu is which further makes the reader feel empathetic towards him. The writer then zooms into the thoughts of Ugwu. The phrase," They had been walking for a while now,since they got off at the lorry park" this makes the reader visualise the events building tension with each step.This makes the reader feel sympathetic as they can see Ugwu is going through pain. The phrase," he would never be able to describe to his sister Anulika" further increases the reader's sympathy towards Ugwu. The writer then shifts the reader's focus on the short phrase," But he didn't mind" creating a relaxed atmosphere and relieving the reader of the unease as they are made aware of how Ugwu feels. The writer ends the text with the cliffhanger, "Ugwu stood by the door, waiting". This creates a sense of unease for the reader as we are unaware of what happens to Ugwu after the events of this text.

Could you guys mark this one as well. I will send a revised copy of the other text soon.

7/8 (a harsh examiner may give it 6)
A much improved response, and all your points are fully explained.
Can you offer a few alternative interpretations for some of your ideas?
Could you split this answer into 2 paragraphs? It seems like a very long paragraph....

oh sorry that is a different extract, i had this on my docs as well but i haven't had the time to improve it. As for the alternate ideas i will add them and send it to you

Dw, I know the extract