Can someone please mark this opening to AQA Q5 language paper 2- based on June 2022 q

Exhausted, unmotivated, depressed: everyone deserves a break!

I can remember the experience as if it was yesterday. Picture this: what was supposed to be an uplifting, unforgettable, relaxing camping trip for the whole family to enjoy- just 30 minutes away from work. Well, I can tell you that it was anything but 'unforgettable'. Day 5 out of 7 of the holiday: 6.30am. 11 missed calls. Katie from work. Concerned, I picked up the phone. Persistently, she tugged on my heartstrings, begging me to come back to work. I had no choice but to go back home- they were too short-staffed. Should a dedicated worker have to go to such extreme lengths to please her coworkers? Since then, I have not hesitated to book a flight abroad to escape the inescapable exposure to worklife whilst local.